Fluttershy is participating in a charity concert for Hearth's Warming Eve....helping backstage. She wanted to sing, really, she did....but due to a slip-up and the singer not being able to come, Fluttershy gets her chance to shine, like holiday lights.
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A short Hearth's Warming oneshot. Merry Christmas!
A cute story. I enjoyed it, but there are things that could be better.
First, the characterization was... well, it could be better. In some places the characters were doing and saying things they wouldn't normally do or say.
Second, when two characters speak, try to put what they said in two different paragraphs.
This should be in two separate paragraphs
The same here
I suggest you to try to find an editor or proofreader. Don't give up and keep writing, the story is good but needs some work.
3676715 Thanks.
Such a cute little thing this is.