Sometimes, when you leave home for a while you come back to things feeling different.
A week and you may find lots of mail.
A month and your neighbors have started using your driveway for trash can storage
A year and people wonder when your house was abandoned
Ten years and your neighbors are probably gone
A century and your house is probably demolished, and a happy cybernetic family has moved in atop its remains.
Two centuries and people would ask why you are using "classic English"
A millennium and you may find you no longer recognize what those things in the sky are, and why the floor keeps glowing for no reason
A million years and you may find your species had to abandon its home-world
A couple million years, and you would find yourself in the situation I ended up in.
Very nice story here a good intruduction of your character and hopefully more will be seen of this.
I like it a lot, I hope you update soon. Just whatever you do please don't leave me hanging.
It's Cryogenics. I was about to to start strangling 'cause of the mangling, man.
ill fix that as soon as possible. i knew something was wrong.
i very much plan to continue this. speed of updates will change over time. thanks for the comments!
Lul "Hi Mr. Alien nice to meet you heres some magic kthxbai" in all seriousness I think First Contact could have been written bett. I still look forward to the cultural exchange and more though! Tracking ^_^
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I cant agree wth you more. I refused to KO my char, and had to rewrite it three times before it even made some sort of sence.
Good, good...
Well. Here it is, the update.
I really have to force myself to put this here instead of reading it over, and checking it "just one more time!". For some reason I feel that there are a ton of errors in this chapter, please forgive the failure to use perfect grammar, tell me if I messed up anything.
Thanks for reading.
EDIT: I did try to work on the dialogue a bit more. I don't think it will be too good, but I did try to make it feel more realistic. I also fixed cryo, and cryogenic in ch1.
Um... "Posey?" "Firefly?" "Surprise?"
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I don't know who decided that April dolls meant that they could fundamentally screw up anyone updating today, but they did...
its fimfiction for April fools, not me.
anyone reading, I guess you have to save it as a text file, and use find and replace to properly read the story.
I can understand a joke, but this type of thing really makes me mad.
You can disable the april fools thing on bottom of the page "Toggle G1 Mode"
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ahh. thank you for that.
I need to learn how this system works, do new updates for stories need to be approved? It seems to me that they don't, or there is no indication of waiting for some sort of approval, yet this fic is still sitting back where it was before I updated it....
No new readers means no new reviews, no new reviews means my story could be crap, and I would just keep writing crap with no correction!
So.... I feel like I need to explain what I did at the end of this chapter.
I was not really sure about uploading this one today also. I figured that I should do it despite my never-ending urge to edit the chapter JUST ONE MORE TIME. It has been nearly a month after all... Way to long.
I do kind of dislike how I did the last part. The whole... emotion thing disagrees with me. This is the first story I have every really written ( I don't think 30 pages of how to kill barney the dinosaur from my fifth grade class counts) so I am not really too good at writing at the moment, and I feel like any emotion that I put will be corny.
Secondly there is the whole thing with freezing Rainbow Dash. I will be disliked for this, but I did have my reasons. I had to evict one of the elements of harmony, and considering the whole story Rainbow, the element of loyalty, made the most sense. I do plan on doing some sort of third person thing with her in it so none shall be deprived of the coolest of all the ponies.
Well. I hope you liked the story. Please comment if you really liked what I did, or disliked. Even more important to comment if you disliked this chapter, or something in it.
My grammar is horrible.
this man is so far in denile its not even funny anymore its just sad
Holy crap.
It has been a long time, and I can assure you this story is being worked on (rewritten.)
The first chapter, and third chapter here are so incredibly bad that I cannot help but cringe when reading them. I can... MUST... do better.
So if you are wondering where I am (and with this crap writing I doubt it) I am re-writing chapter one, or more likely procrastinating. But it will get done. albeit slowly.
Heh, I scrapped this (^) again. Rewriting for the FINAL time. I promise! (I think)