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"Our sport is your sport's punishment"- Some Cross Country runner.

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For a while in school, Button Mash didn't really pay attention to other fillies, he was basically a gamer and everyone knew that he didn't have that much friends due to him being addicted to his game. That was until one day Button Mash had to share lockers with Sweetie Belle. Not only does he have to share lockers with her, now he has to sit right behind her during class. And to make things worse for him, he is starting to feel attracted towards Sweetie Belle. Would he ever think about going out with her or even considering about asking her out? And if so, how will he be able to bring up enough courage to ask her out?

[Edit] New Smf cover art done by Nightshade6193, and it looks amazing too!

Also, thank you TheDoctor11PIfor editing the fourth chapter, it looks a lot better than it originally did!!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 61 )

This is certainly worthy of a like, but I won't favourite it (not my kind of story). Anyway, good luck in future stories.

I like the story, but grammar is important. You might want to re-read your work a few times, and then put it out. Otherwise, it's pretty good, exept button's thaughts are a little fast paced.

Yeah, sorry about the grammar. I will hard work to fix that part, thanks for reading it.

i actually got a good laugh out of that. can't really say much more until you post more chapters, though.

good work so far.

Would it be a good suggestion if sweetie belle was trying to avoid button because she secretly has a crush on him?

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Well, I will have sweetiebelles perspective on what she is thinking in the second chapter, she will be talking to rarity about something (I'm giving away to much but good suggestion

I love the idea of this, yet I'm noticing some formatting and grammar errors that make it a little difficult to read. Would you be willing to have a pre-reader and editor? If so I'd be happy to do it.

This is cute so far... Keep up the good work! But what I have to say is that it is Sweetie Bell and not sweetiebelle it isn't one word

Very nice! I'm eager for the next chapter to arrive. :)

I really like the story so far! I'm soooooo excited to see what will happen from here!:twilightsmile:

Thanks for the positive feedback
3687984 also I think that would be nice to have someone pre read it and edit for me

Good start but beware of the repetition with the names try use more pronoun

It's all moving rather too fast. Went from not even remembering her clearly to thinking he has a crush in what, an hour?

to be completely honest, it's really nice. I really like it's mane!...Sorry :unsuresweetie: I couldn't resist. If I have one thing to say, it's that wow Button sure got that idea pretty quick. I mean, not even one day and he's already willing to admit he has a crush on Sweetie? Sorry, but it just seems a little unrealistic in the pacing.

Still, I like this story. Along with favorite it too! Oh, and a Spike Moustache for good measure! :moustache:

:pinkiehappy: I love it so far, just a few grammatical/spelling errors. Maybe you can just an editor to edit the story for you ;) but overall great work :heart:

Zach, Lego says hi. :twilightsmile:

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Wtf dude
What are you doing here? :pinkiegasp:

Wait you're a brony? :pinkiegasp:

How did you even find this story? ::unsuresweetie:

So many questions.....

Anyway nice to see you too..... I feel like I am putting more time on Fimfiction.net than ROBLOX.... It feels great to actually get away from the damn website

3742085 I know the feeling.
What am I doing: Reading Fallout Equestria. (Mainly)
I'm a brony: Well, of course I am, silly! :pinkiehappy:
How I found this: Meh... You don't wanna know. :derpytongue2:

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But.... no serisouly, how did you find this story? :rainbowhuh:

3742231 Button Mash group. I always thought these two were a cute pair. :rainbowkiss:

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So have I..... and you didn't hear this, but I kinda screamed Son of a b- when you said you found it in the ButtonsBelle group..... Isn't it funny how where of all the places we could meet on the internet side from ROBLOX, it was here because of that one story in the ButtonsBelle folder..... :ajsmug:


3742298 And what a grand adventure it was! :rainbowdetermined2:
*whistling a skyrim tune*

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Have you read the story? :unsuresweetie:

And if so, did you like it?:applejackunsure:

If they're sharing a locker, why does SB get mad when he opens it? It's an honest mistake, and her reaction is a bit out of character. I have to agree with the other comments, too, the pacing of Button's thoughts is waaaaay too fast.

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Yes I am fully aware of this, and I do thank you for giving me feedback, next time, I'll try my pacing, to be honest, I truly have no excuse on why the pacing is crap.

So far so good! I love SweetieMash Ships, and can't wait for your next one! :twilightsmile:

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Third chapter is being edited as we speak

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Tell me when it's out! I CAN'T WAIT!!!! :yay:

Once again, you have done a great job! :twilightsmile:
Can't wait for the finale! :pinkiehappy:
You're a good writer :D

*hyperventilates* too cute!!! :3 Can't wait for more :raritywink:

Lol, I was actually gonna offer to edit it for you after noticing all the errors. :derpytongue2:

But if you don't want an editor. *shrugs*

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What I meant was that, I tried to get people to edit or proof read it for mistakes, but the guy that I had never responded or gave me the edited story back after a week or so, so I thought screw it for this chapter, and I did it myself. Though, if you are willing to edit my story for my next and final chapter, by all means, I'm open hands to it.

3838925 Sure. I'll see what I can do. Shall I PM you my email address? I don't know how to use Google Docs, but you can just send me the rough draft and I can send it back to you with any corrections I was able to find and make.

PS: Though I am confident in my grammar, I can't guarantee the absolute best grammar in the world. I'll help where I can, but don't expect absolute perfection.

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I don't expect it to be perfect, were humans after all :raritywink: and I guess I can put it on google docs

This is AWESOME! I :heart: ButtonBelle ships and this one is one of my favorites! :raritystarry:

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Thanks, that means alot when you say that

Good chapter, and as a freshman that plays football, swims, and runs track I know that feel bro

Are they mad are they Grinning smirking but I :heart: the story definitely :unsuresweetie::raritydespair: XD I love rarity face like that X3

Or they in love or Vs Each other? plus I also think its rad :rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2:

This is so cute!!!!!! :applejackunsure: Um... I mean cool story bro... :twilightblush:

3939976 WAUGH WAUGH WAUGHHH WAUGH WAUGH WAUGHHHHH *each draw twin revolvers and kill eachother

Comment posted by PficsFTW deleted Feb 14th, 2014

Welcome to the track and field side of the galaxy. Fuck yeah. My meet got cancelled today so it was unscheduled pony time for tonight.

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Yeah, today my meet was in the 40-30 degrees, it was good awful cold :twilightangry2:

But since I'm home now (just literally got back seconds ago) Imma do my homework and maybe start on next story :rainbowwild:

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