The young warrior Frost, is send to equestria by the Shaman Grimnir in the heat of battle. the only thing he knows is that he is there to find his true purpose. but why equestria? this world knows nothing of war and fear. Frost dont understand why he is sendt here. he is from a line of great warriors and even bears the mark of the thundermoon. he dosn´t belong here.
*reads description*
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Excuse me while i d a little jig, i have found a new story!
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Cheers
~iraqlobstah
Ok you may need to fix some spelling errors, and you may need to stop repeating names all the time I mean like try saying "The cyan pegasus" or "The rainbow maned pony" instead of repeating Rainbowdash a lot.
Well needs some revising but you have an overall excellent idea for a first story and because I have a policy of only caring only about the story I'll give you a thumbs up and a tracking.
302272
thanks man that means a lot to me. and yer i se it now that i read it aigen sory
By odins hairy balls
- my new line.
cant tell if british or cant spell
otherwise man good stuff
302419
Danish but close enought
but we learn british english in school so that might be what you are getting
302621
Well then, EXCELLENT JOB!
The young Mary Sue Generic Magic Term™, is send to equestria by the Old And Trusted Mentor™ in the heat of battle. the only thing he knows is that he is there to find his true purpose. but why equestria? this world knows nothing of war and fear. Frost dont understand why he is sendt here. he is from a line of great warriors and even bears the mark of the Mary Sue Generic Specialness™. he dosn´t belong here.
LIi dis if u kry evertim
Ok keep up the good work and like I said before it needs a bit of editing and it'll be perfect.
note: somewhere the word "I" is repeated two times in a row
Vikings + Ponies =
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Thanks for the update Brony. Just a couple of errors but they are easily excusable. Keep up the great work!
418705
thanks mate it is nice to see someone who likes the story
This story is full of win. I hope you continue, despite what the inevitable grammar nazi or troll will say. Good luck with your Sailing Exam!
594253
thanks mate this realy warms my heart
but since my preereader seems to have gone on a realy long holyday you guys have to live with my spelling errors
306577 No. Just no. Where did you learn English? And why is Frost such an overused name, character or user?
925350 i know what you meen but hey... you gota give the masses what they want
1. Log on after a month
2. see this updated
3. First update read!
4. Not disappoint!