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Hey, it's my OC! You wrote him like a true prick. I commend you, good sir!
P.S. I say this often, but I think you should read the Writing Guide and use a word processor, like GDocs or Microsoft Word. They'll help you organize and improve your writing by tenfold. The story wasn't bad, but it needs heavy grammatical work.
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That's the thing. A lot of the reason why it's messed up is because stupid Microsoft changed a lot of my correct grammar. It helps me a lot with misspelled words... but is a LYING NO GOOD SUNOVABICH when it comes to grammar. (At least mine is)
You need a pre-reader and editor. I'd be happy to oblige on both parts!
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I'll be happy to take you up on that offer (like I said, this is a special one).
About my grammar... I've gotten comments saying it needs heavy work, some saying that it's pretty damn good, and I recently checked it on a legit grammar site and the only mistakes were misspellings (everypony, nopony, etc.) and a little redundancy... Now I'm legitimately confused .
3408988 As long as you use GDocs, I'd love to help. You know my email, right?
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did you post it in the thread?
3409258 I think so. Let me check...
...no. I'll PM it to you.
I like this, has great qualities to hook a reader into it.
1. Unanswered questions.
2. an eerie atmosphere.
3. a genius feel to the story, like something I never read before.
I'll get to chapter 2 later.
~Make life an Adventure~
Mr. Flare
You should also try a soap factory. Soap is made up of 0.13% lye of how much fat, 0.38% water of how much fat. just ask me if you want me to tell you how to make soap.