Trixie tries to find a way to better herself after the events of "Magic duel". She's recruited into a... special publishing company. But when a string of disappearances leads her to a lone factory, what horrors will she find inside?
Hey, it's my OC! You wrote him like a true prick. I commend you, good sir!
P.S. I say this often, but I think you should read the Writing Guide and use a word processor, like GDocs or Microsoft Word. They'll help you organize and improve your writing by tenfold. The story wasn't bad, but it needs heavy grammatical work.
3390827 That's the thing. A lot of the reason why it's messed up is because stupid Microsoft changed a lot of my correct grammar. It helps me a lot with misspelled words... but is a LYING NO GOOD SUNOVABICH when it comes to grammar. (At least mine is)
Hey, it's my OC! You wrote him like a true prick. I commend you, good sir!
P.S. I say this often, but I think you should read the Writing Guide and use a word processor, like GDocs or Microsoft Word. They'll help you organize and improve your writing by tenfold. The story wasn't bad, but it needs heavy grammatical work.
3390827
That's the thing. A lot of the reason why it's messed up is because stupid Microsoft changed a lot of my correct grammar. It helps me a lot with misspelled words... but is a LYING NO GOOD SUNOVABICH when it comes to grammar. (At least mine is)
I like this, has great qualities to hook a reader into it.
1. Unanswered questions.
2. an eerie atmosphere.
3. a genius feel to the story, like something I never read before.
I'll get to chapter 2 later.
~Make life an Adventure~
Mr. Flare