The Trick of the Setting Sun

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This story is a sequel to Trick and The Sunset

Trixie and Sunset Shimmer, after a year of dating are about to take their relationship to the next level. The days are counting down to the wedding day. Each day brings something new for the new newly weds. Their love will only grow from here.

Follow up of Trick and The Sunset

art done by KrewellaHanoi.

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FleetlordAvatar

FleetlordAvatar #1 · Oct 23rd, 2013 · · ·

So much dawwwwwww.

Redbook

Redbook #2 · Oct 23rd, 2013 · · ·

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I hope to have more of them in the next chapter.

Cryosite

Cryosite #3 · Oct 23rd, 2013 · · ·

They chose the small town of Ponyville, while most of the ponies in town are overjoy at chance of a big wedding. But there some ponies who are not happy with one pony in the wedding.

My attempt at interpreting this:

actually, buck it. The entire long desc. needs rewriting. Here you go:

Trixie and Sunset Shimmer have been dating for a year and now their big day is coming up. the two have made plans, which include holding their event in Ponyville. Whilst some of the locals hold reservations about one of the pair, most are joyed at an excuse to celebrate something has happy as a wedding.
Will things go smoothly? Maybe Ponyville wasn't the best choice in location after all.

CodeBrony

CodeBrony #4 · Oct 23rd, 2013 · · ·

This description actually hurt my brain to read. Redbook, you really should try to find a good pre-reader/editor if the rest of your story looks like that. This sounds like a cute idea for a story, but I'm not sure I could follow it, with the current grammar.

Mooncalf

Mooncalf #5 · Oct 23rd, 2013 · · ·

Very sweet story, but to be honest... the characters don't really act much like their canon selves. They're two girls in love, but there's no real characterization beyond that. They could be Bon Bon and Lyra or Roseluck and Cherry for all they act. Aside from mentioning Trixie's past offenses, there's not much that mark her as Trixie. She even talks in first person all the time. And Rarity doesn't seem very antagonistic - at most she's a bit brusque. The description hinted at conflict, but I see none.

Sorry. The writing is good, but the story is very generic.

Ironfire Skies