Osiris, a human child is taken in my Princess Luna before she became Nightmare Moon, and this is his story when his mother is banished and he is turned to stone by Celestia's hoof.
When has "I had no other choice" EVER dissipated anger? Keep in mind also that this line is from some pony who attacked immediately when attending a diplomatic meeting.
This and his other reactions cause your "character" comes across as a plot-puppet, nothing more. This is compounded in the second chapter when we learn he has a very good reason to not get turned to stone.
Well, that was unexpected. Judging from the description it sounded like Celestia forcefully turned him to stone, not he willingly wanted her to. How is he going to "forgive her" when he's the one who told her to do it?
Eew.
DAMN, this story is like drugs! are those fingers growing out of my tits?! AM I REAL!?!?!
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only if you want to be im going to play left for dead now
When has "I had no other choice" EVER dissipated anger?
Keep in mind also that this line is from some pony who attacked immediately when attending a diplomatic meeting.
This and his other reactions cause your "character" comes across as a plot-puppet, nothing more. This is compounded in the second chapter when we learn he has a very good reason to not get turned to stone.
That was very anticlimactic, could have had more feeling to it but overall not bad!
Wow...
I can see a very great story in this
Well, that was unexpected. Judging from the description it sounded like Celestia forcefully turned him to stone, not he willingly wanted her to. How is he going to "forgive her" when he's the one who told her to do it?
To the author, you need some rewrite here, add some meat to the chapter...... Yknow?
5994775 Forgive her for banishing Luna.