A regular day in Ponyville, Rainbow sees the pony of her dreams, Soarin'.
The two seem like a good match but Spitfire shows up and is very, well, creepy.
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i would have thought that rarity would want to know everything once rainbow told her she was on a date?
I personally enjoyed this while others apparently didn't.
But I just have to say, Keep writing. Don't ever give up. 
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaase make more
well then...
Do you guys mind if I make a fanfic with my OC?
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaakward
If you haven't read my comment on your user page then go read that now. Then come back. I will do this because I'm assuming you're unsure on how you can translate what I wrote on your user page to your writing. This example right here can clear it up very well.
However I have no idea why that extra "Bye" is there...that's odd...
Hope this helps.
And yes I changed some of the dialog to fit the conversation. That "Bye" looked like it didn't need to be there, so I replaced it an extra line or two...made the context fit.
Everything about this was pretty fast.
GET OUT SPITFIRE! *leaves* Ah yes she'll never bother me again...
Oh and try to understand the "Transfer of Information" which is when someone knows something, and you have to tell the other character about it. Having a longer conversation where Spitfire says "Wait, Soarin' I know I've been clingy but...I'm over you too, and I'm here to say I'm sorry." Or something along those lines.
Eeyup, maybe I should do this with all the other chapters...nah
Great job!!! For this chapter, it's a little too short, didn't not really mention that much detail.
I expected Rainbow to be "cool" about it and try to keep it a secret but tells her friends... I wasn't expecting Rarity to be like that. If I were you...
RD: "I went on a date with Soarin last night!"
R: "Soarin? As in THE Soarin of the Wonderbolts?"
RD: "Yup."
R: "TELL ME EVERYTHING!!!"
And so on
Whaaaaaat? :P Please no Soarinjack!
Awwww :3 cute ♥
Awwwwww
Awwwwwww so cute
thank you god no sorjack