I don't have the proper amount of words to explain this story in any manner. All i can say is that this is a Rarity and Fluttershy shipping fic, its supposed to be touching, and it's G rated.
Just read it. :)
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Oi, people following this story. this was submitted to eqd and has been sent back for some editing work, so to any who see this; the story is about to change a bit, i don't think anything to significant, but ye... keep an eye out. i'll upload the edited thing as a new chapter and delete the old one so that it appears in people's inbox.
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This was a collaborative effort between myself and Halendor960. It took us about a month to write, and it was worth it.
Unlike our last collaborative efforts, we really wanted to write something of good quality. We wanted to write something that would truly suck the reader into the story, and it is my belief that we have achieved that goal.
Credit for writing the majority of the story goes to Halendor960.
However tbh, i'm not trying to be a dick to Halendor nor am trying to toot my own horn (excuse pun), this story would be very different if not for our/my editing, it would be a lot simpler, and quite a bit less descriptive. writing took about 1 week, editing was about 3.
Some may wonder why it says Co-Written by Me, and that is because, i not only edited it, but also did write a few parts. Of actual writing i wrote the Sauna scene, and the Restaurant scene (up until Rarity's focus is broken by the waiter and has to look over the menu)
thank you to: http://closer-to-the-sun.deviantart.com/ for allowing me to use the picture i touched up.
Thank you for reading
That... that is beautiful. I never truly appreciated Rarishy until now. I have only one crit-it is a little noticeable between two people's writing, but not incredibly so. Good job, please keep writing the both of you.
that was amazing.
Very cute! I really enjoyed reading it.
Yes. YES! Flarity! I just love it and don't see quite enough of them. This one is adorable and sweet. I always figured this was how their relationship would work. I noticed a few incorrect usages of some words and sort of feel the pacing was a little off, but beyond that, it's worth a favorite.
Like others have said, this is just adorable. Simplistic, but still a very cute story. Nice work guys
I'm reluctant to say this, but the ending was... way too abrupt. I hate to mention it because it was the ending I'd hoped for (I tend to hate sad endings with a passion) but it must be said. It was so sudden and out of nowhere. That said, though, I enjoyed the rest of the story. I enjoyed them mental images of them at the spa, and at the fancy restaurant. You did a great job describing both. :3
277322 part 8 is supposed be like it is so that the reader can decide how it actually all played out, imo, when fluttershy responds "i love you" i think she means it as a friend, others may see differently. I personally don't like having set endings and would like my readers to think what happened for themselves. we wanted a abrupt ending, maybe we overdid it slightly :/
maybe part 7 could have gone a bit longer, but it was a choice made by us, as a style of writing. we felt it would have a huge impact on the reader, so that it leaves them wanting to know more, letting them wonder, and come up with their own endings in their head. idk, some will like it, to be able to make their own end, others will hate us for it.
(btw thanks for the compliments on my writing, i try my best to provoke imagery)
That was..nice