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I fell into Ghastly Gorge. That’s what the doctors told me, what Rainbow Dash told me, what everypony told me. But the one thing they didn’t tell me is how I fell. But now I know, all because of Diamond Tiara, crying her eyes out begging for forgiveness after she and Silver Spoon told me everything that happened that day. To say I never expected this would be an understatement. But, here we are. Me, Diamond, and Silver all in one room together and Diamond apologizing to me. Diamond Tiara apologizing and meaning it, the one thing in my whole life I thought I’d never seen.
When Diamond and Silver first came in I didn’t know what to expect. But when they started talking about yesterday, when I fell. What I could remember from that day was me and Diamond getting into a verbal fight during school; then I went to the gorge after school to spend some time alone, spread my wings and feel the updrafts coming up from the gorge, just wishing I could fly like the other pegasi my age. Everything after that is blank, until Diamond and Silver filled in the blanks that is.
Diamond told me that she and Silver went to the same spot at the gorge that I did that day. I was expecting her to tell me that they found me hurt there, that I had somehow managed to do something stupid and fall in by myself. But the truth was far from what I expected. She told me that we fought, that she pushed me... Diamond Tiara pushed me over the edge.
She pushed me over the edge, she could have killed me! But… She didn’t mean to, it was an accident. They both ran down into the gorge to make sure I was alright... They got help, they saved me. But the only reason they had to save me was because of what Diamond did to me in the first place!
I didn’t know what to think. My body was numb from the painkillers, and now so was my mind after listening to what they said. I just stare at them. Silver Spoon is standing next to my bed, trying to force a stoic look and avoiding looking at me but I could see the tears in her eyes. Diamond is sitting on the ground next to Silver, looking down at the floor, openly sobbing and saying “I’m sorry” over and over again in a quiet whisper.
She had hurt me, but she was sorry. She caused me so much pain, but she tried to help me. I feel numb. I want to hate her but… What do I do, what do I say? She pushed me over a cliff! But if it wasn’t for her I’d be dead. But she was the one who hurt me in the first place! But she is crying over what she did. She is crying for me to forgive her. She is sorry for what she did. Diamond Tiara is crying over what she did to me.
I feel tears coming from my own eyes now. I really don’t know what to say, I don’t think there’s anything I can really say now. I reach out my hoof to Diamond slowly, it’s hard because my whole body doesn’t really want to move but I still do it. I lay my good hoof on her shoulder, as I do she looks up at me for the first time since she came into the room. Her eyes are bloodshot and tears continue to stream down her face.
“Diamond…” I start, “I’m… I’m not sure if I can forgive yo-“ I can’t even finish before she removes my hoof from her shoulder and stands back up, staring at the ground.
“I understand… I’m a bad pony and you don’t want anything to do with me…” she says as she starts to turn and walk away… I can hear her choking back sobs as she begins to walk away.
“Wait!” I cry out to her, “let me finish… please.” Diamond stops, and turns her head to face me, “I don’t think I can f-forgive you…” Diamond flinches at my words, “not yet. I still don’t know what to really think about… this… B-but when I get out of here… maybe we can… talk some more?”
“T-talk?”
“Y-yeah… like at school, like… during lunch or on the playground.”
“Like… F-friends?”
Friends? She wanted to be friends? I’d never even given that possibility a thought before… I’ve always seen her as a spoiled rotten brat who bullies everypony she thinks below her… But now, with what she told me during her story about how she and Silver were bullied… and why they bully me and my friends now. Because they wanted to be viewed as the strong ones so that others wouldn’t try to bully them…
Could we be friends? After everything she did to me and my friends...
“I’m not sure we could be friends... at least not yet. But maybe we could be… maybe…”
I’ll remember what happened next forever. Diamond slowly came closer to me… she wrapped her legs around me… Diamond Tiara was hugging me while slowly sobbing into my neck… I wrap my one good front leg around her and return the hug. I don’t think I need to say it anymore, I’m sure my action speaks for itself. That I forgive her for what she did. Though I’m still not sure about being friends but maybe, just maybe, we could be.
We didn’t speak after that; there was nothing left to say. The nurse came in soon after and ushered them out of the room saying that visiting hours were over. We said our good byes and they left.
As I lay in the bed, in my dark room, I started to think about everything that had happened… I was hurt by someone I hated, but then they helped me and now I’ve forgiven them. Maybe all that happened to me is actually good. There was so much I’ve learned, so much that everyone involved learned. Sure, I’ve felt pain and anguish but my pain isn’t important anymore; it’s numbed away and in the past.
Only thing left to do now is heal.
…I close my eyes…
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Yes I know this is a short chapter but I didn’t want to draw it out more. I wrote what I felt needed to be written and nothing more.
Where is a sequel?!
This was so well written for a short story 
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Does it need a sequel?
I wasn't planning on one and at this time I feel as though it doesn't need one.
Though I am overly enjoyed that you liked my story.
But.. but...
SIGH
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I like it.
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I am actually planning on getting a proofreader to go over this and maybe rewriting some bits at some point.
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A follow up would be interesting. If you'd like, I could help you out with the proofreading bit.
Other then a few grammatical flubs-- like "Hay" instead of "Hey" and "Leavened" isn't a word at all-- but I did enjoy the story and I think that it would be good in my Villainous Redemption Group.
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Now I'm wondering where the hell the word "Leavened" is in this story and what it was supposed to be. Also leavened is a word but I'm guessing my spell check threw it in there because I'm sure I never talked about baking bread during this story at all.
Just more reasons why I should eventually stop being lazy and go back and fix this story up more.
4512968 I think you should do a sequel after you rewrite, 'cause this story is cool
I hope you can find more words for pain.
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Thanks! Glad to see them revisions and edits I've done actually get appreciated.
You hit all the notes correctly. I found myself thinking about this fic long after reading it. What else is there to say besides bravo, sir.
This looks good
i found this song so fitting to listen to while so fitting,seriously the parallels are crazy!
Great work on the story!
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Maybe I should add YOU to the list editors that helped me with this because it seems you catching so much stuff my other editors missed.
Third ‘to?’ -Looks at the sentence in question- Wah? Well it seems that I managed to somehow mess that up. …one of those ‘to’s was supposed to be an ‘or’ actually. FIXED!
I’m glad you’re enjoying the story and that I’m getting the reactions (sort of) that I wanted to get from my reader.
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...gah, I just now realized a mistake of my own when suggesting that fix! For some reason, I was completely glossing over the word "think" in the sentence, so that made my note completely ridiculous. Sorry if I confused you!
On to the next contender...
5476541 Sure thing. I'll keep the notes private from now on.
Hmm. I liked your story and I faved it - a while ago now.
It takes a special place in my "Things you should read"-box.
And I even reference this story in other comments to show HOW one write character development, interaction, immersion and what not.
But somehow I never wrote a comment, thanking you for writing this fine work.
Really - its one of the most impressing things I ever read.
No exageration. It is really moving and creates intensive feels. Sad and thoughtfool with an interesting glimpse of hope.
So simply: Thank you for writing this story.
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Well thank you for your kindness and I'm happy I could be used as a reference for how to do something right... that actually means a lot to me. No Joke.
I believe this should be "our"
btw great story, you did an amazing job!
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A. It's supposed to be through.
B. Actually I just looked that up after you pointed it out to me. What I have written down is correct then what you said it should be. (which is a different word all together) Really I should change it to 'dry-heaving' which is the most correct version in that situation.
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C. Darn it I always write HAY instead of HEY... Surprised none of the poof readers caught that.
Thanks for pointed out those errs for me by the way (besides that 2ed one which wasn't really an err)
Gotta ask...
Any actual comments on the story besides pointing out my grammar and spelling mistakes?(which I do appreciate by the way)6345316
Never-mind! You ninjaed me on that one while I was writing this comment out.
excellent story. had me very emotionally charged and involved.
7150792 Ah, I see... Sorry, English isn't my first language.
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6345334 I'm sorry, were my ninja skills too much?
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Huh... I'm surprised no one pointed out this err sooner... (also it's fixed now! Thanks for pointing that out)
Thanks! I'm always worried that I may be misrepresenting a character but to hear that I did it perfectly really warms my poor little writers heart.
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying! It makes me happy to know that the first story I wrote on Fimfiction still gets some attention and accomplishes it's goals.
Thank you for taking the time to read.
7151312 yes I appreciate the bitter sweet ending that held hopes for Scoots and Diamond o get through this and come out better for it.
I also loved how you wrote Silver Spoon as the more calm and rational one while DT was in shock and full panic mode.
I love how Silver stood by Scoots as best she could. Silver was a real trooper.
Wow... This is better than I expected... I love it!!!!!!!!!
The part about Scootaloo's blood on Rainbow's fur touched me most.. I know it was in a different chapter but hey you got me reading and I couldn't stop
Very well written, powerful, all that good stuff.