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Anything where DT gets what she deserves interests me. I'll see where this goes. It's well written with the dual perspectives but there are a few grammatical errors here and there. Still, looking forward to the next installment.
This is an awesome idea, it is also very easy to read, I love it.
Can't wait for the next!
3252564 damn it! grammar is always a problem for me...where exactly r the errors that u saw and what should i have done instead? knowing that will let me make corrections...
Omg! You actually got the accent mostly correct :D ! Almost everyone fails at the southern accent. Only problem is the ya'll. she's only addressing one person. Use 'ya' instead. Im gonna like this and watch this as you got it mostly correct except for that one small thing I already mentioned.
3252566 oh i have plans my little pony...
3253430 i do a bit of role playing in text format, and sometimes give the characters accents or manners of speaking that r unique to them so i have a bit of experience. still, a southern drawl is not the easiest accent to do, give me a Scotts accent any day..
3253466 you did good. I personally think it's the easiest. Then agian, I have the same accent :P
Can't wait to read the next. Make diamond suffer in delight.
3253491 as i told another...ive got plans my little pony...oh yes, ive got plans for our dear Diamond Tiara...
Whatever it is that Apple Bloom has in store for Diamond Tiara, I've my fingers crossed that what goes around, comes around.
3253557 oh, i have plans...but nopony will be...permanently damaged...i dont think...it will depend a lot on if Pinkie decides she needs to interfere...that mare is just plain loopy...
3252568 Sugar Cube Corners
Should be Corner.
pushed herself op into a sitting position
That op should be up.
over the contents, these would be coming into
These two thoughts should be separated either by a semicolon or , but to indicate they are a compound sentence.
Diamond tried to escaper her
Should be escape.
Just a couple things here and there, nothing major. Hope it helps
3255823 a great many thanks! now i can go through this and edit it...
3256673 No problem. Can't wait for chapter 2
3258522 that might take a little bit of time...
3258942 Perfectly understandable. There certainly is no deadline for you to meet, and waiting on it isn't going to be too awfully difficult for the rest of us
Well that was kinda weird
3286921 and now that DT is largly helpless, even greater fun can be had...
Huh.....
that was weird. Umm.....k, next?
3332158 well, i thought it was fun, but in time she might earn her limbs back depending on how good she is...
3332402 Its certainly umm..... interesting? I am curious to see more.
3336781 I had planned for a triple taking at one point (not saying who would be in on that!) but now im not so sure how it would be taken, given the general reaction to the last chapter
3336968 Not saying it was bad or anything. It's just that no one was expecting any amputee action. Lol.
3339771 yeah, so im not sure if it was a good thing or not given the reactions...
3339828 Hey man, whatever the reactions, it's your story. Stick with it and do what you want.
3341747 i thank u for ur advice...and as this is the case, prepare urself...for some even weirder stuff. to put it mildly, the excrement will be hitting the rotary cooling device later in the story. Diamond pissed off a lot of ponies...and they all want a piece of her...
3342251 Very well good sir.
this is twisted.... I love it
im crying tears of joy
3381728 well, im glad ur enjoying the story...i do have more situations planned, but im always willing to take a suggestion or two. if u have a poiny ud like to see, or something ud like to see done to old DT, let me know! im sure we can come to an agreement...
3735540 i will not mince words with anyone, her character is that of a brat and so i portray her as a brat. her father is filthy rich, both in terms of his name and his bank account. that u happen to like Diamond is not my concern, but i would ask that u keep ur comments limited to constructive criticism, rather than insults...those i will delete...no exceptions...
Twist, Featherweight, all 4 of the CMC in the character tag area? Will there be a gangbang?
4130016 well, Diamond pissed off a lot of ponies in her time...there very well might be...as soon as Bloom and her friends get done playing with her at any rate...
4130542 I'm really just waiting for the Twistweight, or whatever you have planned for them later.
4130547 oh...i have plans...i think people will be more than a bit surprised (or not, this is Diamond Tiara were talking about) at just how many others she pissed off...i kep it to foals in the tags as i wasnt allowed to use any more than that...
4130568 Just use the other tag and say it is all the ponies she was being a bi
to.
Ah, torture. It's been a while since I've read a fic like this.
This is shaping up to be really... I'm trying to figure out how to say "scary" but make it sound like a good thing.
This is some pretty good writing, especially for an anthro fic. Can't wait to see what else you have in store for DT.
Why did sweetie have to be raped?!
Why not scootaloo or twist, but sweetie?!
Anyway good story
Bueno!
4657138 she kept outscoring Diamond on test after test, and since Diamond doesnt believe in doing her own studying, well...she made a few assumptions that made sense to her and then made a plan to force Sweetie to throw a few tests to lower the grade average and let her coast through a class with minimal effort
Wow..... I can't believe I'm actually liking this.......
4657600 well, i am glad that u r, a writer always likes to know that their work is appreciated...
4657152 makes sense.
4658213 yeah, originally i was gonna have it be a plot to steal Sweeties colt friend...then this happened...
4658392
Took a hard right didn't it?
4660143 a left actually, then it looped, twirled and did three barrel rolls!
4660154
And a back flip while doing a front flip, you know at the same time.
4660206 with a triple chocolate twist for a finisher...
4660224
And a cherry to top it off and then you build another one, parallel to the ruined childhood desert we made.
So it looks like a sand clock
4660282 alright...now thats just evil...