I couldn't wait. Twilight was finally going to fly for the first time, in front of crowds of thousands that couldn't help but cheer her on! At least, that's what I thought at the time. Now, Twilight's the laughing-stock of Equestria, and it's all my fault. I'm not even sure if I should even try to fix what I did to her.
A Rainbow Dash and Princess Twilight Sparkle friendship fic, imitating the style of the show.
Edited by my stepmother.
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good story
*hides in shadows*
I'll be watching
this is really good! is this gonna lead to a twidash sequel?
3240555 I fully intended this to be a one-off story, but I might do a sequel later. For now, I'm going to be focusing on an Equestria Girls fanfic.
And thank you for the praise. I was genuinely worried this fic would go horribly wrong.
I think you did a great job writing but I didn't love the plot line
Rarity is like me there when i proove my friends wrong...
3243826 Do you mind telling me why? Was it how the characters were handled, or the premise of the story? Something else? I know I have a long way to go in my writing and I'd like some constructive criticism if you could give it.
I just mean I didn't love the premise of the story, I don't know, it just didn't work for me
..... they seemed out of character to me. but w/e.
felt kinda dull.