"I am the Aloof Hermit, the Lord of the Empty Seat. I am the Alpha and the Omega"
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So much fetish appearing out of nowhere, but beside that it's a good story overall
Nice story, but there's some stuff you may want to edit. First, is the villain's name Nadira or Alecto? You seem to go back and forth on that. Next:
That should be "hooves" and "back-legs" respectively.
I'm pretty sure that should be "orgassmm" and "buckets", based on the dialogue.
And lastly, that should be "gulps". I really look forward to more.
aw, a tail mouth? it feels like a bit of a cop-out, especially when she demonstrated that her normal mouth is perfectly capable of doing the job.
all that being said, hurray for more vore!
This was pretty great. There are a ton of typos but otherwise I see no issues.
The ending sure cries out for this fanfic to get a sequel.