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Dark Avenger
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Dark Avenger
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Dude I fucking love the Swans
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Good for you!
Also: It's Swans, not "the Swans"...
3224259 ...I would say semantics....but...in this case...No...its Swans...
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I like to think it's the same as how no one ever says "I love the Metallica" (or at least not without being called out for it...
)
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Why be ashamed (of hatred)?
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i always liked A Long, Slow Screw because it seemed more doomish than when they play shit at normal speeds.
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Some of it does, some of it doesn't. Seal it Over (coming soon!) isn't that slow, yet it currently tops my list of their most brutal shit, right next to the Young God EP.
If you like this kind of stuff, though, then stick around. This is only the beginning...
And then there's this, too...
Dark, you have such Dark tastes~ Its actually quite invigorating~
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Thank you!
Brother, what are you doing on the cover image?!
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Loving it, Dark~
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Many thanks!
What was the most enjoyable about it?
3255670 Just the fact your writing style is so vague compared to my blatant writing, but still shows a good visual.
Also, dark for Dark = perfect
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If you're referring to my alias, it was not intentional on my part. Just something I made up almost a decade ago. Thanks, though!
(Or were you talking about me adding this to that group?
)
As for my writing... it's still nothing compared to stuff like this...
That slave thing in Twilight's care?
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I'm thinking Snails and Trixie.
Rarity and skininning oneself is not advised, even if Fancy Pants does something rapey.
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I planned to leave a subtle suggestion toward who the stallion really is (in my mind, at least) but this chapter is already a bit too long...
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I think we know him pretty well...
The filthy pony from the CMC's song. Let's call him Pigpen
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Slaves don't require names
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Whatever you prefer...
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i.chzbgr.com/maxW500/2337205504/h47226B45/
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Here's a debate topic to go with my,
, statement.
Celestia usually refers to Twilight as her "faithful student", and the other character as "my little ponies", more often then reffering to them by name... What do you think?
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I think the appropriate response would be that her subjects keep saying things like "as Celestia is my witness..."
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So they are saying they are so reliant on her, they have her name included in a variey of phrases.
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To quote a certain song that inspired one of these stories: "I WORSHIP YOUR AUTHORITY"
Either the ponies are that submissive, or she is powerful enough to command such reverence from otherwise free-willed individuals. We don't know fully what her reign is like, so...
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Now that you've mentioned it, the thought of leaving out a few details has been bugging me all day.
Chapter has been updated...
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And it all boils down to the Lunar Republic or Solar Empire once again.
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*sigh*
If I must, though... ALL HAIL THE SOLAR EMPIRE!
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And it comes full circle.
(Suddenly clops).
Did he make her suck his nipple? Sexy. (Dammit Brain.)
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Not sure I need to actually clarify that...
3316756 NO. It is beautiful the way it is
(Cracks knuckles) Alright then, lets get this review started...
First of all: I would suggest adding an [AU] tag, mainly because if Rarity killed herself or Big Mac was a murderer then that would really throw off the next season of MLP. (Or at least an author's note in the story desription.)
Second: Grammar was quite good. The only real mistake I noticed was a paragrah in Big Mac's chapter (I think). There was a random new line started in the middle of a paragraph.
Third: I dislike how in some chapters there isn't much of an explaination as to how they got where they are for instance: Spike's chapter, Derpy's chapter, and Big Mac's chapter all (mostly) explained how or why they were there in the first place. Spike = slave, Derpy = unloved, Big Mac = just plain crazy. Whereas in Pinkie's chapter and the unicorn slave's (who I can't name) chapter there wasn't any reason for them being there or feeling that way. That's how I felt anyway.
Fourth: I fail to see any real plot (get your mind out of the gutter) to these stories. When I say plot I mean... how to best say this... Like, there is no real point to reading these because nothing really happens.... I hope you're getting this because I am having a hard time to put it into words. I think I'm quoting someone when I say "A story should start with a question and should arrive at the answer. The question could be a simple one such as 'this person likes this person, what happens?' Or it could be a complex one like 'is war bad?'" I am finding it hard to find that question in these stories.
While I respect the talent it takes to write something like this I don't really want to read any more because I just feel like it is all just kind of... there. Nothing about it really reels me in and makes me want to come back.
I hope you liked your review
which story should I do next?
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Alright! Some lengthy feedback!
Hmm... well, if you're up for it, I have yet to see a lengthy response to this...
In defense of my story (I still respect, and am grateful for your opinion, of course):
1) As the description states, these stories are inspired by and based on songs by the band Swans (which are meant to be listened to along the way), the writing itself emulating the frontman's style. The main reason I did these was because I haven't seen anyone else try this kind of writing before (the content itself probably, but not the actual presentation), and was curious about how people would react.
2) Indeed, there is no central "plot," but I would say there is a central "theme." These stories simply attempt to take a certain element of the show and "reinterpret" them in a much, much more bleak environment (all characters so far are canon, by the way). Think of it as a "snapshot" of the events as they unfold, the subtle details hinting at the full extent of what is going on, or the lack of them letting the reader decide for themselves (e.g "why is Rarity where she is, in the condition that she is in, and who is she after?")
In some of the coming chapters, however, there will be some more "coherent" stories being told (their complexity progressing along with the songs that they are based on).
3) Regarding character "deaths": It might just be the effect of the countless banal Cupcakes-clones out there, or my own failure to deliver the message through my writing, but not all the characters in these stories appear to have a firm grasp on reality. In other words: not all is as it seems...
I like this because it's amazing, yet makes me want to puke at the same time. Like a Baconator for my brain. Okay, not exactly like a Baconator. This fic doesn't make me hate myself.
Edit: It is exactly like a Baconator in every way except it's not a sandwich.
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Glad you enjoyed it! I believe that's the effect that I was aiming for...
Well, that was disturbing... but I like disturbing stuff.
That shows some ponies in quite interesting perspective. My favourite chapters were Scootaloo's, Rarity's, Derpy and Big Mac's, which actually reminded me of another song, "O'Malley's Bar", by Nick Cave and The Bad Seeds (which is basically a sweet, 14 minutes long ballad about a guy, who went to a bar and murdered everyone inside).
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"Scootaloo's chapter"?
Oh, you mean the first one?
Well, I did leave these open to interpretation... 
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Now I'm rereading the first chapter, and I'm more convinced that it's Fluttershy... (how could I miss "doormat"?