My name is Fluttershy. I am currently a resident at the Canterlot Maximum Security Prison, more specifically in the Psychiatric ward. This place has many Nice Ponies with the Clean White Coats that work here. They talk to me a lot. There is one pony here who says he is a doctor. He talks to me the most. He tells me that I’m sick and I need help. He wants me to talk about what happened before I met him. He wants to know what happened back at the party. He wants me to tell him why I did what I did to Her. I would tell him, but I can’t trust him. He thinks I’m crazy.
The Voices told me that.
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Ah. Asylum knockoff, I see.
This story struck me as sad and dark at the same time. I guess that was what you intended to do though. I really liked it, so I'm just going to say "Well done." I enjoyed it quite a bit.
"The Voices told me to kill the Nice Ponies with the Clean White Coats, then kill me friends." Is that supposed to be "then kill my friends." or was it intentional?
Great story btw
3130939 Not really. I had the idea for a while now but only got around to posting it now. Thanks for the comment.
3130951 Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
3131144 Urg! I did that so many times and I thought I got them all.
Thanks for pointing it out and commenting.
Nice, I really enjoy Fluttershy's mindset.
3131417 when I first started reading, I got a Gollum/Smeagol vibe, I was thinking to myself "I don't know when when Fluttershy turned into Smeagol, but I think i like it..."
I give you a 4.5/5 rating on this piece
I think you should write a sequel about what happens when Fluttershy escapes the Psych Ward, I would definitely read it!
I just woke up. That's my excuse for not writing a multi-paragraph essay praising this story.
I'm just going to say that I enjoyed this story a lot. You managed to capture the paranoia and madness beautifully. It really sounded like it was being told by a madmare.
Now I'm going to have to excuse myself again, I'm going to read the other story later because I have to head to the big city and buy a UK-plug to EU-plug power adapter for the new PSU I bought from Amazon UK.
I enjoyed it so much i put a read of it up on youtube, hope you like it!
(its still uploading as im writing this so give it a few min lol, im just impatient)
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Y'know, I don't really do sequels very often. I prefer, for the most part, to leave more continuous endings to my readers' imaginations.
However, if I do make a sequel, sure. You can proofread. If I remember. I have a bad memory. Seriously. What were we talking about?
Shut up, AJ. I know I make bad jokes. AT LEAST I DIDN'T MAKE A PUN.
I'll just get back on topic now.
What was the topic?
Go away, Twilight.
Sorry, I had a lot of sugar earlier today.
Anymoo, yes. IF I make a sequel and IF I remember, you can proofread. I even made a note somewhere so I will (probably) remember. The promise of a reading tempts me to write.
I make no promises.
Whelp, I feel I have wasted enough of your time with this
rambling rantcomment. Thank you for your time.Am i the only one who doesn't know who "Her" or "New Student" was?
Oh wait. Just saw the character tags. My brain noped. Never mind.
5459409 Her seems to have been Derpy.