Gonna track this so I can read it later, sounds very interesting.

This intriges me....Tracking.

Just going to take this as a first.

I wonder what Phantom will do when he sees that EVERY perso is a pony.

Freak Out Sequence, COMMENCE!

Oh and was wondering if you could send me the link that you have as a cover art?

>>271131271131

This is a first for published, but I've been writing stories for people for six years. Also the changes in style are changes in the times I write.... I don't know why its just sorta how I do it...

And I'd love to send you the link, I ended up picking it up off google, but I can't seem to find the direct link. I want to give credit to the artist, but I can't seem to find the picture again.

>>271146271146: I think you kinda misunderstood me.

I said FIRST as in first comment. Didn't want to cause any trouble there...sorry.

>>271173271173

Oh it's fine. I wasn't upset, so no trouble at all!

Dawwwwww

Can't wait to see more of this story Lieutenant Bubbles

BUT WHERE ARE EVERYONE ELSES SOULMATES?!?!?!

TOO MUCH SUSPENSE

>>283343283343 Heres the way it goes:

Each part is a different pony's soulmate's story. This just got longer than I expected... Don't worry, they are coming

Interesting progress for these two, I cannot wait for Twis selective explanation for his condition and how the other will react to that effect of the spell.

Good work so far, but where is Ponytown?

>>298401298401

ponytown? do you mean ponyville?

>>298401298401

Between Ponyville and Ponycity, east of Ponyburg, and west of Ponygrad

Update!

I am working on chapter five, however the spring changeover at work has been taking up aost ask of my time. The chapter should be up in less than a week but sadly there are no guarantees until ater my boss finally lets me get some sleep and I get to have a meeting with my coauthor and character, silver wrench.

.

He hasn't been credited yet since phantom is wholly my creation, but he is a major part of part 2. So heres hoping I can get this story up a little faster without sacrificing quality

>>283343283343

They are coming. I swear.....

DAMN CLIFFHANGERS

That was... sad. Are the people all going to be from Earth or will it be a mix with both Earth and Equestria, also will it include other places besides Earth and Equestria?

That was sad, even with having knowledge of Lieutenant Bubbles' draft of this chapter before hand didn't ready myself.

And I don't need to say it here, because Lt Bubbles already knows I am dying for the next chapter.

>>339431339431

Right now, six loves are from earth, and one is from equestria.  I'm not a huge fan of crossovers, so I didn't really want to do any here. The biggest reason six are from earth is because i started out wanting to play with how people would react to waking up as ponies, and thing snowballed from there.

That was SO sad........

>>340892340892: So 6 are going to be from Earth? So you have all the ponies that are going to be the "soulmates" of the other 6 ponies involved in the spell?

So are all the other "soulmates" already chosen?

Cause if not.......I can help you there bro

>>340992340992

Yes, they have all already been chosen. I've got most of this story sketched out, its getting down the fine details of events, location, and discussions, that takes forever. It's also a major lack of time. When I have time to write, I'm writing, but it is not often that I have a chance so I'm writing about a chapter and a half at each shot.

>>342334342334: Well atleast yu have it sketched out so you don't have to waste time thinking of new ideas all the time.  

>>342348342348

Yeah. Plus the weekly meetings with Silver wrench help. He's actually also a character in the story, so much of his stuff I'm getting straight from him.

I meant for this to be a ten chapter short, but with my love of Equestria, and my enormous imagination, it just sort of evolved into something so much bigger.

>>342420342420:Yeah.....Equestria always brings alot of Imaginaton from people....you can do ANYTHING there.

>>342434342434

Well, I try not to go overboard. I did write a fantasy once where anything could happen, and gave up after three paragraphs. Without some sort of general rules, I get entirely lost.  Part of what takes my writing so long, is that I do research. Chapter five took forever because I had to research Theater disasters, and all the rest of it.   I keep watching the episodes to try and make sure I'm getting the Canon characters personalities right. I hate being the writer who changes the way a character acts because it makes my story easier to write.

The Phantom of the Opera meets Very Interesting

A Texan man for ?

An athlete for ?

A upper class non-snob for ?

Pinkie and Twilight would require peopler with similair interests but still complement them.

is a Muffin  

>>347816347816

Sorry wookie, I'm not going to give any spoilers

Soon you'll find out special somepony number two!

d'awwwwww, whos getting done next?

If it were that easy for a squabble between friends to cause the spell over Discord to break, he would have escaped the moment Celestia banished Luna to the moon.

>>350577350577

That I will reveal, Starting with Chapter eight, Part two is about Applejack.

>>350687350687

The spell hasn't broken, but squabbles between the holders of the elements of harmony weaken it. It was weakened when Luna was banished, that's why it was able to (in my opinion) be broken at the start of season two.  Their fight weakened it significantly, but didn't last long enough to break it. You'll just have to wait and see how this works out. I have a very definite plan that I hope you will find makes sense in the end.

Grab you machine guns boys, we've got a draconiquis to slay! *removes cigar while bowing a circle of smoke into the air* You man the bakooka, its time to kick some ###! *cocking his sub-machine gun out of safety*

Part 1 has been fininished with a daaaaaaaaaaawwwwww moment along with Princess Luna becoming thine mother art thou Phantom...... Great way to expose the inner-jealosy Twilight is beginning to fuel.

Poor Silver Wrench, he is going to learn that apple bucking ain't fun.......

>>357348357348

Things only go downhill from here I'm afraid... Part 2 is one that I need my most consultation because Silver Wrench was a Marine and so I have to go and talk to actual Marines to learn things....  One of them worked on a farm so that's where that whole Idea came from.

And no, it's not fun, especially when..... apples.... Poor silver....

Cliffhangers...

Cliiiiifhanger!!!!

Great writing as always, I guess Applejacks number came up.

>>358441358441

sort of. i just throw darts at the wall and whomever i hit is next.....

>>358504358504 Well, that's a way to do it, I guess

Yeppers.

I know you're working on Applejack right now, but I've had a random thought. What if two members of the mane 6 turned out to be matches? Like Twilight and Pinkie Pie or something, but I only said that because I'm a hardcore TwiPie fan. Whatever, it's your story

The writing is really uneven. Again, show, don't tell.... reveal details, don't laundry-list them. Don't tell us the character is shy or has certain fantasies, reveal them as you go.

The namedropping is pretty gratuitous, and not done very smoothly.

Applejack is really out of character. A complete stranger has, with an enormous bang, appeared out of nowhere smack dab in the MIDDLE of her orchard and is gawping at everything, including his own body. Considering this very thing just happened a week or two ago with Phantom, Applejack ought to at least have a clue as to what's just happened. A realistic reaction would be for her to approach him cautiously, tell him to stay put and go hollering for someone to fetch Twilight because ANOTHER dang hyoo-mon has fallen out of the sky. "Howdy, nice to meetcha, well back to bucking apples" is NOT a realistic response.

HIS reaction, sci fi fanboy or not, is completely unrealistic too. If anything he should be having a WORSE reaction because he's a sci fi fanboy--- nobody reacts well when the stuff they were just reading about starts happening in real life.

He should be confused, disoriented, suffering from shock and dismorphia, wary if not outright hostile and on a highly defensive footing (he's a SOLDIER, folks, and he's just been abducted by forces unknown, yet he's not REACTING like one.) He shouldn't even be able to WALK yet, and would probably spend not a few minutes trying to determine if he was hallucinating. Or plain outright screaming "oh God oh God where are my hands".Of all possible reactions, "oh hello talking pony in a hat, need help picking apples?" is not on the list.

>>358601358601

You'll just have to wait and see. I won't promise anything though. Most of the story is fleshed out already though....

>>358650358650

Alright, First off, if my style of writing offends you, I apologize, but it is the way I write, and that's that on that subject.

Secondly, THe events with phantom happened over a month and a half, and nopony saw him materialize, Fluttershy, and Fluttershy alone found him after he dropped out of the sky. So nopony knows just how he got there, and therefore Applejack would not run off to twilight expecting it.

THIRD) Every reaction and sentence of Silver Wrench is carefully edited by my co author, of the same name. The character is based on an actual person, and he is ninety percent of the input into the character. The man was a Marine in Motor-T, and is also a major sci fi fan. I based the characters reactions on his responses, and am writing the character the way he asks, since it is essential him in the story.

I do not, nor have I or will I ever claim to get every little detail perfect in the writing, I write the reactions of the Canon characters as best I can based on what I can figure out of their personalities from the show. In every episode, there is no indication that AJ would EVER be rude or non-accepting of another pony.

Also, since you bring it up, I will reveal a part of the story earlier than I intended. There is a reason that the new ponies are able to more easily accept their situation, and it has to do with the spell. If you want to know more I suggest you wait for the story to be closer to finished. There are a total of nine(9) parts, and we just started two(2),

Now, you seem to be ignoring major things. If you read, it is stated that time passes, I don't use exact measurements because I don't like to, and so with two passes of A few and Several weeks, (note the S) you cannot assume that it has only been a week or two. So forgive me If I don't take you seriously.

>>RealityCheck

Thank you for trying to dictate my own actions.

My character in Lt Bubbles' story just survived a explosion (or some how completely being by the explosion by the teleport).

He (or rather I) in the story is some what out of it, as far as Silver Wrench knows he is ether dead or this is a dream. And since Silver Wrench is basically me I would NOT be hostel; It is not in me. Any ways a real soldier, air men, sailors or me a Marine (don't call marines soldiers we don't like it) would asset the situation before making a action. As in the real world in combat, hasty uneducated guesses can get people killed. Another consideration is that Silver Wrench is in a state of shock (survived or miss a lethal exposition), and thus the usual thinking and response stop applying and start to accept the mental input he receives from his own surroundings. Which many accident reports describe how some people act in a state of shock. "Oh my leg came off, excuse me buddy can you help me reattach this leg" was words spoken by a  man who was a victim of a accident where a truck hits him.

>>363208363208

Well, apparently you don't take constructive criticism, so we might as well be blunt.

YOUR PORTRAYAL IS STILL UNREALISTIC AND YOUR WRITING IS THEREFORE BAD.

Your character is simply NOT BEHAVING like a real person would. Even given the excuse that he thinks he's dreaming or hallucinating, he would be demonstrating a great deal of disorientation and shock--- followed rapidly by denial, panic, anger, despair and (eventual) acceptance (generally well into the story, not on the first page). That is a REALISTIC response to being abducted and crammed into a deformed, alien body.....None of which being demonstrated here. The author of "Through the Eyes of Another Pony" skipped that, and played against it for laughs, and did it well.

You are not that author.

Your portrayal of Applejack is ALSO unrealistic, given her character and the circumstances of the story.

You want to write a character you have to set aside what YOU would want to do in that situation, or even what you WISH you would do in that situation, and accurately portray what someone with their background and circumstances WOULD do. To do otherwise is called bad writing.

>>366374366374

Sir, until you can post a story yourself, I am not going to take you seriously. I have looked through your other comments, and I am inclined to think that you enjoy tearing apart other peoples work. As far as what I say to you, this is over. Please note, that there is a reason for everything in the story, and I want you to keep reading, because all your criticism will be taken care of in part 5 (yes, you'll just have to wait). Again, If my style offends you I apologize, but that's how i write.

Also, constructive criticism is defined as criticism or advice that is useful and intended to help or improve something, often with an offer of possible solutions. Your so called constructive criticism,comes across as an attack, not as criticism. Consider the way you say things before you get angry that people attack. Also consider that as a writer and a Theater professional, I might have a clue as to what I'm doing. Have you ever heard of hidden elements? Things that aren't seen that are explained later?

If you want to offer criticism and advice, I'd be happy to listen, but not when it comes across an attack, and definitely not when what is complained about shows that you have not been paying attention. Let me point this out. Chapter 1 they cast a spell, and in Part 1 you learn that Twilight is figuring out more about how the spell works, so it would follow that there is more to learn still...

If you want to discuss the story, I will be happy to, but I will no longer do so through comments. You can PM me, and I will respond, but I will not respond to comments from here on.

>>348045348045

derpy should have a giant talking muffin...

lolnvm prolly a lonely baker or something.

me thinks that one of their soulmates should be a girl... for the lulz.

Prolly Dash if you do a lesbian pairing.

>>366787366787

I like those Ideas. I might just have to write that story... "Derpy and the giant muffin man......." Interesting...

I don't usually do lesbian pairings mostly because I suck at writing them. I have no experience with those so I can't really get any of the details right.... \

But I can do a separate story as an attempt if you'd like.

gwah?.?.?.?. did he just give the troll face to fluttershy?

p.s. if u are looking for an editor or something i would love to help with this story in any way i can. so i can learn how this whole fanfiction process works.

FIRST!!!

Spike is getting curious, Silver is in over his head; I want more!

things are getting complicated and confusing... just like my excuses for not doing homework.

perfect.

Chapter Ten is on the way! It's going to be a little bit before I can get the chapter up, I only have a couple of hours this week where I can write. I'm working on a few stories simultaneously so I will be updating as I finish.

For all the Phantom Fans, he now has his own side story. This is the detailed version of how he and Fluttershy fell in love.  It's found here http://www.fimfiction.net/story/17853/Phantom-and-Fluttershy

Happy reading!!!

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Hi, everypony! Stalin the stallion here, bringing yet another installation of Stalinview!

Let's dig into "Seven Ponies, Seven Trials, Seven Loves"!

Everypony ready?

I am. But Misha is out buying vodka. He said he'll join us a little bit later.

Okay, then. Let's start as we are

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"Heart and Hooves"

"Hearts". Many of them

"Spike had found a girl dragon to date"

WHAT?!?!?!?!

Dude. Erase that line. Erase it and never remember it. This is an order.

"and looked at the book that had caused him to bend a few scales"

Bend a few scales? How is it?

“Oh. Oh boy, this is gonna take some work….”

The rest of the ponies had gathered outside of Fluttershy’s house and were eagerly awaiting the arrival of Twilight

You need stars (***) to divide paragraphs. This look kinda confusing.

No offence, but your pacing is a little bit off. Everything feels kinda... forced. Try to do more descriptions...

For example:

"The faded book flew out from Twilights bag and opened to the pages of the spell in front of her. Everypony read through it."

You're just stating things. You're telling reaer what's happened instead of showing or describing. And this is kinda boring. Try to use more descriptions...

"It allows a pony to find the colt or filly "

Soooooo it's working only on kids?

Hi! Am i missed something?

WAAAAAAAGH!

Ha-ha-ha-ha... ha-... oh... Celestia... ha... make... make it stoooop... ha-ha... ha

What?

Ha-ha-ha... *sob* ha...

Calm down, would ya? As for you, moronic bear, haven't i ordered to never wear that costume again?

But i like it! It's so puffy and funny! Boss.... What do you need this empty bottle for? It has no vodka in it! Boss.... Why are you moving to me? Boss...?

*BONK*

Owwwwww...

Get it off. Now.

Okay! Okay! Just calm down!

Is that better?

More or less. Now back to the story.

"the speed of which shall cause an explosion which shall cause the wish to spread.

Everypony shall find their soulmate by the next  HearteHooves day."

Cool book! I want to read it!

No. It's not cool.

Why?

I have that book and i remember this spell. Next page is called "How to make sacrifice to ye olde god to gain his blessing"

YIKES!

"Rainbow Dash makes a sonic Rainboom just above us,"

Ahhhh god ol' mistake. Sonic Rainboom is not a simple everyday move Rainbow can make. It requires gigantic speed AND a lot of space to even make attempt to do it. Plus, breaking rainbow barrier causes a huge explosion which having a diffirent effect. And i doubt that it's making only good effects, it's capable of scattering rocks and stuff. Imagine a huge vacuum bomb above your head.

"Everypony held hands"

W H A T?!

What is "hands"?

You call it "paws"

Ah, my vodka-grabbers! But ponies don't have ones...

OF COURSE WE DONT! YOU CAN'T EVEN IMAGINE HOW HARD FOR US TO HOLD SOMETHING!

Calm down, Pioneer.

Again. Spaces are not enough to divide paragraphs. Use stars or, at least, dashes

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"Part One:

Chapter Two, a Stranger in a Strange Land"

No offence, but it looks lame. It shall be better to bold it

"Alex Buckley"

Not a pony name

Boss, i believe you know Claude Gravenstein?

Yes. And Gravenstein is a fitting name for him. It's sort of an apple

That yes, but what aboute "Claude"?

Well, i guess first name for stallions can look like human's...

"shields he used to keep people away. "

What is "people"?

Beats me...

I think i've seen that word before... But i still don't understand what does it mean

"XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX"

OH GOD!

You mean, "Oh, Celestia"?

No. I meant "OH GOD"! Celestia is not a god!

I want to be a god!

Shuddup.

That was some..... very unusual transition by the way.

"He yawned and took in the sight of the beautiful countryside that seemed to stretch out endlessly before him. It was at about this time that he realized that he didn’t have wings and couldn’t possibly be flying and promptly preceded to fall out of the sky. He fell fast for a Pegasus, his wings flapping uselessly at his side, out of synch with each other, and his four legs waving in despair and terror. He screamed, and with a sickening crunch landed hard on the ground."

Ahhh, good ol' falling pegasus. Beginning of the tory "Somepony saved my life tonight" we did Stalinview on.

Also, is it me, or this guy was a human?

Let's find out!

Yep. He was.

Uhhhh. Why autors can't stop putting themselves in pony world? It is done SO MANY TIMES already...

"crunching sound and thud. A sound like that meant that something had fallen."

No. That sound means that a pokemon used "Crunch"!

"A brown unicorn with glasses walked in wearing a doctor’s coat"

Hi, Cauterium!

Cau has never been a medic.

Goodbye, Cauterium!

"“Um, Doc…. You’re a Pony?” Phantom asked shyly, afraid of the answer"

No, he is a mushroom! And this is a land of dingling bushes!

Talk of the devil and he is sure to appear... Wanna do review with us?

Nah, i had stuff to do. First of, i need to invent machine, which shall speed up editing process! Our editor is editing one chaper for a week now, maybe this machine shall bring some help...

Heh, good luck.

"as putting motor oil on apple pie"

Ewwww!

Said the bear who soaked his birthday cake with vodka

Vodka is ultimate! It can make everything better!

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*Whisper*

Hmmm... Look's like we out of Humor juice, boss.

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WHAT? But i filled the bottle yesterday!

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Sorry boss... I thought it is vodka...

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Well, that explains why are you been so funny yesterday...

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What about our writers?

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Lamantines? They are currently working on Family Guy jokes.

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Bad... what should we do?

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How about we'll say something like "This story is so good to make fun of it" and skip to overview?

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Nah, won't work

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Guys. They can see us

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Damn....

*Whisper*

Currently we can't continue making fun of third chapter due to... unexpected circumstances (moronic bear), so let's read the rest in silence and make an overview!

OVERVIEW:

Hmmm. Let me begin.

Last chapter was very difficult to read while waiting cursed words like "d*ck" to pop up from every corner.  This suppose to be a literature, not ghetto bandit talk!

Story itself IS interesting though. Although ideas are a bit overused, interesting things began to happen only closer to sixth chapter.

As i mentioned before, pacing is a bit off. No, not even a bit. You need more descriptions

OC's... Well, Silver is interesting, while Phantom is too generic. 60% characters from "Human in equestria" have that personality. I know you wanted to avoid him being Mary Sue, but still he is too generic.

Silver, in the other hand, is pretty interesting.

Well, story has flaws, but still is worth to read. I shall track it to see how it will develope.

VERDICT:

Not without a flaws, but worth reading.

Soon, Soon this fic will be updated. I've been really busy with work, but I promise once the next chapter's back from my pre-reader It will be UP!

whelp, shit's gunna gunna fly when somepony looses their special somepony.

First!!

Great chapter, the spell's becoming more and more clear to Twilight. Still its unknown to Derpy though lol.

YES! another righteous chapter.

Thanks for your comments guys.

Don't worry be and Lt Bubbles here have alot more planned.

I would say more but I think Bubbles will kill me if I let out any spoilers.

If anything else showed up, like a griffin, he [myself] would probably start foaming at the mouth, babbling, running around in circles, or anything else he could do when his mind broke completely. That is me in a nut shell, except there be alot of F Bombs as well.

I think Dash's should be a woman, for teh lulz.

>>500982500982

My Reply (with out giving anything away)

>>501053501053

i think it should be Nyarlathotep.

i Love those ideas, but Rainbow dash and Derpy's parts are half written! The next part will be part 3x4 because they happen at the exact same time! I am working on part 2 as fast as I can now that I have some more free time, but I can't promise anything about how fast it will be up! I can promise though that the conclusion to part two will be worth the wait! Also, keep an eye out for an old friend to make a reappearance in chapter 12!

Next up: Meet the Apples..... Oh god.....

Silver Wrench is adapting, and already is starting to like him.

Always pleased when another chapter comes out, though I really hope you don't peter out like some authors do :)

>>537241537241

Don't worry I already Drafted 3 more chapters and after Lt Bubbles makes sense of my writing and edits them for spelling, grammar, dialog, content It will go up. Some how I keep writing at one section of the story the name Apple Dash instead of Apple Jack.

"Really Sliver, Apple Dash, What did you call Rainbow Dash then Rainbow Jack".

"Ooo, Ooo do me next, I can be Pinkie Sparkle or Pinkie Shy"

"confounded ponies drive me to drink".

>>537341537341

LOLS

I kept making similar mistakes while working on part 3: Some more hilarious ones follow::::

"And as Rainbow Doo walked out of the room..."

Ditzy Rainbow kept flying straight, even though the wind was pulling her off to the left."

"Pikes tripped over his own two feet, causing Twiloght Spoorkle to fall down the stairs, and land at the feet of Pink Pie."

With that last one, i don't even.... I feel sick....

So, I've found that listening to French Music speeds up the writing/editing process incredibly, so while I get more, this story should speed up in chapter updates!!!

>>543537543537 French? hunh. for me it's Foo Fighters or Rise Aginst.

both of you should try the 60's, or classical soundtracks, but foreign music is one of those that really gets me going. a good, short, chapter that got some more suspense going. Good job!

you get another derpy

Insert Dragnet theme here, Twilight's in trouble.

the collective minds of seven Human Turned Ponies will have them figure it out lickity-split.

>>570635570635

Who said.that they were all human turned ponies mm?

>>570959570959

the spell did.

and i still stand that dash's should be a chick.

>>573627573627

Well, wait for Part 3/4 to find out!

and I draw your attention to this quote from chapter 1: "A worde of caution before the spell, it draws not just from pony kind, but from all the worlds in entirety, for some soulmates may be founde in far away places. "

Some will be ponies from other places in Equestria.

awesome story

! I am gonna ship Fluttermask from now one, they two seem perfect for each other!

>>610833610833

You totally have my permission. Thank you so so so much!!!!

This story is so awesome! I love reading it and I love the characters.

>>611144611144

And there are still more characters to introduce.  This story was originally only going to be ten chapters, but it's kind of gotten a lot longer. We aren't even half way done yet.

is this story dead?

>>818038818038

no, I've just not had the time to work on the next chapter. Unfortunately it's gonna be another week or so for it to be up....

You win life for the "Nine Hours, Nine Persons, Nine Doors" reference. Congratulations!

>>870852870852

The reference was compeletely unintentional....

Alright, the next chapter is halfway done, Just waiting for it to get back from my proofreader, and it will be up! Soon! In like a week! A month.... maybe... Sorry... I'm working on iT!!!!!

(It's been done for a week, but my proofreader is apparently on vacation.)

your editors on vacation too? sucks doesnt it.

Finally an update. I promise not to take two months for the next chapter, or any one after if I can help it. Thank you everypony for your patience!

Lieutenant Bubbles I am not disappoint. Good chapter. I'll wait for the next one

looks like we're gonna get some land!

great chapter btw!

Time for Silver to turn Flim and Flam into Flem and Splam with his gun. He does still have his gun right from when he was transported?

>>908757908757

Sliver has none of his old Human possessions with him; Sliver has none any of his military gear including his rifle.

Anyways in this situation Sliver wouldn't shoot anypony even if he could.

*sees a story has a new chapter*

"probably that kody story im reading"

*seven ponies updated*

OH SWEET CELESTI-

*dies of heart attack, but comes back to life catch a sugar rush from the massive amount of sweetness eminating from this story. unfortunatley it was to much for my tiny mind to handle so i resolved the problem by commiting senpuko.*

you dont know how thrilled i am that you are still working on this. and if i may suggest, please dont do ay mare on mare stuff with rd. and if this spell goes out to all worlds, is it possible that we will get an alien who turns into a pony? (stupid qestion, but hey i had to ask.)

>>909219909219

Where's the fun in that?

Huh. I thought the original land was a royal grant straight from Celestia.

Either way, I hope Silver gives Flim and Flam exactly what they have coming to them. And painfully.

Bravo sir bravo k

>>909686909686

Can't give anything away yet. But I think you not be disappointed with Rainbow Dash's special somepony.

>>909730909730

Although Sliver will not shoot anypony in this situation, you already can tell he isn't going to take this lying down.

>>910263910263

Legal loop holes are a pain in the flank. Celestia might of given the land to the Apple Family in the flash back of 2nd Season 12th episode Family Appreciation Day

But things didn't all work out the same, Granny Smith's "Pa" never signed the paper work to finalize the transfer. All we know this could be the work of the summon spell the main 6 miss cast in the beginning of the story.

>>910263910263

I figured that the land was given to the town, and that all ponies had to submit forms claiming their portion, similar to old settlements in the American West in the 1870's and 1880's.

>>909686909686

No, we haven't stopped working on it, my life got a little complicated, and I haven't had a lot of time to work on the story, so I started again about three weeks ago, and finally finished. CH 15, is already half done, and work on parts 3&4 is already progressing smoothly. And i promise you won't have too long to wait to see RD's Special somepony

>>912901912901

That makes sense. Poor Applejack, ouch.

Luna looked horrified. “Is this true Applejack?”

WOAH WOAH WOAH, I mean, I know Applejack's the element of honesty and that they're friends with Luna- but is that how you REALLY tackle a land issue? Ask somepony if what could EASILY be a lie if it's the truth??

moar please!

>>949392949392

Parts 3 and 4 are coming up soon

>>949374949374

If you have not notice in the TV series Apple Jack is almost unable to actually lie, and when she did it was under Discord's Spell.

It seems Apple Jack finds the task physically difficult to attempt.

But there is STILL a mental filter between Apple Jack's thoughts and her mouth keeping her from blurting out anything and able to give Apple Jack the ability to have some tact and subtlety in her words.

Also since Celestia would trust the word of Apple Jack so would Luna trust the judgement of her sister.

It does help that the rest of the main 6 also testified on the dirty dealings of the Flim Flam brothers.

Also who's worlds would you taken, somepony (or rather 6 ponies) who became a national hero(s) twice, and assist in the defense against an invasion OR somepony with the speech and mannerisms of a used-car-salesmen with a known history of dirty dealings.

Sliver Wrench on the other hand is more than capable of lying, and doing it with a straight face. Although the act of lying would bother him morally and he tends to say-things-as-they-are and more bluntly than Apple Jack would.

Example saying "I am from Baltimore" to the Apple Family over dinner not realizing that Ponies would have no knowledge of the United States.

Not saying Sliver Wrench do not possess any tact, he is a military man or rather now stallion after all. His words have gotten him in trouble a few times before.

Sliver Wrench also makes an effort to a larger extent not to curse in front of Apple Jack's family, her friends, to any younger fillies or colts (like the Cutie mark crusaders) and especially the Royal Pony sisters.