First and foremost, Twilight Sparkle is the pony after my own heart :3 and as such, I love books quite a bit as well as the art of the story. I hope you enjoy the tales I weave.
Rarity enters in a contest to determine the new uniform for Equestrias renowned Wonderbolts and needs a pegasus model who's both athleticly gifted and can show her design to its best, so why not Rainbow Dash? With a weekend long series of contests, Rainbow and Rarity each have their own battles to fight. To the victors, go the spoils. Lets just hope the victory doesn't get spoiled either.
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ok... I don't know why but even before my story passed moderation, it has a dislike. I don't know if the mod was grumpy or what, but it kinda makes me a bit sad
But, I am very happy it was balanced out 
3076852 Did you add it too a group before it passed moderation? Cause if so than ppl who are of that group can see the story, read it, and like/dislike it.
3076857 Nope. I tried but it denied my adding it.
Mind the verb tenses. You keep swerving between past and present.
3076924 In all honesty, I don't see any awkward tense swerving. If you could show me an example, It would be very much appreciated
There are only the Honorable Grammar Police in my books
3076953
Well, there are two big examples:
Note the verbs. You open with past tense, then inexplicably switch to present, then back again.
For the record, I'm not trying to be a snotty grammar freak here. It's just really distracting for the reader when the verbs go all over the place.
3076976 No problem at all. I'll fix those right away. Thank you for your input. Also, never think you're being rude with me, because I honestly want to become a better writer. I've only had to write research papers and whatnot until I recently started my short stories.
oh well this a new concept. I like it!
3077157 lol thanks. I got to thinking about the shenanigans Rainbow gets up to and I wondered what she would do in a formal dinner party setting. Then Rarity came to mind and I thought the premise of her randomly inviting Rainbow to a dinner like that was flimsy, so why not have a designers contest and models/athletes compete to show teamwork between the pair? But why just have fashion critics be the judges when the Wonderbolts can have the whole event for a new uniform? It just sorta happened from a little bout of imagination XD
3077217 well I like it very much. It's creative and has nothing to do with dash becoming a bolt, just rarity and her winning a contest for a new costume. Very creative :)
3080360 Why thank you verily :3
Uh oh, this won't be good!
Rivals against rivals! Rainbow Dash vs Lightning Dust, who will win?
Well we shall find out later in this story!
When is the next one coming out? These are really good.
I. NEED. MORE!!!!!!!
I'm distressed from lack of this awesome story. MORE.
3096161 I will try my best to update this particular story every four days or so. My other story requires a lot of pensive contemplation as I write it, so it takes up a bit more of my time. I hope you can stand the wait
This is good, I can't wait for the next chapter.
3117476 Next chapter will cover the afternoon and evening events
New update! Yay!
I had just finished reading this and LOVE it!
Moar!
3121879 I hope to have another update out soon. Currently working on my side story for Olive Branch from my other story
ooh, this is going to be goood.
can't wait.
3121958 Yay! I simply cannot WAIT!
Well, I think that you shouldn't tell my parents about this comment since I am not allow to use internet! XD No, I LOVE this chapter!
Can't wait for more! I want to see who won!
3152304 Lol It's only day one of the trials and the first event has just finished. There's still quite a bit to go on from there. The next chapter will cover the race from Rarities point of view from the start of the race and into the evening to cover her event. I think it'll make quite the contrast in the events that transpired XD
3153828 Well them, I will just have to be patient to see who will win!
I will be waiting........
Okay, I had came back to check and read this story again, and here are my thoughts on the "like and dislike" section: 1 more like and then we will win the war of likes!
I had already voted and we just need one more like! Will start recommending this story to win the like war from now to nice people!
That was a really good chapter. I hope to see the next one soon, these are really good.
3169064 lol there's no need for that. I don't like to advertise myself for nothing but good feedback. Bad feedback is there for a reason and I wouldn't have it any other way. Just remember that without the bad, we wouldn't know the good either.
3171111 I'm glad you enjoy my story. I'll keep up the good work, but it may be a few more days before the next chapter is out since I've gotten an inspiration streak for Tricks, Cloaks and Wands
so when I'm done being mind-jacked, I'll be right back with ya lol
3178183 This story is really good in my opinion!
I just wish people would actually explain why they dislike the story they voted with a thumbs-down! 
Then we can fix the problems, and maybe decrease the dislikes.....
3178237 Who knows? Maybe they just don't like the premise or the execution. Everyone's entitled to their opinion and I don't want to become the kind of writer who changes their story or vision just to make others who don't like it happy. There'll always be things I can do to make it better but that's part of the writing process and they will just fall into place like anything else.
All I can say is don't worry about it too much and just enjoy the story. Haters are gonna hate and I'm just gonna keep going on with my own thing regardless. I'm glad I have readers and friends who like what I do and want it to be better liked. It's for you individuals that I really feel that my stories are worthwhile. 
3178446 Yeah...... Haters gonna hate...... Gonna make a different story that is a one-shot by the end of this month probably.
I want to take a break from my only story for a while! Do you like SoarinDash? I am just asking....you will soon see why!
3178475 I give everything a try once or twice because there's always exceptions to the rule. So yes, I'd be interested in your story out lol I would be glad to do any proof reading or editing you may be interested in, so just drop me a line via p.m. and we can work something out
I use Open Office, so in case you use Microsoft Word, it's compatible as long as you save it as a .doc, also it's completely free if you want to download it yourself :3
3178496 Oooh! I think I had heard of Microsoft Word before! I will definitely try to have one of those! And about the rest, let me PM you!
It's alright! I don't mind if the story hasn't update for a whole month! We all know that sometimes we get writer's block or we didn't have enough time to finish it.
Btw, LOVE THIS CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!! 
3275872 But I don't know if getting mind-jacked isn't worse XD It's not like I didn't have Ideas or the inability to put them into words... Trixie just kinda... Stole the show?
3276687
:The Great, and Powerful Trixie deserves all the attention and likes! Not that show-off Rainbow Dash!
: And what do you mean by that? I am the greatest flier in all of Equestria!
: Oh really? We will see about that after the competition! Lightning Dust is probably a lot better than you!
: *laughs* Then how did I came in first place and she came in..what was it? Oh yeah, 6th place!
: *nervous laugh* Um.....It's only the beginning! The race isn't over yet!
: Just you wait, Trixie! I will win the race! I could beat them all in a dash!
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3277093
: I am afraid I would have to agree with Trixie-
: That's the Great, and Powerful Trixie for you Twilight!
: Whatever. And what I was trying to say is, that you cannot be really sure that you are going to win! Who knows, you might ended up becoming friends with Lightning Dust soon! You might not even winthe race!
: .........
WHAT?! THAT CANNOT BE TRUE!!!!! CHANGE THE STORY'S ENDING, MISTER!!!!!!!! RIGHT NOW!!!!!!!!
: Dash, this is not your story!
That one was really good, I think that was definitly worth waiting for.
but now I just want more, these storys are so good its too good to be true.
so MOAR
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
3279611 When you think about it, the wait just made your fix that much sweeter XD
THOSE CLIFF-HANGERS!!!! YOU BETTER CONTINUE SOON, MISTER!!!!
Did I mention that I LOVE this chapter?
Continue whenever you want, I am not going to put pressure on you!
What in Equestria had happened? Is Rainbow Dash going to save them all? Who would ever do such thing? Who is the new villian? What does Princess Celestia know? Is it the return of Nightmare moon? King Sombra? Queen Chrsayllis and the changelings? 
Am I asking too much questions?
Wish I could give this story a million likes! 
Omigoshohmigoshohmigosh! You are getting me more excited THAN PINKIE CAN EVER BE!!!!
Keep up with the fabulous work!
3335099 I've got plans for Rainbow in the future...
Awesome plans...
3335126 Make her look awesome! She would hate if you ruin her public image!
Which I don't think will happen since you are just tooooooooo nice!
3335190 Well from the way things have developed and the events that have happened, there's a lot that could still go wrong. Not to mention I'm not the kind of author that orchestrates how the story progresses. I'm more of an organic writer who plants the seed of an idea and I just follow the flow of events as best I can in the scheme of everything else. I try my best to stay true to how I feel it happen.
3335233 Eeryub!
I want to read the climax part sooooo badly! It's going to be so awesome! 
Stay awesome!
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