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Interesting.
Go onnnn...
New chapter coming up soon!
one of the most unique and entertaining HiEs I've ever seen
please go on.
Hmmm WW2 related story my type u have my interest
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you need to hit the reply button, the one with two speech bubbles or else we went get notified :P
3074202 Thanks. I'm new here. I appreciate your support.
I'm crying trears of laughter.
Interesting story so far, good potential. Can't wait for more.
This is really interesting and funny. By all means, please continue.
The idea of a is quite interesting and the grammar appears to be better than most. The only issue that I have with the story is the description of the violent scenes. While your depiction of the carnage is well written, what is being described should not be as focused upon as much. The words spent describing the blood, and exploding faces could be allocated towards describing Herr Heinreich's reaction to what is occurring. By doing this, you can add a level of characterization to his person. For example, if you wanted to make him seem more callous, you could describe the cold, unwavering look in his eyes as he pulled the trigger. To make him seem more shaken, and perhaps a bit more human, you would add some sort of shocked look in his face. Have him hold his breath as he shoots the creatures. Just do something to show us someone behind all of this carnage. The descriptions of him so far, seem almost as if it were directly taken from the bottom of a application for an office job, and seem to be a separate entity on their own. The gap between action and character needs to be bridged more thoroughly. We see the carnage and understand his destructive potential, but we fail to see the person behind it, or even his reasoning. Understanding a character's thought process and personality is essential to the early stages of a story. It's what really keeps readers reading.
Just know that what I'm saying is that you're basically three chapters into the story already, and we don't even know the man behind the mask... oder getrocknetes Blut/Waffe/S.S. Armbinde.
Other than that, it's interesting, and good grammar. I'm interested to see where this story will go.
SS-Offizier in Equestria? Könnte interrestant werden.
Looks like he is making fun of you.
3075551 Thank you. I appreciate the input, and will bear your suggestions in mind.
I stab a man multiple time in the body when he was shooting me call of duty logic
3078082
he never said shooting...
anyways, more please!
Hmm, your writing is not great, grammar's good but there's something about it that seems off. Might be the way how you express some things.
Anyway, I think it's interesting. We're all tired of the Americans getting all the glory even in fanfiction so having a cold-hearted German in this Universe doesn't seem like a bad idea at all.
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Get writing.
OMG This Is The Best Story I have Read In A Long Time
Seems interesting. Very descriptive about the wounds.
Nothing like an old fashion torture to make things more interesting. How about he threatens to cut off the dogs limbs for every wrong answer to his questions. He cuts off one finger and that gets things going. The ponies get freaked out and the gourd is seen scared from the ruthless soldier. Once that is done, Dieter asks the dogs rank and if he is a grunt then attempts to execute him because he is of no use as a hostage and a waste of space and resources. The guard sys murder is illegal or something and Dieter explains how he is of no use as a bargain trade and would just use up space being held prisoner along with wasting resource keeping him fed. And then maybe considering maybe sending him to labor camp to be of some use.
Great chapter, cant wait to see more.
3083438 I like that! Thanks for the idea, it really brings across the ruthless Nazi feel!
3083502 You are welcome. Have fun writing.
You need longer chapters!!!!!!
I love Dieter so brutal, so evil
Oh I love a good old nazi S.S it reminds me of many things and ppl like rictofen.
3083572 I try to make the chapters short and sweet, and make up for that with sheer quantity. That's just my style. Thanks for commenting though!
3083670 Which Richtofen? Edward Richtofen (Black Ops: Zombies) or Manfred von Richtofen (The Red Baron)?
I like this for some reason.
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I'd say Edward Richtofen (He's actually from World at War originally). The SS didn't exist in WW1.
"I volunteer for torture duty!"
also kind of surprised he didn't say aryan instead of human.
3084237 Hmm...point taken. But I was thinking that the ponies and dogs aren't human enough just to be considered non-Aryan. After all, Aryans are a race of people, so I don't think that really applies here. Furthermore, I imagine torturing a human being is still harder than torturing a dog.
I love this guy. can't wait to see more.
Nicely done, vary nice chapter. Now comes the time for a dog hunt and execution.
3084302 "Die dog!" Just took on a whole new meaning!
3084737 Please just point out which pieces of grammar are incorrect, and I will fix them. Thank you.
3084741 it's not really the grammar it's the perspective it would kind of hard 4 me to know who's talking and what's really going on so plz be more discrptive and also I am a huge WW2 studier anymore you can ask me anyone or and fact from any nation ill help u
3084798 In truth, I also am an avid student of the second world war. If I weren't this idea probably wouldn't have manifested itself. I am grateful for the offer though. As for the problem that you stated, I will do my best to make the story clearer in the future.
Thank you for your feedback.
3084905 what area do u like in pacific or Europe or North Africa mine is pacific and Europe most pacific I know more about Europe after 6/4/1944
3084947 I prefer the Eastern Front and European Front to the Pacific and North African fronts, although I enjoy reading about all fronts in general.
3085057 yeah thought so I actually taught my teacher something about WW2 once in middle school and present a 30 min presentation about WW2 trying to keep it simple for some ppl
3085126 Cool. Do you have any interest in the Battle of Stalingrad?
3085139 uh yes I do enjoy the battle that lasted 9 months and the Russia counter attack with the winter as their advantage also before the counter attack Hitler declare that the city was his but the nazi only hold 90% of the city and the Russia was using the rice a voka as transport, Hitler wanted the city for 2 reason. One for a base near a oils refinery near Stalingrad and to humiliate Stalin for taking a city name after him.
3085216 Correct! That is great. You know, the fighting was often hand to hand and very intense. Herr Oberführer Heinrich was there, so his cold attitude could likely be attributed to that battle. I can't say much more because of spoilers.
3085329 most of the time battle are CQC in the same building they Heinrich didn't want to surredder due to the fact that during the battle he was promoted to marshal and that no German marshal ever surrender but he eventually did cause they ran out if supplies and hitler stop sending supplies
3085871 Heinrich? You mean Field Marshall Von Paulus? Heinrich is my character.
still loving this and how fast it updates
Ah nothing like a the beautiful symphony of blood to make things interesting. Great chapter does not even come close to describing how good it was. You really did well. Keep the blood flowing.
I am guessing that a meeting with the princess is coming soon. I can only assume the hilarity that will come of it.