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This story is a sequel to Purity

The death of the four Princesses; Celestia, Luna, Cadance and Twilight was all planned out, poisoned by those who fear their power. One earth pony decided to have none of it, defied time and destiny themselves to rewrite history. Given that unique chance, can Twilight and Azure change how events once played out?

Editing and pre-reading by: Web of Hope, shutaro and Dusk Watch

Cover by: Raikoh Illust

First Published
13th Oct 2013
Last Modified
2nd Nov 2013

Hopefully, now with the help of Shutaro and Dusk Watch, using the multi-player option of GoogleDoc, this story should be error-free, or almost. It's without any doubt the story that I - we - took the most time to polish things out.

We are in the process of correcting the two previous stories. However, as of now, Never Judge is still in a terrible state, while Purity is in a fairly good shape. If you just got on this series of stories, crank your grammar patience to eleven if you go read Never Judge.

I think Raikoh did a terrific job for the cover art. From what I understand, it was his first time designing something from scratch too.

Meanwhile, I got a new job, which slowed me down a bit in the writing process.

#2 · 61w, 3d ago · 1 · · Hello Twilight ·

Today, I finally got around to reading Never Judge, liked it, and started following you. A matter of minutes later, a notification popped up telling me you published this story. So then I decided I needed to read Purity and this story right away. Which I did.

And that is why I have yet to get anything done today.

At least I got to read some good stories. Keep up the great work!

>>3344548 "And that is why I have yet to get anything done today."

My goal right there; to bring procrastination to my unsuspecting victims! :trollestia:

Happy you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

>>3344565

You are awful, but effective.

Totally worth it though.

Dayum purple caused this.

Regardless I thought it was a bit awkward how you instantly brought the readers to the time travel. It was weird but easily understandable.

>>3347515 I think adding anything before would only drag it for no reason, at least I couldn't find anything interesting enough to bridge it to that point. In the previous story, there's quite some talk - on purpose - about time travel. Showing Twilight organizing her library wouldn't have been very interesting. I could have shown the "travel" - as I do when she goes back to her own time -, but showing the return does have a reason.

>>3348642

That's true sorry bout than I'm just used to a bit of backstory in the beginning.

>>3349125 I know it's a rather abrupt way to start a story.

>>3349419

Disregarding that your stories are quite unique in a good way and so far enjoyable. I Have been looking for stories that have that certain spark. Sadly most stories are currently in work so it's an endless struggle to find more pieces of great work such as yours and waiting for updates.

#10 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

The craziness doesn't stop there, we have a third editor/pre-reader joining-in in a few chapters. Insanity I say! :pinkiecrazy:

(but required to keep my horrible English in check :trollestia: )

Chapters for this story might slow down a tiny bit, as we will do a blitz of correction over Never Judge. It's only 10k words, so it shouldn't be too long.

#11 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

Things just keep getting more and more interesting here. It's quite the puzzle that Twilight and co. will have to piece together.

Zecora had better not end up being the villain in all of this.

#12 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

Dem zebras. So I'm guessing Zecora was the one who led them and have out secrets or something. Great chapter though I wish they were a bit longer.

#13 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3369154 "Zecora had better not end up being the villain in all of this."

My goal is for you to say in a few chapters; "Damn! Why didn't I think of that before?" :trollestia:

#14 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3369937 Some will definitely be much longer. I break down chapters by logical events, so some may be very short while some much longer. I'm not a fan of adding word for the sake of filling spaces. Could have a very long debate about "Show, don't tell". :twilightangry2:

#15 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3370194

So twists? I like twists. :twistnerd:

I can think of several possible stories for Zecora that place her as a protagonist, or at least not evil. And I'm hoping that something along those lines is the case. But right now the chances are just as good that she is a villain.

We'll just have to wait and see.

#16 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3370209

True enough the small chapters I find are nice and get to the point without losing some necessary details. My writing style was sort of like yours when I had to do writing. I still enjoy it but since my life has been consumed by the website I try and find the longest stories to keep me occupied while having stories like yours as a main preference. Less words= Possibly more updates :)

#17 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3370229 Several? Why don't you PM me those ideas? Could tell me if I'm not driving directly into a pit of obviousness...

#18 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

So, how does everyone feel about inevitability? :pinkiehappy:

That is the real question isn't it.

#20 · 60w, 4d ago · · · Your Fault ·

>>3371872 Sure sounds good to me. Everypony is invited!

#21 · 58w, 4d ago · 3 · · The Messenger ·

Sorry for the short chapter, but it said what it had to say.

Next chapter is much longer. :trollestia:

Shit's gonna hit the fan. These chapters are getting me psyched for the next part!

I can think of but two things, gotta go fast, and Guile's theme. Seriously, like on loop until Twilight gets to Canterlot or whatever she does to warn the princesses.

BRING IT ON TIME, LETS GO!

>>3541871 TIME TO FIGHT TIME WITH THE POWER OF TIME!

will you continiue the storry?

:twilightsmile:

>>4162037 I really don't know.

I hope you continue the story I like were this is going. Thanks for the good read:twilightsmile:

Read the two sequels now too. Gotta say I really hope for you to continue this wonderful story.

Great start on this second sequel. Keep it up and going. :pinkiehappy:

Dragon:moustache:

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