Whaaaaaat. So Keen and Merry.....ummm.....
That really shocked the fudge out of me!
It's really awesome and I loved it! I think it truly deserves a favorite and a like! Keep up the good work!

Uhhhh...Nuh uh
No, I...I can't read anymore of this, mate, it's kinda freaking me out

Why is everybody/everypony always so against incest? If both parties consent AND theres no chance of children/foals whats the problem?

He's just standing there naked? HA!
He's gettin' inside of ALL KINDS OF SUGARWALLS, GOIN' BALLS DEEP!
Good thing that he's not related to anypony at all except adopted family, still not incest, but weird as hell.

seriously hes just.............wow well they did say he had some big balls like if you get my joke

I spy with my little eye another name to add to my inter-dimensional hunting list. Not even bounty hunting. Cold, malicious, hatred fueled hunt. I want to watch them cry over his corpse. Yes children, your toy is no more. Sob over him. But know he wouldn't sob over you. Hm. If we do develop inter-dimensional tech within the next years or decades, I'm using it to destroy or ultimately humiliate things like this. Hm. Castration? Or possibly a revoke of your "power". I know, I'm fucked up. Don't need to tell me. It's just that things like him tear me up. Some would hate me for calling him an abomination just because of some bitch that humiliated him, but that's not the point. It's that he's grown upon it and acts so lewdly. I cannot wait for chapter three. The flame of hatred within my soul grows brighter for this being by every word.

By the Princess' best guess, Keen was a year older than himself and Cotton, and he'd just grown and grown and grown. At seventeen he was now a little more than twice as tall as the average stallion, not as strong as them in proportion, but easily able to keep up with the same jobs and sports. He was also faster than most ponies in a sprint, since his two legs could get him to full speed faster than a pony with four, and his hands made him great at things that unicorns could do too.

i call bullshit. 1) a pony/horse is taller then a human 2)ponies are faster then humans 3) hands fucking suck when almost everything was made for ponies hooves.

That was a lot to take in seeing someone you viewed as family screw someone that is family I can't imagine how Cotton feels now a sense of sadness and fear at the man she once considered a brother turned stud. That must be traumatizing though it makes me uncomfortable I can't help but read more just to see how far it spirals