Applebloom starts asking about her parents.
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Well that's a new one. Apple Family outlaws, huh? I like it.
3009074 Thanks.
I have a crippling weakness for Westerns, particularly of the more modern, "spaghetti" variety, so...yeah. I had long thought that it'd be interesting to see more of Equestria's version of the west. This kinda sprang from that and wanting to give a slightly different take on the back-story for AJ's parents.
Oh, wow. I was just expecting another story of how their parents died, but this was a pleasant surprise!
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3096464 Thanks. Glad you liked it. To be fair, I did mention how their parents died...it just wasn't the focus of the story.
3098176 This is true. It was beautiful nonetheless.
That was a very nice story. Not at all the expected tale of their parents, but a fitting one. I also loved "it's just withholdin' part of the truth." It wonderfully illustrates a statement by Homage in my own story: “Sometimes, being honest means knowing when not to be.”
P.S. Apple salad is totally a thing. My mother used to make it for me all the time.
3118835 Well, I always thought the "standard" tale of AJ's parents tends to focus more on AJ still being deeply troubled by their deaths, even when they're usually depicted as having been dead for years. Not to sound callous but almost a decade after someone dying, even someone close, most folks have moved on.
And yes, I like it when good =/= stupid. Just because someone is on the right side doesn't mean they have to be a dip.
Also: score one for randomly guessing apple-related foodstuffs!
Hmmm. This was different. The parents were outlaws huh?
All in all, I think you did a pretty good job on this. It was pretty solid of a plot idea, but, personally, you could probably have included an exploit or two. Other than that, you kept them in character, quite well.
I liked it. Find a piece of cover art for this, and add it to groups.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3119453 Only the mom was an outlaw, at least one of any repute. Dad was not, at least not until he knowingly hid a fugitive. Pretty sure that's illegal in Equestria.
The brevity was also my big concern. I felt like I perhaps should have gone more places with this, but I couldn't think of what to do. Given the choice, I decided to keep it short, figuring padding it would hurt instead of help. Perhaps in the future I'll sit on ideas like this a little more, until they can develop into something meatier.
Many thanks for the feedback!
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Haha, I do what I can.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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I think the lack of exploits is appropriate, as AJ isn't seeking to glorify their mother's criminal past.
3122469 By exploits I was referring more to stuff occurring in the present of the story, i.e. making the conflict a little more serious than history lesson => acceptance.
Not where i expected the story to go, but very well done. I was about to comment on how quickly applejack responded to appleblooms questions, as talking about death to a younger family member can be hard, even if thst death was a long time ago, but realized that applejack would have no trouble as being honest an to the point is what she does best and given her initial reservations on telling applebloom about her mothers past, it would make sense for her to quickly deflect by giving a full answer.
Just realized i mostly rambled without really giving much input... sry bout that
Anyeways, noticed one typo, in the very first sentence it says, "assorted bowl of various sizes", instead of assorted bowls.
3326084 Fixed!
And I get your point about how jumping to talk about the death of her parents so quickly could be seem a little unrealistic. I actually didn't think of that while I was writing it. I'll have to try and keep better track of stuff like that in the future.
Thanks.