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PonyDragonSword


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Twilight being excited about casting a spell that should be fairly complicated for unicorns, is actually quite simple. But when scared and accidentally sending too much power into the spell when showing it off to her friends, it alters the spell just enough to mind swap all of them. With all of them scrambling to figure out what to do, they go and seek guidance from Celestia, she finds no cure from memory or in her books. She asks the pony's to leave to a secret base that she has in the Everfree forest that she uses for research on strange spells and effects the spells have on ponies. While staying there, things go wrong and now the Mane 6 don't know where they are, so now they have to find their way home. Not knowing the dangers at all of the new mysterious land, they travel to find out where they are, and who ponynapped them.

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Comments ( 10 )

When the description for a story has this many typos, I do not read it.

Sorry, about that, still, I had an editor go through, I will go through and fix the typos though:pinkiehappy:. Besides, I don't know why, but I wrote the description while I was really tired:twilightblush:

That was an awesome story. When are you going to do more? :pinkiesmile:

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Hopefully soon, I have to try and balance out my schedule which at times get real crazy:flutterrage:, but I already have some of the next chapter done:rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy:.

I don't know something in the back of my mind is telling me there is something wrong with this chapter but I can't put my hoof on it...

I have no idea what could be wrong, but still, that is a fun challenge to find :twilightsmile:. If you do find it let me know

"Thanks Twilight, will do, just where are the towels?” Rainbow asked. “There should be one in the kitchen cupboard under the sink that you could use, I always have towels there just in case of spills,” Twilight replied.

That part there needs to be on a different line.

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"Twilight, how come it hurts so much, I thought you said it was simple spell." in Rainbow Dash's voice.

"Um, is that you Rainbow Dash?" Twilight questioned

What happened there? Did she try to speak but heard that in her head? Or did she speak to herself as if she was talking as someone else? This part confuses me a bit.

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Interesting story so far. Definately getting a fav.

3150757 Thanks for the fav:pinkiehappy: and sorry about the confusion in that part:twilightblush:, I am still a bit rusty with my writing, but I can only get better right. I have great editors though. They do a lot for me and my stories. :scootangel:

I was a bit confused in some parts but overall it was a good story :twilightsmile:

3199492 thanks for the comment, like I said in my comment to TheGreatEater, I am a little rusty with my writing:twilightsheepish: and lately I have been really busy with the holiday's and tried to get the third chapter out as soon as I could. Next chapter for sure will be better than the rushed chapter 3:rainbowdetermined2::raritywink:.

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