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Pinkie Pie can be very clueless and Twilight can be over analytical.
But what else is new?
My attempt at recreating the feeling of one of Abbot and Costello's various bits.
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note- Thank you to MonsterAddict for proofreading this for me
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This story. I liked it. No more, I like my mind unfucked.
Very good job! Only a few errors, but otherwise a good story.
Have a moustache.
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I'm glad you liked it
And thanks, I'll put it on now
!http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/365/3/e/i_ll_wear_this_mustache_by_aliceebryant-d5pttf9.gif!
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I ... I'm not sure how to respond to that
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While I may not understand your culture of tea I nevertheless accept your affiliation with the great Liptonious, Patron Saint of chilled beverages. Thank you for your blessings of the iced one and may all your days be filled with smile faces and tea bags.
Well that was, odd...
Funny though, so mission accomplished I imagine
Good work and thumbs up and all that
You had me at
Look at her, ain't she a beauty! 'At roight there is a real, loive interrobang 'Ats one of the most deadly punctuations knaown t' man. Oi'd nevah seen one outsoid captivity befoh. 'Is is a real treat!
(apologies to anypony who can type in or speak in a better Croc-Hunter homage Australian accent than I.)
Fun story, too. I do wonder how Twilight never thought to say "to eat, Pinkie Pie. Birds eat worms." But no matter, I liked the bit.
Nit picky things:
This should be:
A) When you were...Somepony did or was something... So I thought... or,
B)
WhenYou were... So I thought.I also felt the ending was a little dry compared to the rest of the story—It would've been awesome if we could end on an awful pun or a reference to earlier in the story, since the rest was an enormous comedy act made of two bits (Early Bird and Bookends), It'd be great to leave on a high note.
Also, what kind of ungodly things go into an owl's cake?
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Glad you enjoyed it
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I know, I wish more people used (or even knew about) the interrobang. It's so awesome
Also, Twilight, clever as she may be, is a silly pony
I may consider editing the end. Honestly this was something I threw together during a procrastination session for another story.
And lastly, trust me when I say that you do NOT want to know
I think you meant gets the early worm?
I like the book ends complication.
I didn't like the early birth part though because twilight didn't really try to explain that it was just an expression and it shouldn't be taken literally. On top of just taking too long to get to the point.
Anyhow thanks for the story.
2933650 For the above reasons I disagree, I like stories to get straight to the point, so I felt in the exact opposite way the ending was strong but the rest could have being polished.
However who am i to judge others taste, just my personal opinion, hope it helps.
The first part about the early bird and the worm reminds me of the Abbott and Costello "Who's on First" routine!
I like this.
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Actually I meant to type ""Well then I guess that bird is the early bird then, isn't it?"
Either way it's fixed now, thanks
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That's actually what I was going for so I'm glad that it reminded you of them
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I was thinking Abbot and Costello too, but rather the 'figure of speech' skit in the gangster's (Moose) parlor.
"He always said he kept his money in his head"
"You mean that horse with the hatrack?"
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You're right. It's fixed now, thanks