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  • T Second Princess of the Night

    With King Sombra gone, is Equestria truely safe from harm? Or will another foe as old as the Crystal Kingdom itself appear now that the dark unicorn's position of evil is vacant? What new danger will threaten the land, and the Elements of Harmon
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  • T A New Spark

    Life is easy. The fewer of things to bother you, the simplier life will be. Just find anything to pass the time. But that's easier said than done, especially when my latest time waster turned out to be the craziest experience I'll ever have
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  • T Lyra's Secret

    Lyra has a secret. One that her life as a human reseacher depends on and could ruin everything she had worked for if it gets out. But she is not going to let this golden opportunity of furthering her research slip away, and by any means necessary.
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  • T Dark Trails

    There are somethings that should never be experienced; horrors that are better to remain locked away in realms that cannot be touched. It is an unfortunate thing to dream of such terrors, and even worse to face them. And face them... six will.
    4,135 words · 123 views  ·  20  ·  1 · gore
  • E Gift From The Stars

    Having a job that has me recording all kinds of media is very rewarding. My understanding of the world grows the more I watch. But there is one show I keep coming back to. Is it odd to find interest in a show about two dimensial ponies humans made?
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  • T Hunter, Slayer, Corpse

    An old evil returns, a princess goes missing, and ancient family secrets reveal themselves. It is often portrayed that a child who is thrusted into a strange world are capable of becoming champions of good. Unfortunately, those are merely fairy tales
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  • E Falling Star

    Rainbow Dash has returned from the Academy, leaving with their high expections for her attendance in the future. However word around Ponyville has it she may no longer be the champion of her little town when a new Pegasus arrives.
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  • 1w, 2d
    Writer's Block for "Writer's Block"

    Potential Story Update/Venting/Sappy Personal Stuff that will determine the fate of "Writer's Block". If you would like to avoid someone's drama, skip this blog. Bit of warning, this blog is kind of rambly.

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    Alright, going to be honest here. I am seriously thinking of canceling this story. I've gone through a dozen revisions of the ending in my head, ranging from the original of "and then they all had sex", to something that is deep and compelling. Or at least an attempt at something that is deep and compelling. This story was originally a one shot, something simple to pass the time and try a hand at writing a sex scene. Whatever your opinion is on clopping, writing such a scene is good practice because it exists outside the norm and you need something that is normaly unarousing and turn it into arousing/emotional. It's easy to know why a naked women or man is arousing, but having to create new details for a completely different species? Yes, yes, they're ponies. I know. But it's still the same concept. And it's all I intended it to be.

    Then you all read it, asked for more, making me want to actually create something with a little more depth. It went okay for a bit, but then life got complicated and painful.

    Not going to lie, a fair bit of James's faults are my own. At least, they mostly were some months ago. Going through a divorce because my wife cheated on me, realizing I've actually been depressed for a long time, and plenty of other emotional issues I've buried deep down to the point they didn't bother me... it's been hard. While I like to think I've gotten over some of my problems you see in James, they still exist to some degree, and new ones were quick to fill the gap from the ones I did manage to solve. So pretty same situation, but new shit.

    What all of this means for the story however, has me in a bind. I've bounced back and forth between dropping it and continuing it. It's been hard to bring any effort to make new stuff, and that is usually a sign of a dead story. I've told what I originally wanted to tell, and I'm grasping at straws at this point. It feels like I'm forcing it. And I sometimes think it's wrong to try and grab some kind of story when I didn't even give it the justice/attention of a preplanned story with an ending. I don't know, it's just something that bothers me. Feels like I'm just making shit up and pulling you all along with no clear focus, and that makes me feel like I'm doing something disrespectful to you all. I could have ended it as "and then they all had sex". No disrespect for other writers, but that's not how I want my stories to be. As impractical as cartoon ponies are, I always lean towards having something as realistic as possible. It's why I can't make a one shot comedy full of awesome cheesyness. It's just not in my interest to make.

    But if I did continue, I am going to be upfront and say that I will be still applying my own problems onto James. Having done a bit more emotional growth than James, I can at least see the direction I want to take him. Like I said, I haven't completely solved my problems, but I believe I know the right way to go on them, and I can steer James that way as well. Writer's often incorporate their own lessons learned in life into their stories, passing on their experiences, trials, errors, and successes to others so that they may know of them. Stories of other people have taught me so many valuable life lessons, and I want to create the same. And this story has a chance for me to practice that. And spoiler, the issue I want to share is that it's okay to be vulnerable to others and let them help you. Not in a "Get work done" kind of way that Applejack faced. I'm talking about that sharing your troubles and fears with others isn't a burden on their lives. It's okay to let your defenses down, it's okay to just let it out without worrying how stupid you feel or look doing it. I'm not saying you need to cry, but it needs to be known that it's okay to be vulnerable to those who love you and want to help you like you do for them. You don't have to keep smiling for the sake of others and your own irrational fear while burying your problems so deep that even you don't realize them half the time.

    This type of issue doesn't apply to all people, and I say lucky you for not having to deal with it. But for me this is really difficult, and because every problem has existed before, I know there are other people out in the world that are having this issue as well. This story is for them as it is as much for me.

    If you read this far, then you are probably suspecting that I will continue the story. And having written all of this, I feel like doing that as well. I won't go back and edit to showcase that because it took writing this for me to come to a conclusion; It's funny how helpful writing can be. Anyways, I guess I will continue this story. I can't guarantee an end, as there really isn't one in my mind right now. I'll probably be just play it by ear and explore where it goes, while steadily moving in the direction to make James grow and learn some of the lessons I've now learned, and maybe learn some new ones as well. With all the emotionally bothersome stuff out of the way, thank you everyone who still supports this nearly dead story.

    Sorry I've taken so long to bring my attention back to it as it churns unpleasant memories about my own situtation in life, and sorry for apologizing about sharing my problems. Really, thank you everyone for the support. I can't say it enough, and I'm glad and honored that you all enjoy the story so far. It's a silly thing, given that it's just one story out of thousands on this website. But for an author, it's the world. Being able to make something people enjoy, even if for just a small amount and for only a moment, makes me happy beyond words. (Also, I was going to ask if you all think I should stay in Multiple Third Person POV or switch to First Person for James, but as I was writing out the question I decided to stick to Multiple Third Person. Funny how simply writing things out can help you in ways you don't always expect)

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  • 2w, 18h
    2POTN Question

    To address a few things first, I do have a side story planned up with three chapters half made, I still plan on making a Lunar Pearl only side story since she won the poll, and I haven't forgotten Hunter, Slayer, Corpse. Onto the point of this blog now.

    I know I recently had gone through and polished up the story, but I am considering doing it again. While I know it was an improvement, I know I had missed errors, and created new ones in my wake. Honestly, I'm having a hard time rereading over the chapters without wincing at the mistakes. So I'm torn between continuing releasing chapters, or going back and polishing the whole story again which will most likely have new scenes added to improve it. I probably wouldn't do it until the end of act 2 which is fast approaching if I did. I could try to do both at the same time, but that would probably just bog things down. So, I'll leave it to you all. Focus on finishing the story, or going over already made sections and making them better?

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  • 11w, 3h
    2POTN Side Story Teaser

    (Teaser at the bottom)

    I am currently in the works of a side story for Second Princess of the Night. This isn't the one I promised I would do specifically for Lunar Pearl (It will come someday) but rather a series of stories set during the bat ponies stay in Skyline Tower. Each chapter will be a one shot short story featuring a different character, and will be primarily looking at the various bat ponies lives at the tower and what they may have done during their stay.

    There will be a chapter for each character already established such as Mist Hoof, Lunar Pearl, Lily Wing, and Ebon Wing, as well as introduce other characters that may have had only one name drop or none at all. It's side stories like these where I feel like I can explore the bat ponies in much more depth, as well as serve as a foundation to build future characters from. A well liked and interesting character in the side stories may find a spot in the main story down the road (though not so much as to detract from the main cast) or begin a series of stories focused entirely on them. Lunar Pearl is already one that will be receiving such attention, and there isn't anything preventing others from getting the same treatment. But rest assured, these side endeavours will not take priority of the main story, and will be worked on randomly when the time is found.

    Additionally, it also opens a clean slate for other authors to contribute if they so wish. I've mentioned a few times before that my dream is to create something that others like so much that they also begin adding content to it, and this is a great chance to do so if you are interested. Is there a batpony character you have in your mind to add to this 'verse? Do you have story you think would fit well in this part of the main story? If so, please let me know and we can dicuss adding it to the chapters. Please know that I will not be picky or strict on what you create. I only ask that the story has decent grammar, doesn't go completely off the edge regarding it's place in relation to the main story line (such as creating events that won't fit with what has already be created) and isn't about Lunar Pearl, Mist Hoof, Silver Platter, and Star Mane(a character that had one name drop in chapter 30 of 2POTN), as I already have chapters planned for them.

    If you would like to make something about already established characters such as Ruby, Blueblood, Lily Wing, or other so far named characters, just let me know what you have in mind for them and I'll see if it will work. Again, unless it's ridiculous and far out of character, I won't be picky on what is created.

    I hope I don't come across as arrogant by letting people know they are free to add their own ideas to my story. I just want to create a indepth world with many individual stories and viewpoints, and I know it can only grow bigger and diverse if other people find it to their liking and create their own marks within it. Note that chapter releases will come as they are finished, so there is no time limit on submission if you have anything to add. The story will be updated as more content is made.

    With that out of the way, I have a teaser for a chapter focusing on Star Mane. This chapter is being written in First Person, something I have never done before, and would like to hear peoples opinions about it if they would like to share. It gives me a chance to get some early feedback on it, and help promote what kind of things this collection of small stories might be focusing on. It is a five-hundred word intro, and can be found right below.

    Star Mane

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  • 12w, 16h
    2POTN Polishing Finished + Cover art!

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  • 16w, 1d
    Another 2POTN Update

    Eight chapters left to polish, then continuation of the story will commence. Though there were only a few voters, it seems Lunar Pearl is voted pony to receive her own side-line story. I figured it would have been her or Shade Flare. Even though I did not build him up much or reveal how he got into this mess, I do have plans for him to be more involved with the story and be more than just a second in command. While the polishing has only touched him up slightly, I do plan to make him more prevalent in the story. But I don't want to pull away from Ruby/Twilight very much, and he may just have to wait until I make decent headway with other side stories before he receives his own, Lunar Pearls being the newest edition. Also, some exciting news. I have requested a cover art for this story from an artist I quite like, and am awaiting word back on a initial draft. I am hoping it goes through as I think it will be pretty neat.

    Which leads me to my next question, once I am done polishing, should I do one big update, or begin releasing new chapters? I can either hold off new chapters, get a few of them written out and neat looking, and begin releasing them once the coverart is done, as well as some chapters for the currently planned side-stories, Hunter, Slayer, Corpse being one of them. Or, I can begin releasing new chapters as I write them, and include the other updates as they come along. To be honest, as much as I want to do one big update because I think that would be pretty cool, I would find it hard to not release ready-to-read chapters, as the wait for everything to be gathered and put into order might be a bit.

    Though I know it's a silly thing to get excited over (never thought I would over MLP fanfiction) I feel so happy to bring you guys more content. Please know that everything you all have done has helped, and I am so glad you enjoy my writing. Though I understand not wanting to reread the story, I am hoping this polishing of grammar and a few new scenes helps this story become much more enjoyable. So far it's looking to not change the length of the story in any significant way, as I have been learning to cut a lot of exposition save ones I feel necessary, and have been replacing them with scenes and/or dialogue. Let me know in the comments what you think, and I hope everyone has been having a wonderful day :pinkiehappy:

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I began my life traveling the world. My dream was to be an antiquarian of ancient artifacts. I saw many things, and discovered old relics. One of which, I should have never found. Since its discovery my life has changed. My mind degrades with each day and I can't tell whats real or not anymore. The only thing holding me together is a little girl I found. And now we travel the world together, one torn by war and full of terrors. With only a curse to keep us alive. My name, is Simon Petrikov.

First Published
21st Jul 2013
Last Modified
4th Sep 2013

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Very interesting. I look forward to the next chapter.

Great story. How will this change Adventure Time history?

>>2913709 Not particularly trying to change the history. Just... fill in some gaps creatively :)

Interesting story :twilightsmile:

Please continue with good work :rainbowdetermined2:

Great chapter.

Great chapter. I wonder if Twilght and other's will end up meeting the Lich.

>>2974469 Oh its planned at some point :raritywink:

Great chapter.

Good chapter, glad you're still working on this story.

Some points to take into consideration.

1) You seem to be under the impression that young horses are called ponies, this is untrue. Ponies are a completely separate breed of equine from horses. Pony foals grow into ponies just as horse foals grow into horses.

2) The second point is a bit tough to explain and not correctable, more a suggestion for future chapters. The bulk of this chapter was, for all intents and purposes, filler. Entertaining filler, but filler none the less. Normally, this is not a big deal, as it was extra detail which is usually a good thing, but when your taking a month+ between chapters it should be avoided. After so long a wait, readers are going to want to see story progression, dialogue, and the relationships between characters built upon, not Rainbow Dash gallivanting through the wreckage of the world for 7000 words. Really, you had 2-3 vaguely important things happen in this chapter, the first being covered in the very beginning with Spikes disappearance from the group and the groups memories, which wasn't even touched upon in the chapter. The next could be Dash being sent into the city, and last is the allusion to the probable villain at the very end.

Not much at all.

Also a small prediction advice, Marcy is a demon right know and has no weakness to sunlight. She became a vampire sometime after Hudson Abadeer ate her fries.

Well, regardless of the long wait and slight let down, It was still excellently written and fun to read. Keep up the good work and happy writing.:derpytongue2:

>>3157695 Sorry, I was away with family for three weeks and was not able to do much. And when I came back my house got broken into so some delays for that as well. Hopefully I can deliver more chapters as I am probably going to have a very difficult time doing it for 6 months starting in October but hopefully I will have internet and enough time to release periodically.

Second Point is that not everyone knows that Ponies stay Ponies, thus showing Simon's ignorance of the topic.

And third, sorry for the filler. But regarding Spike it isn't something that I plan to solve in just a couple chapters currently.

>>3160069 Hope that f%#&er gets caught, that kind of thing has happened to me a few times.

As for the pony/horse thing, just making sure you knew. You'd be surprised what kind of misconceptions kids today live with, I can't tell you how many times I had to explain the proper terminology for the eye to people. I must have read "hazel/brown/blue/etc pupils" a thousand times when the writer is thinking of the iris. As for the wait, as long as you actually finish the story, you can take as long as you want.

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