Twilight Velvet, in her time a famed romance novelist, visits her daughter in Ponyville to finish her latest work. Will her romantic encounters give her the inspiration she needs?
That aside, this was a good chapter. Velvet redeemed herself quite well, though the sex scen right after the whole thing kinda put a damper on that a bit.
2946486 Agreed. Zecora is definitely a unique character, but rhyming is always a pain to do. For my story I only gave her a couple lines and chalked the rest up to nods and slow head shakes. Still, you got appreciate the work people put into full on conversations with that zebra, especially here.
Zecora huh? I'm guessing Fluttershy, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Twilight, Celestia, Luna, Shining Armor, Cadance and all the rest of Equestria are still waiting to fuck and get fucked by Velvet.
You seem to be ramping up the fetishes lately. Personally, I think it's stupid to say that Velvet needs to 'redeem' herself for screwing half the town - let her have her fun. But we've had, in order, staright, lesbian, incestuous blowjob (sort of), threesome, bondage, and now futa/breast expansion/lactation. Part of me is worried what's next. The rest can't wait!
Nervously Velvet peered into the swirling liquid. Soon her own reflection began to change and a picture of Princess Cadence emerged. Princess Cadence? And to top it off, she was naked and moaning. “Oh, Shining Armor. Impale me with your mighty lance!” she cried.
Velvet blushed furiously as Zecora gave the cauldron a bang with the wooden ladle she had used to stir the potion. “Sorry,” she apologized, once again abandoning her usual rhyming in favour of being clear. “Must have honed in on the wrong child. It happens. The Everfree gets such bad reception at times.”
*falls over laughing*
And then Velvet may have just watched her only daughter die. Talk about your mood whiplash.
Sex that actually ties into the plot. Nice work, though Zecora was hilarious and badass as usual. Considers that she lives in Everfree, it's no surprise our favorite shaman has a lot of tricks up her sleeve, or lack of thereof.
oh you bastard a cliffhanger!
I can sympathise with the effort it takes for Zecora, I only wrote three or four lines for he and even THAT was a challenge.
Why cliffhangers? Why must you torture me so?
Welp, that wasn't expected at all.
That aside, this was a good chapter. Velvet redeemed herself quite well, though the sex scen right after the whole thing kinda put a damper on that a bit.
And that cliff hanger, oooohhhhh.
Oh fuck no!
2946486 Agreed. Zecora is definitely a unique character, but rhyming is always a pain to do. For my story I only gave her a couple lines and chalked the rest up to nods and slow head shakes. Still, you got appreciate the work people put into full on conversations with that zebra, especially here.
Great!
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If you actually make that story I'll give you my arms.
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That won't do. How do you plan on working a computer without arms?
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I am typing with my nose
"Now cease your needless talk, screw me till I cannot walk."
That line right there. Pure genius.
Zecora huh? I'm guessing Fluttershy, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Twilight, Celestia, Luna, Shining Armor, Cadance and all the rest of Equestria are still waiting to fuck and get fucked by Velvet.
When you mentioned Futa, and started with Fluttershy, I assumed the obvious.
You are a clever dog.
Also, of course it homed in on the wrong child.
At least we know she's probably going to be a grandmother, soon...
You seem to be ramping up the fetishes lately. Personally, I think it's stupid to say that Velvet needs to 'redeem' herself for screwing half the town - let her have her fun. But we've had, in order, staright, lesbian, incestuous blowjob (sort of), threesome, bondage, and now futa/breast expansion/lactation. Part of me is worried what's next. The rest can't wait!
*falls over laughing*
And then Velvet may have just watched her only daughter die. Talk about your mood whiplash.
You silly filly. Tis the power of plot!
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Dohohohoho
I figure, if you're going to borrow Screaming Jay Hawkins' immortal title, you've set the bar pretty high for yourself.
And cleared it with inches to spare, I might add.
2960239 Indeed, lol.
2950067the word tentacles come to mind.
Wait. If Velvet doesn't have balls, then how does she produce sperm?
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Magic, author don't gotta explain shit.
Sex that actually ties into the plot. Nice work, though Zecora was hilarious and badass as usual. Considers that she lives in Everfree, it's no surprise our favorite shaman has a lot of tricks up her sleeve, or lack of thereof.
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Agreed. Zecora alone can be a Crowning Moment of Funny if written well. Like here.
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Well said.