I know you guys are tired of all these Cupcakes sequels and stuff, but I thought it would be fun. I'm jumping on the Cupcakes train! This fic takes place about 2 years after Rainbow Dash's number was drawn. Rainbow Dash wakes up inside a coffin with no knowledge of how she got there, or how she died. All she knows is that everyone thinks she's dead, she has no wings, no cutie mark, and no organs. And she has a strange sense that one of her friends knows more about Rainbow's death than she's telling. I know, it sounds really dumb, but give it a chance! Read, comment, and enjoy!
Chapters (6)
good work keep it up
This is getting good, you should keep it going I want to know how the rest of her friends react especially Pinkie Pie. (also a side note what do you mean by "Lover" )
please please please by the gods of olympus and all that is greek PLEASE continue
Odd and somewhat creepy, but interesting. I think you need to work on the tone, I feel like RBD should be a little more freaked out. Also, it seems weird that she would think this was a prank and not recall the events leading up to this.
Ehhh....... I have no idea how I feel about this one. It has potential, to be sure. I was just reluctant to click it 'cause it's a fan made Cupcakes sequel.
The first problem, the wall of text. I lost where I was a couple times when reading it. A story can be as shitty or great as it wants, but a wall of text will take the reader out of the story.
My second problem, is that RD gets resurrected. I have NO clue on how anyone can pull that off. RD had her organs gutted out, correct? There wouldn't be any possible way (realistically) that she would survive past a second. And, if she was there for 2 years, than she would've been decomposed a bit, looking like a zombie, pretty much.
You could've added a lot more to this story, like more after your cliffhanger. I get it. It adds tension, especially to a story like this. It just felt.... odd on how it abruptly ended on me. I was getting into it, but the cut off made me feel a little empty.
Yet I want MORE! To me, this can go a GREAT way, depending on what you do with the story. Like I said, it has potential. Just add more detail, extend the story a bit, and get rid of the wall of text. Really wasn't what I was expecting, I'll tell you that.
Instead of this story making me
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Great premise, though here's some suggestions for improvement:
1. Spell & Grammar check.
2. Twilight seems a bit too quick to believe it really is Dash's reanimated corpse. She's a rational mare, and only after eliminating the possibilities of dreaming, hallucinations, and a cruel prank by somepony would she believe Rainbow's really back from the dead.
3. The fact that Twilight mentions the location of Dash's body in relation to Sugarcube Corner is a little odd. Unless she'd known that's where Rainbow was going there's no reason for her to mention it.
4. Don't hesitate to indent at the speaking parts; it's too straining to read enormous word blocks.
2888744 probably w hat ever brought her back, tram auric shock, or Pinkie messing her screwed up RD's memories
Edit out the wall of text then come talk to me
Lol just kidding, I'm serious about the wall of text though
This has some great potential!
It would be nice if you could maybe slow down the pace, it seemed like Twilight came to terms with Rainbow Dash living too quickly.
It's good! Interesting. I like your style of writing to. NOW HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER!
denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw4878-d99.gif Might as well kiss your flank goodbye Pinkie.
Well, shit, hell must've frozen over. This is a double rarity: a cupcakes sequel that doesn't disappoint like a cupcakes sequel tends to do. It's actually a solid read for how short a chapter it is. Please, continue.
Loathe,
Your Antagonist
Great story with very few errors. Keep it up
Yea didnt know if it would be a bad sequel or not .
but i gave it a read and well... keep going. I shall follow
faved
I'm excited!
"That's the thing…your body was found 2 miles away from SugarCube Corner."
Why did she take Sugarcube Corner as a "reference point" (or whatever it's called).
It's like Twilight knew that Pinkie was behind it, but I'm pretty sure she doesn't. You should edit that.
only problum i have with this is this line
she mentions SugarCube Corner instead of saying outside of town or near someones house or near the forest... implying she knows who the killer was and how far she was moved from her death...
i rest my case people are going to make stupid cupcakes sequels.
i think you oughta give some credit to ask dead rainbow dash tumblr blog for using his story.
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Ahem? This is MY story, I made it up! I don't seal people's ideas! Don't go accusing me until you know what's going on! I got this image from google images, not from a damn Tumblr. I AM NOT AN IDEA THIEF!!
Don't y'all be accusing,
Surprise The Pegasus
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Gah! i didn't say you stole it! i just said it sounds like the premise from the blog, i mean pinkamena kills Dash and Dash comes back as an undead assassin to get revenge on pinkamena. they clearly know she did it right? they found the body somewhere outside of the bakery. so when do we get to the hack and slash parts?
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Sorry for freaking out and all, it just sounded a little like an accusation. I didn't know that blog existed until I read your comment! I don't want any bad feelings.
Warm regards,
Surprise The Pegasus
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Oh it's ok it was all just a simple misunderstanding.
Eh. I'm afraid someone will have to pull a deus ex machina or end up putting rainbow out of her misery. You can't really live very well as an undead pony with not much for insides.
Two miles would be like outside of Ponyville I would think, seeing as it's not a huge town. Seem like the scale might be off there.
I liked it :D
pretty good but you don't usually wait 2 years to investigate a missing person/ponies report...
Man this makes me remember my resurrection.
Have some pony do a complete resurrection spell that makes her look like her old self, making sure that she won't end up causing the zombie apocalypse like Rarity when she brought Spike back from the dead.
GOD DAMMIT DUDE! Your making these so short!
It is a bother, really. I can easily say that the people reading this story will enjoy it more with longer chapters. Instead of each scene it's own chapter,maybe put 2 or 3 scenes in a chapter.
I do like the story, really. But the length of these chapters are just NAGGING at me to read the next one, which will probably be up in a couple days, with the same length, and same comment........
Nice Story!
The only thing bothering me, is that Twilight acts rather unfriendly towards the fact that one of her best friends has resurected ( +, she acts very... "normal" for such a thing)
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Moar
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A Zombie Dash with glimmer-wings? Sounds funny
I give it a "meh". Sorry.
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It's all cool, everyone has their own opinions.
I feel bad for Dash :( Getting a hooficure must be torture :(
Oh and also I think they're long :) Just perfect length :) Will keep reading :D
Cool
2898729 I'm loving this story oh and by the way...
Lol icwatchudidther.
You know what, this looks strangely interesting. I'll give it a read.
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BRO, HEY, BRO!! HIII!!!
2941897 hey check out that fic I added to 'Rainbow Dash is Best Pony' it's really good and sad
read it!!
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I will read it, I just have to finish reading everything else that is on my list. I'll die before that happens!!!
She's going to have to be careful, going to the spa may result in her newly applied dye washing out, then her secret is out.
Heh, heh. Sorry about complaining about short chapters. I was just used to chapters maybe 1k-4k and it bugged me a bit.
Nitpicking, my 8th weakness.
i like the shortness of the chapters. I like to read them when i feel like reading, but not alot.... (and can you please upload some more chapters?
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Yeah…sorry about the lack of uploads. I've had a really busy 2 weeks…and I'm working on my submission for the Random Romance August prompt. I'll get right to a new chapter, I pinkie promise!
~Surprise
its bee a long time since I saw this fic and i have to say that it's disappointing not having a couple new chapters to read ah well you are only mortal... MORTAL!
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Well wait no more! Behold, THE NEW CHAPTER!!
I hate it... THE SUSPENSE! Not the fic, nah I love it. Shame ZombieDash has to stay hidden. APPLEJACK FEELS!
They had cell phones all this time!!!?