(for the 7/10 Flash Fiction event on EQD)
Griffons were always known for their savage appetite, devouring anything with blood and guts just to satisfy their appetite. Animals realize this, and cower in fear at the sight of any such monsters, hoping to never see the day where they meet one face to face, or rather talon.
Gilbert, brother to Gilda, decides that he was sick of it, and wants to love all the pretty little animals instead of turning them into food. Turns out, it would be a lot more difficult than he thought, and seeks help from a certain Pegasus...
*If you see any mistakes or corrections you deem necessary, please let me know, I'd really appreciate it! Thanks!
*Special thanks to TheGreatSako, who has and will continue to edit my story. Without him, I wouldn't have made it into the 7/10 Flash Fic Event, nor would this story be as awesome as it is now.
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2852487 *facepalm* I can't believe I actually missed that...
THIS NEVER HAPPENED
Oh Gilda...
Interesting...
I like it!
If you can keep the chapters somewhere in between 1000-2500 words I'll read these chapters as soon as I find them.
Interesting concept going on here. I hope to see more.
Side note:Your intro says, "Gilbert, sister to Gilda" when you've clearly made Gilbert a guy, and therefore, brother to Gilda. Just a heads-up.
Nice ^^
just wondered... has it ever been stated that Griffons from MLP really do eat (just) meat?
Gilda seemed perfectly fine with the apple she stole.
As someone who loves Griffons AND is a Vegetarian, I'm so following this
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We do know they eat desserts. Eclairs, chocolate mousse.
Gilda ate an apple she stole so can't be all meat. What would she have eaten at Junior Speedsters. Doubt the pegasi gave her meat.
"Gilbert, sister to Gilda, decides that he was sick of it"
I suppose you mean "brother", with a name like Gilbert.
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Wow, I totally forgot about the other one...
maybe he was just too... canterlot...ish, so i completely forgot he even was a Griffon.
Huh, well at least Fluttershy feeds her birds with worms and has some other predatory animals she cares for (ferrets for example) so there must be some kind of adequate food available
2852579 I'll try to keep it up! Thanks
2852663 Whoops! O__o' Thanks for the catch
2854063 Got it fixed, thank you!
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Sweet! I think you just found the perfect story Skunkiss!
But you do bring up a good point.
If I were to be technical, I'd think that Apple trees don't normally grow in forest-like environments. Then I can say that Gilda hates berries. My story, I can do whatever I want. I can have her wear a dress and explode if I wanted
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Oh yeah, that was totally my intention right from the start
We really shouldn't be too analytical about these things, it's your story and if you say Griffons only fish blue whales in mountain lakes then that is reality
oh, and btw.... If Gilda would ever wear a dress... I think she'd explode instantly, and the whole universe with her... maybe even twice
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Agreed
Sorry, I accidentally published this before editing this, and it was a few minutes before I finally realized and unpublished to edit.
So anyone who reads this, might wanna go over again if you'd like?
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But...but...I just spent like the last twenty minutes writing a long-ass comment pointing out all of the mistakes, and now you're telling me that you fixed them?
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.....Yeup, pretty much!
I was gonna make some smart-ass comment about how "He mentallied them so hard!", but you took that away from me. Still, "alongside it is family", at least I get that one.
My, my, what a loose griffon.
"it is white towers".
"naturally"? What's that supposed to mean?
Either "considerably more shallow" or "considerably shallower".
Capitalize "i'll".
You meant "you're" (twice); an easy to mistakingly perform cardinal sin, but deadly none the less, like stepping on a crack breaking 'yo momma's back.
Forgot to close the quotations.
More sinning; "you're"!
"i'll" again.
Since you're linking these two statements with a semicolon, capitalizing "it" is uneccesary.
Formating derp.
You didn't capitalize "i'm"~
2868420 Wow O__o'
You are an English genius, my friend (at least to my standards).
I would make a crappy joke, but I think that would not be thanking you enough, seriously. This means a lot
Laughed at the 'Formatting derp', that was an awesome comment
If you're (yay, I got it right!) so dedicated as to post huge editing comments, would you like to my editor for this short story? I'd think it would be better than 20-mile long comments, wouldn't you agree?
I would be so grateful! Even if you don't, which is perfectly fine, you've helped me so much, you have no idea (Pinkie does
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Oh... Oh God, Gilbert...
How could you make that mistake...
I think Fluttershy accept Gilbert far to rapidly. (That said, I don't think she is the kind of pony that let her judgment of someone be altered by who he is related to.)
Angel Bunny will destroy him. Angel is the true villain. Nightmare Moon was only his apprentice. MUHAHAHAHAH!!!!!
Hmm.*Reads chapter title*
Already? *Sees incomplete tag* 
Nice try!
Heil Spell check!
2898006 Drats!
But... But now I'm going to be going crazy because I was looking for a good, solid, close paren...
DAMN YOU COMPUTER PROGRAMMING HABITS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2908099 Mwahaha, success
This story hasn't updated in years, so I'm just going to assume Angel straight-up murdered Gilbert in details to gory to describe for such a light fic.
so this is going to be like Leo the Lion