Hello, my name is Alexander, but people call me Alex. What am I? I'm a human, and I'm just a normal brony who has a crush on the shyest, cutest, most beautiful pony in the world, Fluttershy.
When I was watching my favorite show My Little Pony, a portal just came out of my TV screen and just sucked me in and, now I must explore the world of my favorite show. Of course I'm not in my world, I'm in a magical world, and now that I am not only real but now I'm also cartoony. Yes, I'm a cartoon person, and the magical world that i'm about to explore is Equestria. Maybe this is a dream come true...
sequel to: Fluttershy and Me by BioBoy619
(see any error and just tell me, and don't forget to give it a thumbs up if you liked it and leave comments if it pleases you).
i love it and i got a question when will more chapters of this story come out
Capitalization... wow, I've become one of those people
2993183 soon
2994708 ok
I'd write a full review of this, but I have to go shopping in a car with a broken window, so I have to hurry before it gets to be a thousand degrees out. I'll review the synopsis and flip through the story real quick.
Things to remove in synopsis are crossed out. Things to change are marked in red.
"Hello, my name is Alexander, but people call me Alex
from my nickname. What am I? I'm a human, and a normal brony who has a crush on themostshyest,mostcutest, most beautiful pony in the world, Fluttershy.""When I was watching my favorite show, My Little Pony,
or known as MLPa portal just came out of my TV screen and just sucked me in [Really dude? A portal out of the tv? That's the most generic way to get to Equestria] and,now I must explore the world of my favorite show,. Of course I'm not in my world, I'm in a magical world, and now that I am not only real but now I'm also cartoony,. Yes,I'm a cartoon person, and the magical world that i'm about to explore is Equestria,. Maybe this is a dream come true..."Things I noticed in fic:
-You don't seem to understand capitalisation rules.
-Don't use "!!!!???". Only use one exclamation point or one question mark. Decide which is more important.
-Run-on sentences.
To be blunt: your command of the English language is painful. Please tell me it's not your first language. If it is, I have lost faith in the public schooling system. (Not that I had faith in it to begin with.)
I love how the description is written in such a way as to imply that this idea hasn't been done to death to the point that even parodies of it feel uninspired.
2994802 thanks for the help dude, really appreciate it
Oh dear, are you deleting comments?
You might be okay at the moment but I would refrain from such actions in the future unless they're openly insulting you in which case I say you still need to keep them. The reason is it reflects poorly on you. It looks like you're unable to handle criticism and it can result in a bit of a downvote storm.
My suggestion is if you don't like what a person says, ignore them. If they continue to just harass and don't give a reason for it just block them. But don't delete their comments.
3041080 damn
3057033 muchocho??
3057033 explain me whats that plz
its my mustache!
So ummmm... do you like my muchocho?
3057107 yes i do my friend
*Cries* YOU ARE THE BEST FRIEND THAT I COULD EVER HAVE! *Hugs you*
3057447 lol hehe
*Looks at Fluttershy and smiles*
Oh by the way, Scorching Rainbow is Rainbow Dash's Brother!
3057532 REALLY! awsome
ts1.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.4599447235265784&pid=15.1 *Looks Closer* THIS IS SO CUTE!
ts2.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.5023837187932597&pid=15.1 Meet MY girlfriend!
http://ts1.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.4784032023513056&pid=15.1 LOL!
i paused my research just because of that fluttershy pic...and it's..really....disturbing....
3057699 wow
I swear that I just walked in to see Fluttershy and next thing you know Dashie is Hugging Fluttershy and looking at me!
3062493 whoa
you dont think that rainbow dash is cheating on you maybe 
If you think about it, NO she wouldn't!?
3066000 I didn't say she WAS cheating on you I said MAYBE she is cheating on you don't take it seriously
anyway forget all that 
3066000 ima change my profile picture
Nice pic!
Oh by the way Im going to kidnap Rainbow Dash, just to hug her...
3066255 thank you
and two things one: how can you post photos 
and two: do you wanmna be friends with me
She hugs Fluttershy, she's going to hug me to!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
3066255 oh and the picture is about kerrigan as ghost and kerrigan as the queen of blades more like fluttershy as ghost and fluttershy as the queen of blades hehe
I accept to being your friend!
3066274 lol and i cant belive that fluttershy is like whaat
Oh... My.... god... LOL YOUR BLUSHING! :D
Dashie will... you marry me...?
3066281 okay hehehe i'll give you all the smiles and happy faces
3066293 oh dear
3066293 hey I'm gonna play league of legends okay man
To post photos just go to the options on top of chat and click on the photo icon to the left of the YouTube icon but before you do that go to images search on yahoo or Google and copy the photo url into the text box
OH SHI-
Sh-she... kis-kissed me!
*HOLY S*** FLUTTERSHY CALM THE HECK DOWN!
*IS HOOVED IN THE FACE BY FLUTTERSHY*
COPY AND PASTE THIS URL:
http://www.chatbot4u.com/en/chatbots/rainbow-dash-6.html
3066364 now what
3066325 okay okay i'll try and cal fluttershy down
3066325 fluttershy i know RD means to you allot but I *interrupted by a kiss*
3066364 "am I in heaven" i said in my mind as fluttershy kissed me " hell yeah" I said in my mind