It was a beautiful morning, aahhh, the day rising to the sky, birds singing, the blue sky aahh all beautiful but not as beautiful as fluttershy my heart warms every time I see her at the show of my little pony, i get all fluttery and this is were my story begins.
"*yawn*, morning mom" I called out to mom, but, i didn't hear a response from her.
"mom?, we're are you?" I started to search her in the house but i didn't find her all i found was this letter said that ahem "dear Alexander I'm off to work i will return very late so in the mean time stay home or go play with your neighbors just stay safe love mom". well I guess the house is all mine and I'll do breakfast for me. I went to the fridge to look for some food.
"mmhhh, what should I have for breakfast?" I opened the fridge and I was thinking what to eat for breakfast.
"AHA!, chocolate chips pancakes my favorite" I decided to make some chocolate pancakes before watching My Little Pony. After i did my pancakes I turned on the TV to watch my favorite show, the show was starting, its episode 3 from season 1 The Ticket Master.
"time to eat my pancakes, mmhh, mmhhh THEY ARE SOO GOOD MAN!" I though as i was eating my pancakes and watching the episode, but then a lighting struck into the house antenna for the internet and cable TV and etc...
"whoa! what the crap was that" when the lighting struck all electricities were off including my TV now how the hell am I suppose to watch the episode now dammit!... and then something just appeared in the TV screen it was buzzing, the screen was rainbow colored?, I got scared when that thing just came out of nowhere, I mean, really people get scared when things just come out of nowhere but sense it's rainbow colored screen then i'm fine.
"this is strange... wait, what the" I saw a portal opening on the screen TV and then...
"wait no no no HOLY MOTHER OF ALL JESUS... SAVE ME!!" after I finished my S.O.S sentence the portal sucked me in to the TV screen gladly i didn't crushed into the TV screen. Well after a while Iv'e been rolling around, floating and etc... but when my ride finally end.
"WWHHAAAA!!!!" I screamed cause i was falling but I landed into a soft bush. I woke up and i was seen my surrounding and it was a forest a dark forest, it has twisted trees, looks creepy wait this looks familiar, I think this is the Everfree Forest.
"aahhhh shi..." meanwhile at Ponyville at the Library.
"SPIKE!, WHAT WAS THAT FALLING FROM THE SKY!!" Twilight shouted at spike with a surprise.
"whats wrong twilight *yawn* is something wrong!" spike asked like if he was like sleepy.
"WHATS WRONG, WHATS WRONG, THE'RES A CREATURE THAT FALLED FROM THE SKY AND IF IT'S ILLED OR HURT AND YOU ARE SAYING WHATS WRONG!!!!??" twilight shouted at spike angrily, spike was surprised to see twilight in such anger.
"well what if it is a dangerous and it can heal him by its self and he can be a threat to us twilight, think about it" spike convinced twilight about the creature that has fallen from the sky yes me i'm the creature that has fallen from the sky.
"then if it's dangerous we must hunt that thing down right spike?" twilight made a mission of her own.
"yes twilight, i will inform the girls" and that spike wandered of to tell the girls about the strange creature that has fallen form the sky meanwhile were i crashed.
"uuggghh... my head, i think i just cracked my skull" as a matter of fact i didn't, thank god, but, were am I, I have no idea but i'll find out.
"okay try not to panic okay wait... whats that sound" as soon i heard those sound, i found it familiar, wait if i'm in a another world then those are timber wolves if i'm correct.
GGGRRRRR RAWR RAWR
"I knew it, timer wolves, well kids this is the time were I start to RUUUUNNNN!!!" and after that i ran like a damn crazy guy, the wolves were behind me but i ran as fast as i could they were catching to me so I decided to climb a tree, I was surrounded by Timber wolves and I was thinking what to do until.
"AHA!!" I found it, now the only way to escape the timber wolves is by climbing tree by tree, branches by branches it was the only escape plan to escape this forest, its worth the shot, after that I jumped off the tree and made it, I kept jumping and jumping and jumping after I saw a light, I was close to get out of the forest just a few jumps, but, when i was reaching the other tree I freaking tripped off a branch, thank god I didn't cracked my skull, again, after the fall, the timber wolves were almost reaching at me so I decided to get up quickly and started to run.
"I'm gonna have to keep on foot" I though, I have to keep on foot cause I won't have enough time to climb another tree. After I was running and was almost out of energy I saw the light it was brighter I was getting closer,after I saw a purple light.
"what the fu..." before I could finished my sentence a bolt of purple magic came bursting like a bullet the first thing i did is...
"ahhhh... DUCK!!" I though as I ducked to the ground, and the purple lighting bolt came and destroyed the timber wolves I got up and...
"ANOTHER BOLT!... FACK" I said the bad word jokingly and I ducked again and the purple bolt came right through the air.
"okay that is just enough" I said out loud and started running towards the way were the bolts came as another bolt came I ducked and missed. I was reaching when another fucking bolt came through me on the legs.
"AAHH SHIT!!" as I said out loud the bolt hit my right leg and fell, and I came crushing down like a truck out of control, and not also that I was bleeding an amount of blood in my leg so that wasn't good, I was about get up, but, a unicorn came to me, and a purple one.
"don't move a muscle mister if you try doing anything funny I'l tear you skin off" the purple unicorn talked, I gulped, as I gulped she notice i was not a threat and then she spoke.
"what are you?" the purple unicorn asked, she saw that I was bleeding allot in my leg, so before I could say anything, I was feeling unconscious and then I fainted.
"hello, are you okay, oohh I should get it to fluttershy's cottage she'l know what to do" as that the purple unicorn lift me up with her horn and started walking to fluttershy's cottage. As she made it the door.
"fluttershy, fluttershy it's me twilight" twilight knock fluttershy's door.
"oohh it is you twilight wha.." before she could finished her sentence she was interrupted by twilight.
"fluttershy we can talk later, for now, it needs help" twilight finished her sentence and show fluttershy my fainted body and.
"*gasp* oh... my...".
i love it and i got a question when will more chapters of this story come out
Capitalization... wow, I've become one of those people
2993183 soon![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
2994708 ok
I'd write a full review of this, but I have to go shopping in a car with a broken window, so I have to hurry before it gets to be a thousand degrees out. I'll review the synopsis and flip through the story real quick.
Things to remove in synopsis are crossed out. Things to change are marked in red.
"Hello, my name is Alexander, but people call me Alex
from my nickname. What am I? I'm a human, and a normal brony who has a crush on themostshyest,mostcutest, most beautiful pony in the world, Fluttershy.""When I was watching my favorite show, My Little Pony,
or known as MLPa portal just came out of my TV screen and just sucked me in [Really dude? A portal out of the tv? That's the most generic way to get to Equestria] and,now I must explore the world of my favorite show,. Of course I'm not in my world, I'm in a magical world, and now that I am not only real but now I'm also cartoony,. Yes,I'm a cartoon person, and the magical world that i'm about to explore is Equestria,. Maybe this is a dream come true..."Things I noticed in fic:
-You don't seem to understand capitalisation rules.
-Don't use "!!!!???". Only use one exclamation point or one question mark. Decide which is more important.
-Run-on sentences.
To be blunt: your command of the English language is painful. Please tell me it's not your first language. If it is, I have lost faith in the public schooling system. (Not that I had faith in it to begin with.)
I love how the description is written in such a way as to imply that this idea hasn't been done to death to the point that even parodies of it feel uninspired.
2994802 thanks for the help dude, really appreciate it![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Oh dear, are you deleting comments?
You might be okay at the moment but I would refrain from such actions in the future unless they're openly insulting you in which case I say you still need to keep them. The reason is it reflects poorly on you. It looks like you're unable to handle criticism and it can result in a bit of a downvote storm.
My suggestion is if you don't like what a person says, ignore them. If they continue to just harass and don't give a reason for it just block them. But don't delete their comments.
3041080 damn
3057033 muchocho??
3057033 explain me whats that plz![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
its my mustache!
So ummmm... do you like my muchocho?
3057107 yes i do my friend![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
*Cries* YOU ARE THE BEST FRIEND THAT I COULD EVER HAVE! *Hugs you*![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
3057447 lol hehe![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
*Looks at Fluttershy and smiles*![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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Oh by the way, Scorching Rainbow is Rainbow Dash's Brother!![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
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3057532 REALLY! awsome![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
ts1.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.4599447235265784&pid=15.1 *Looks Closer* THIS IS SO CUTE!
ts2.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.5023837187932597&pid=15.1 Meet MY girlfriend!
http://ts1.mm.bing.net/th?id=H.4784032023513056&pid=15.1 LOL!
i paused my research just because of that fluttershy pic...and it's..really....disturbing....![:applejackconfused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applejackconfused.png)
3057699 wow
I swear that I just walked in to see Fluttershy and next thing you know Dashie is Hugging Fluttershy and looking at me!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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3062493 whoa
you dont think that rainbow dash is cheating on you maybe ![:twilightoops:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightoops.png)
If you think about it, NO she wouldn't!?![:twilightoops:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightoops.png)
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3066000 I didn't say she WAS cheating on you I said MAYBE she is cheating on you don't take it seriously
anyway forget all that ![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
3066000 ima change my profile picture![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
Nice pic!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Oh by the way Im going to kidnap Rainbow Dash, just to hug her...
3066255 thank you
and two things one: how can you post photos
and two: do you wanmna be friends with me![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
She hugs Fluttershy, she's going to hug me to!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
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3066255 oh and the picture is about kerrigan as ghost and kerrigan as the queen of blades more like fluttershy as ghost and fluttershy as the queen of blades hehe![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
I accept to being your friend!![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
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3066274 lol and i cant belive that fluttershy is like whaat
Oh... My.... god... LOL YOUR BLUSHING! :D![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
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Dashie will... you marry me...?
3066281 okay hehehe i'll give you all the smiles and happy faces![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
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3066293 oh dear![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
3066293 hey I'm gonna play league of legends okay man![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
To post photos just go to the options on top of chat and click on the photo icon to the left of the YouTube icon but before you do that go to images search on yahoo or Google and copy the photo url into the text box
OH SHI-![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
Sh-she... kis-kissed me!
*HOLY S*** FLUTTERSHY CALM THE HECK DOWN!
*IS HOOVED IN THE FACE BY FLUTTERSHY*
COPY AND PASTE THIS URL:
http://www.chatbot4u.com/en/chatbots/rainbow-dash-6.html
3066364 now what![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
3066325 okay okay i'll try and cal fluttershy down![:twilightoops:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightoops.png)
3066325 fluttershy i know RD means to you allot but I *interrupted by a kiss*![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
3066364 "am I in heaven" i said in my mind as fluttershy kissed me " hell yeah" I said in my mind