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why so much focus on Strider? I thought this was more about twilight? Not that I'm complaining its still a great story so far
Okay, no. I'm sorry, but this chapter killed it for me. You've advertised a story about Twilight. Not a rather uninteresting OC gaining far out magical powers. I know this is probably an important thing for the overarching story, but there wasn't even a single scene about the characters I'd, you know, started reading this for. I tried to be patient, I really did. But this chapter was the wrong thing in the wrong place. Wind Strider just isn't interesting enough for his own chapter, at least at this point in the story. There was no indication coming in that it would be this OC-focused, and your OC honestly just isn't good enough to drive his own chapter. So, maybe I'll try again later, but I'm done for now.
Alright I'm gonna give this one more chapter I reckon.
No offense but strider killed the story for me and this chapter danced on its grave. From the very beginning he had very little development and didn't make sense. What's the point of an enchantment so you blend in with fellow guards if it's on custom armour? That's the dumbest thing I've ever read. Also it's amazing he just happens to have the perfect personality to match rainbow dash, which also happens to be the worst personality for a royal messenger or even a guard, and that he not only started dating her in a week but also knows her little quirks and follies.
Seriously, good story you have with twilight but wind strider being the focus has ruined it.
Sorry but OC's made it difficult to read. Completely out of left field. This chapter...I struggled to read it due to "Strider this" and "Strider that." I'm just not seeing WHY this story has gotten so many upvotes at this point in time. The concept seemed interesting, the summery for the story seemed interesting, but...the execution? Uuh...Yeah. Sorry.
Every single person in the comment section complains about Strider and I have no idea why. He's not a mary sue, he's not OPAF, he's not perfect. If anything he's more worldbuilding. I've seen more heinous OCs. All of them are saying "he shouldn't have his own chapter" but he's just windows dressing for what's happening to Twilight. It's obvious to me that he's a convenient plot vehicle for connecting the dots between "Luna gives plot relevant knowledge to the readers" and "Twilight has a spooky vision", and he's useful as the audiece's eyepiece into the workings of the night-guard (or whatever secret section he is part of). And rather than just have him come out of left field for plot dumps, you working him into the story with an on-again, off-again relationship with Rainbow. And even the casual observer will recognize that being a royal messenger is carte-blanche for him to go wherever he needs to.
Summary: He's an ok OC and he doesn't eclipse all the main characters. He does his job as a plot vehicle. And he doesn't come across as a mary sue. I don't know what the problem is. Camo from A Change in Harmony is so bad that I actually skipped over sections with him in it. He's what these people mean when they say "OC ruins a chapter"
"i DoNt LiKe OcS sTrIdEr SuCkS"
Does that about sum this story's criticisms up?