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...you wrote it.
You actually wrote it.
...I HAVE NO WORDS.
...but I do have a boner. So I guess you succeeded?
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Yep, I wrote it. Glad to hear I did a good job with it.
Huh, its been awhile since the last time you posted a story. I will have to check this out later.
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You should also check out Twow443's riffs. They're wonderfully entertaining...at least the ones that aren't riffs of Bronystories' works. *shudder*
That was a good clopfic.
At the last part of the story I thought "Dam" and "busted" LOL
I believe the first Yaazi there should be Dinky. There's another place where you put Yaazi's name twice when it would be Dinky and Yaazi.
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Where's the other place?
2774514 here:
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Thanks. Any other cases you spotted?
And what do you think of the story overall?
2774528 For my only knowing the character Dinky from one or two riffs I read where she was a part of it, and my not knowing Yaazi at all, this was done well enough that minimal character knowledge was fine. They've been friends for about ten years, Yaazi is a halfling, Dinky and her share a bit of an empathic link, and it's Yaazi's first time experiencing Heat. It's cute, not so long as to need a great plot line, and is quite sweet. As for editing purposes... I've already pointed out what I noticed. Anything else escaped my one-eyed glare.
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Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it, even if you didn't know about Yaazi.
Ya ever think about making a whole story around this? Like what comes after, or before?
2777113 That would be awesome.
Also, maybe have another story showing Twow and Shy on their date, and how it goes fairly well... for a riffer and his mare.
2777041 Oh, I knew about Yaazi, I've just never read riffs with her in them. I really should read more riffs, it might help me step up my game, as well as acquaint me with the riffverse a bit better.
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Hadn't thought about that, yet. I wrote this - as I said in the description - specifically for you to use in the "Saving Twow" riff sequence, since you mentioned having Yaazi and Dinky riff a story staring them in the comments. I hadn't even thought about expanding this beyond that.
And, to be perfectly honest, I don't have enough of a grip of the character of Twow outside of riffing to know how he'd act in such a situation...or how to write good background beyond that.
So, in essence, if I were to expand this - probably to after, rather than before - what I'd have to do is write each chapter, wait for you to tell me how Twow would react to the situation (speaking of which, how WOULD Twow react to walking in on that, especially with that line from Yaazi?) and then I write just Yaazi and Dinky dealing with outside that.
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Yes, you should read more of those. Yaazi is super adorable when she appears.
2777336 if you want to expand on how he'd react, I'd say just go with your gut. Frankly, I'm flattered you did this anyway.
And I'll get on riffing this very soon.
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I look forward to seeing this riff.
Don't know if I will expand on it or not, but I'd really like to know your opinion on the reaction.
Look at it this way. You're living in Fluttershy's shed. You and Shy just went on a date. When you get back, you here your daughter and her friend screaming in the shed. You bust in, and find them...entwined. Your daughter - who presently has 'extra equipment' - says it's not what it looks like.
First gut reaction, what do you do?
2777502 Prooooooooooooooooooooooooobably freak the fuck out first.
After I calmed down and spoke with the two of them, I'd more then likely give my consent.
And of course Shy would want to talk to them as well.
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Yeah, that sounds about right. The freak out would be hilarious to watch, though.
2777749 Well hey. If you do decide to expand on this, I'll sure riff it.
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Well, use the one shot - or first chapter, as the case may be - for the riff sequence it was written for. If I do expand it, I'd like to see you riffing it with Yaazi and Dinky. That would be fun to see.
This, this is as good as Beonystories.
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Wow. Thanks.