Nightmares
“I am not
afraid of the monsters”
Those were her words, muttered in the middle of the dark night, muttered when she was still at home. A friend stood by her side, looking at her with worried eyes. But she didn’t mind.
Her mind was fresh and clean and simple, and she felt comfortable. She was not afraid, she felt brave and bold. Nothing could hurt her. She not only said the words, she meant them. She believed in them. She knew they were true. She was not afraid of the monsters.
“But everypony is,” said her friend.
"Everypony is afraid of them"
A student, a know-it-all, the smartest mare she’d ever known. “That’s the reason why we don’t go in there at night.”
Her friend was worried about her, she was scared. Because even being the smartest mare she’d ever known, she was still just a normal pony.
And she smiled at her friend's demeanor
“Everypony is afraid,” she replied proudly. “Everypony, but me. I’ll go there, and spend the night in the forest if you don’t believe me!”
Her friend tried to stop her, tried to scream it wasn’t necessary, but it was already too late. She wouldn’t hear the student’s words, she wouldn’t reason with her. No sense in running away from her own actions now. She was going there.
She would prove the world what she was made of.
“I am not
afraid of the monsters”
She repeated the words, enjoying her own bravado. And then she flew away.
She flew to the forest.
She would prove herself
She flew to the Everfree.
And the stars and the Moon stopped shining, and she could see nothing once she entered the Forest.
The Everfree.
Where monsters await.
She was not afraid of the monsters, those had been her words, those had been her thoughts. She could fight the monsters; she could run from the monsters. She had done so before. She had been there before and she had survived. She had never felt afraid of it. She had never had a reason to be truly afraid.
She was invincible.
But the night was dark and the air was cold, and she realized she was alone.
For entering the Forest was not a simple goal, and spending the night was not a mortal’s option. The trees were shaking, the wolves were howling, and she realized her mistake.
“I’ve never been
alone here before”
But she wouldn’t fly away. She didn’t feel the fear.
She only felt cold.
For the night was dark and the air was cold, and she was now alone. She walked into the forest, looking always ahead. She wasn’t scared of the monsters. She could fight, or she could run.
And the wolves were still howling, but she didn’t mind. And then she heard hoofsteps, right behind her, clear against the relative silence of the Everfree.
And for a moment, her mind froze
Clop
Clop
Clop
And then she heard it breathe, and then she heard its beating heart.
Thump
Thump
Thump
"I can hear it"
She couldn’t hear her own, but she could hear the thing’s heart. The beast’s heart. The monster’s heart.
And she ran.
And for a moment, she could see the trees waving her goodbye
And she ran and ran and flew away, and for a moment she thought she was safe.
It appeared right in front of her
She was not.
Right there, in front of her eyes. Darkness all around her, the only thing she could see was that thing, that beast, that monster. The footsteps had stopped. The breathing had stopped. The beating of the heart had stopped. Everything was silent. She still couldn’t hear the beat of her own heart.
There it was. Ridiculous, stupid, laughable.
Eerie.
She didn’t feel fear, she was not scared. She was too strong to be afraid of such a thing. It was just a head, a stupid head. Nothing she couldn’t fight.
She was not scared.
She only felt cold.
Looking at her, with those cold eyes. With that empty smile. Just a head, she could see no body. A floating stupidity, a levitating madness.
A monster.
And she was brave and she was young, and she was not afraid of the monsters. So she didn’t fight, she didn’t run. She stood there, looking at it defiantly. Confident.
And the monster changed
And that was her mistake.
And the thing went by before she could move, and she felt her legs and wings freeze, and she knew that thing was not alive.
She didn’t feel fear.
She just felt cold.
And the monster made no sound, and just stared at her.
And she could see the black tears, and she tried to run away, but she couldn’t. She tried to scream, to call for help, but she couldn’t. She was frozen. And it was crying.
But the tears didn't fall to the ground
But those weren’t true tears, and she knew. She knew it was not a signal of weakness or pain or sadness. The black tears were just another symbol, another monster. Just like its eyes, just like its smile.
“I am not
afraid of the monsters”
she thought.
And then
the black tear, changed;
it moved.
And the dark of the night became light, and the black tears were alive. A show of madness, of terror, of beauty unfolded in front of her eyes. They were more than black. They were a void, a space where nothing could exist. And she knew that the black tears were alive, and she knew it had seen her.
And the black tears took her legs.
And the black tears took her wings.
And she felt the pain in her head.
And then she realized, she wasn’t feeling cold. She had never felt the cold. She had always been warm, but she had always been alone.
She was alone and scared.
She had always been scared.
Because her friends weren’t there, they weren’t by her side, and the monster was in her head, in her mind, in her soul.
The monster was her.
And she finally said, she finally admitted.
“I am afraid
of the monsters”
Because everypony is
that’s the reason
why we don’t go in there at night.
To the Everfree.
To the place where the monsters await.
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DAM Girl!
... and then John was a zombie.
That was seriously great.
I wish I was good enough to actually draw inlay illustrations. It really makes the fic so much more descriptive. Less is more really.
okay, now that was creepy.
good, but creepy... really really REALLY creepy... o.o
i'm just glad it's still 5:30 pm here >,>
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Thanks! I also like the idea of illustrating the fics, because sometimes a picture can show what you have in mind more easily, Sadly, I still need a lot of practice and it takes a long time, so for now that's just a dream. Anyway, thanks for the kind words. And I hadn't noticed I had used that trope, by the way. Huh.
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Gee, thank you. Although I think that being creepy with ponies is kinda difficult (if not downright impossible), I'm glad you think so of the story. That was the entire point of it, really.
This was really good! Really creepy, but so good!!!
2720455 11:05 P.M!! Not like say, I was planning to SLEEP tonight.. ehehe.. OH GREAT MY COUSIN'S B-DAY IS TOMORROW
Woah. A unbelievable great story you made here, Sir.
Brain.exe has been rebooted. Initializing creepypasta memory block.
....that was deep...
I'm not sure whether I should be sad... or glad... that I can't see the pictures, based on how creeped out people are.
Luckily (or not?), I'm at work and this computer blocks access to a lot of stuff, including, for some reason, the inline pictures.
I'll re-read the story when I'm at home, with pictures. Unless somepony warns me against doing that in the next 6 hours.
This is creepy?
I wrote something scarier than this in high school history class!
An in-depth report on Roman Emperor Caligula.
Now THAT was disturbing.
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I... can easily see how an in-depth report on Caligula would be scarier, yes. That guy was nuts. Anyway, I've always thought that being creepy with ponies is extremely difficult (even more in a short story), so I guess that I was doomed to dissapoint somebody at some point.
Well, at least drawing was fun as hell.
3143561 You might have wanted to better make the metaphor of the 'monster' being Dash, make a more dramatic scene by strongly implying that the creature in the Everfree took over her body while still leaving it uncertain as to the possibility that it's only a symbolic epiphany for Dash.
However, that will require a foundation as to why she would consider herself a monster in the first place. Fear is not a good foundation for this, since all simple creatures feel fear, whether great or small.
Being afraid does not make one a monster. That's the biggest flaw I see with this story because it simply isn't true. But acting ruthlessly as a response to fear, or turning fear into hatred could.
It needed more depth to make a more complete and relatable metaphor.
There must be something inherent to herself that initiates self-doubt and worry of what she could become.
I like this, has a true appearance of a nightmare. The simple outline, as well as the way it was written. good job.
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I don't care how old your comment is, that image just made me sick.
JEFF THE KILLER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2720598 Slenderpony, nice!
2721206 Better than 2:20AM
I realised that I've never read this story by you before.....dear lord.
That was....disturbing and creepy. But nonetheless really cool. I liked.
I'm not the one who reads stories like this often because mostly I don't enjoy them but this was entertaining....now just let me grab my axe of the wall and let me lighten up my room before I continue reading some stories....
3367661 Well then. I'm very sorry.
3369240 It's fine, I usually stay up that late anyways.
3375728 GAH! Jeff the Killer COLORED!
I like the picture book feel to it. You never get that in a fanfic.
This was odd, yet amazing.
I don't know if I'm more perplexed by the fact you have such messed up nightmares or that you draw so well that even a simple pencil-sketch can give me the chills. Then again, dead tree branches are the best nightmare fuel.
Please dream about more fucked up shit you can convert into an experimental fic.
Well I liked it. Oh never see picture story on fimfiction but you.
Oh, wow.
Wow, that's amazing. In fact, there should be more stories on here that have pictures like this :D
Well now I'm Very scared of monsters ...and you now.
Let's see... What totally awesome acts of monster-banishment can I use here?
Ah, here we go:
He thrusts his fists against the post and still insists he sees the ghosts.
He thrusts his fists against the post and still insists he sees the ghosts.
He thrusts his fists against the post and still insists he sees the ghosts.
He thrusts his fists against the post and still insists he sees the ghosts.
Ten bucks to the person who can tell me what that's from.
4281161
It
4574353 You win!
*Bucks you ten times in the face*
... Well what did you think I meant by buck?
4574406 I expected nothing less! :D
(It is one of my favorite books!)
4574436 Then I think that you and me can be very good friends!
An interesting story, cool pictures, quite atmospheric. The new writing style was good.
All in all: A fine little horror story.
Great work!
Not bad.
Some nice rhythmic prose, good atmosphere, and the drawings were pretty good - the eyes especially, although some of the bodily proportions were off. Good fic, creeped me out a bit.
gud jeb
still not gonna follow you
Short and simple, but terrifying.
The pictures and the writing worked really well together. It felt like a dark picture book.
The formatting made some of the word be on diffrent parts of the pages, though.
The story felt perfect. It's simpleness was what made it so chilling, plus the fact that I empathized with Rainbow Dash when she realizes that she's scared when it really comes to facing monsters alone.
Even though it's a dark fic, Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash are perfectly in character. Twilight would tell Rainbow that everyone acts a certain way, and Rainbow would try to act differently, and fail.
Heck, it happended in the show with Twilight introducing Rainbow to books.
In all, this story was the best example of expiremental fiction I've seen.
Please keep on finding new ways to tell stories!
Super eerie, well done, and a wonderful glimpse into madness.
My heart is pounding... G-Good Job m-man!
That's okay.
I wasn't planning on sleeping today anyhow.
Whilst reading this at 2 AM might not have been the best idea ever, I can only say, great job.
The pictures do their job perfectly, carrying emotions perhaps better than words could have done. If anything, it feels like the text is illustrating them rather than the other way around.
Truly outstanding.
~Sinrar
Should come with a warning label.
Only to be read in a well lit room. Preferably not directly before bedtime.
It's... kind of chilly in here. Cold.
*brrrr*
Oh god
That must've been a freaky as nightmare you had there
And then Rainbow Dash was a zombie.
Cheers for the fic!
God, i was getting scared halfway, then i saw those big pictures, and now im practically freaking out, *twitch* *twitch*
Super cool. :O
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Dammit, PP, I just got an awesome live reading of this and I wanted you to review it in one of those blogs of yours. Is it too late now that you've already read it? Because the guy has VAs for Dash and Twi AND sound effects. And it's just ten minutes long! It's amazing!
EDIT:Wait. You commented on that video already. Uh. Cool then. WASN'T IT AWESOME. Now look at the rest of the pics, I guess. Or do nothing, hell if I know. Welp.
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wow, look at this guy :V
So what if they are monsters! I say there is no point in being scared of them!
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I AM TRULY NOT AFRAID OF THE MONSTERS!
~Leonzilla
I would be scared.
a few of the pictures wouldn't load, i don't know if thats a problem on my end or what