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Omega Dracomancer
I'm not the best writer, but I can write.
Omega Dracomancer
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"S and M"?....
2708702 Slave and Master.
...
I wish I didn't know that.
your writing style...was...different.
Pretty nice clop rating though
2708803 ah k , i know it as s/d for sub/dom.....
threesome with the sun and moon pony goddess's? just another day in the life of anon.
The sound of them moaning and crying out for more is music to my ears. After all, ladies first."
every mans motto, ever
Before reading:
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After reading:
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"created by an amateur" i44.tinypic.com/2lximuw.png (front page, surprise motherbucker)
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My face.
Yes.
...
YES. YES.
Tenouddaten.
This is just... Wrong... Here's my reaction
2708985
S&M refers to a number of things. Typically, it is understood to stand for Sadism and Masochism. Less often, it means Sex and Magic, referring to the pain/pleasure confusion of a body flooded with endorphins and adrenaline. More or less universally, S&M by itself is strictly a reference to the act of giving and receiving pain, usually but not always as part of sex play.
What you're thinking of is power exchange, or, domination and submission (D/s). That, on its own, is the almost entirely cerebral kink of taking/losing control over your/your submissive's life; either for a single temporary scene or a longer "contract" style total exchange of self determination.
The acronym BDSM is a vast hodgepodge of tropes and a catch-all term for fetishes and activities related to the above.
Bondage Discipline and Sadomasochism, Blood Divine/Death Sex Magic (typically with some hokey witchcraft tie-in), Bondage Dominance Slavery and Masturbation, and any number of combinations and similar themes. Regardless of the words intended, it's likely to refer to a more long-term, emotional investment into the lifestyle.
Ultimately, in case you haven't caught on, the letters have come to be less of an acronym and more akin to a generalized term itself.
I'm aware that this is more of a response than anyone would ever want. It's 2 am, I just had a long conversation with a lifestyling couple on the subject two weeks ago, and Bourbon, that's why.
I should probably read this story, now.
How did this get featured?
2711419 i have no idea...
Master - Slave
Masochist Luna
Damn it Anon you're one lucky bastard
2711139
you know too much
2710493
It doesn't mean anything , the twilight saga got published and we know that despise the reception it's shit. Now i wouldn't call this one-shot shit but is not all that great either, as it's berry nature of a dammed 6,000 and + one-shot does't allow us to see the capabilities the author could demonstrate on a longer running tale. So yeah this is an amateur job, but never the less it was entertaining and that's all that meters for an story to get popular hence the feature box .
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I agree with this man.
I don't think it's all that good, but I'll still read it.
all i have to say is, that i have read clop fics before, but i never do finish them. i get about half way, and i then just stop. possiably because of wondering what the fuck did i just read or i just can't take it.
well, this is my first full reading of a clop fic, and my reaction is, well, i do't know what to say here.
i just don't know.
2713225 Disliking your own fanfiction.
It's a bold move man, let's see if it pays off.
Oh my Celestia, I just came. Great clopfic! Really good...
Why is this at 1.2K views but only 97 likes-23 dislikes?
Did someone open up a bunch of tabs, or something? Or did people just forget to thumb up/down?
Dude if you're gonna write a grown up fic, use grown up words. You're writing a sex story for god's sake don't half ass it and use the word "plot" do you even know what a plot is? it's a story line, not a body part. It had great potential and would have been great if you just used a better, and proper, word. Too bad.
This story is great
2710493
I am quite surprised.
Well, I'll give you an A for effort. The story has potential, but the execution is really lacking.
The biggest issue with this fic, in my opinion, was that it was all "tell" and no "show". Essentially, Anon was doing nothing more than simply narrating the events as they were happening, which doesn't establish a flow or pacing or anything. It's simply a log of "this happened, and then this happened, and then this happened, etc."
Even worse, the narration seemed to focus on the physical events, and not the emotions or thoughts of the character. That's a major problem, as clop/sex is much more about the emotional side of events than the physical side of events. We want to know what's going through a characters mind, as that's usually the sexiest part of the story, so when you completely ignore the emotional site, it looses a lot of its magic.
For example, take the line "I rubbed her flank. I gave it a little thought, then gave her a light slap." - that's 100% narration as to the physical events. Tell us more - what did her flank feel like? Was it soft or firm? What thoughts were going through his head? Why did he decide to spank her? How did Luna react to the rubbing? The spanking? A better way to describe this would be:
"Luna's moaning increased as I started to slowly rub her soft, tender flank. Enjoying how she made no effort to hide how sensitive she was, I decided to push things a little further. A loud, surprised yelp erupted from the younger princess as I smacked my hand upon her royal rump."
Compare those two lines. Both ensure that the same physical events happen (he rubs her flank and then spanks it), but the latter focuses more on their emotions and behavior, and is more descriptive of the unfolding events. From that, we also learn that Luna has a soft, yet sensitive flank, which she enjoys having attention paid to. For Anon, we learn that he meant it when he told Celestia he loves seeing his partners in pleasure, and it also begins the unvailing of his dominant side which comes into play later in the story.
Beyond the simple telling, word choice is also an issue - you use the same small selection of words to describe everything (plot and flank, slit, etc) - come up with some variety. I'd recommend using a thesaurus to vary the words a bit, so that it doesn't feel overly repetitive.
Finally, the opening was very confusing. Celestia offered Anon the chance to make his fantasy a reality, so instead he simply recites his fantasy while doing something much more mellow. This left two different series of events occurring at the same time - one fantasy, the other reality, and beyond using "I" to indicate reality and "he" for fantasy, there was very little indication of which event chain a particular paragraph was referring to.
As it is, this story is, unfortunately, not good. I do like the ideas and concepts of the story, but the presentation made it hard to enjoy them. I think if you worked on your show vs tell, and focused at least equally (if not more) on emotions and feelings (instead of just physical happenings), then you'd have the potential to write some great stories.
2715782
Ok, I failed as a writer, I already got that part.
Truth be told, I wasn't even paying attention to what I was writing half of the time, I was furiously jerking my wiener while I wrote.
If that sounds rude, sorry. Just wanted to clarify.
I'm gonna be honest, the whole human fucking ponies thing is fucked up.
But if that's your thing, that's your thing.
I personally get a helluva laugh from clopfics.
This one was hilarious.
I don't know why they're funny, just are!
2719793 Aww, don't you just have the purest soul ever! SQUEE I JUST WANT TO SEND IT TO UGANDA.
2720525
Nah, they seem to have enough help.
That was literally the best clop I have ever read in my entire life...I dont give a shit what anybody else says. That was gold.. Good show old chap good show.
And I don't know about you, but that's not really my thing
2764000
I've been trying to find that clip forever! Do you have a link?
You did mean "them", right ??
2715912 amen!
3019791
I tried writing my own clop. Lets just say it will never see the light of day.
Girls simply do not stop talking about the backdoor.
2708803
I know S and M as sadism and masochism. I guess same concept but yours is less extensive.
too steamy i shouldnt read this while at work!
nah!
2708702 Normally, I'd consider "S&M" to stand for sadist and masochism. In this context, I guess it could stand for sun and moon.
Get it? Because Celestia and Luna are the ones who got rammed.
**crickets chirp**
Tough crowd.
7284842 ah....
7284842
156 weeks. 3 years ago, to the day. Incredible.
By the way, I had no idea what a lot of those terms meant when I wrote the description. Lol.
7285083 oh , so are they still accurate then -.o?....