A Regular Checkup

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Noc #1 · Apr 30th, 2020 · 2 · ·

How the hell has this received no comments? It’s really good. Fun and well-written. Have an upvote.

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #2 · May 24th, 2020 · · ·

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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Quite a lot of porn logic involved, but it does get quite hot, so that's kind of forgiveable.
-"I can't believe such a cute nurse was hiding such a cute pussy." -- uh... Not sure if this makes sense.
-Why would Celestia seek out a small town hospital for sex? What would she have done if she got an ugly nurse? Doesn’t she have plenty of other opportunities without traveling so far or looking for love in such a strange place?
-Why would Redheart so easily agree to it?
-Tears in the eyes is a really nice touch.

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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 95/100
Allure: 87/100
Enticement: 70/100
Immersion: 85/100
Prose Quality: 92/100
Total Score: 429/500
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