You are the most talented, most interesting, and most extraordinary person in the universe. And you are capable of amazing things. Because you are the reader. And you bring our worlds to life.
Twilight had been watching the storm with worry when a form had crash landed near her house. Questions are everywhere, and the one colt who can answer them doesn't seem to want to.
And why did the wind stop for those first few days after the storm?
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This a story of grand value.
Please,
MOAR.
2701952
It's not mine
which reminds me
Not bad, but not great. The word choice and phrasing feels a but awkward (lots of sentence fragments), and I'm seeing a few spelling errors and pronoun gender issues. Also you are seriously overusing commas.
I think the comma problem I am seeing is mainly following "and". In the quoted sentence above the first comma is unnecessary.
I glanced at a few of your older stories and I think you are getting better, so don't take this too badly.
2702406
Getting better, I guess that's something.
You sir/mam have caught my attention
5117413
How'd you find this, it's a really old story.
5117479 No idea
5117483
I don't know how I found this exactly, but I would like to see more, if you would be able to update this.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
5193225 I may someday, but my current -to be updated- list is full.