After the whole princess coronation Twilight denied living in a castle and settled in the Canterlot library. Spike is getting bored of Canterlot and is begging Twilight to move back to Ponyville. But all this changes when a letter from Rarity arrives saying she's moving to Canterlot and opening a new boutique to get more business. But things don't turn out the way he plans to. Will Spike win Rarity's heart, or will be become heart broken?
Thanks to rarityxspike for the beautiful cover art!
Chapters (5)
You mean CANTERLOT everywhere you typed Equestria. Equestria is the COUNTRY, Canterlot is the city.
2663594 Oh thanks for the info I'll be sure to remember that in the upcoming chapters.
Being a huge Spike fan, you have me hooked with this story so far. Also, I have a sinking feeling, by your summary and by the hard work that Spike is putting in to welcome Rarity to their new home, something terrible and heartbreaking is going to happen.
Good so far, I can't wait for the next chapter. 
Decent. However, three things I'd recommend. Number one: Fix the description. I found out the plot for the fanfic for the next few chapters even before they were written. Bad way to pique your readers interests.
Number two: Grammar and spelling mistakes. If you want, send me a message and I can help you clean up in that respect. Self-editing is hard.
Number three: Equestria is the name of the continent. Canterlot is the name of the city that I'm guessing you have the story take place.
(Also look through Ezn's guide at least once. He's got good things to say.)
However, fix those things and this might turn out to be surprisingly interesting. I'm rooting for ya!
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thanks bro! I'll fix all that right now. Brohoof!
Aww.. poor poor Spike. A day that he planned to be perfect for Rarity ended up a disaster.
Especially with her thinking of him just as a little kid. 
I wonder what he plans on doing the next day.
Aww! Poor Spike
. When said 'Yes Please' to the waiter I was like ' YOU CAN'T BE SERIOUS!!! 
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Gentlemare?
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Oops you spotted a mistake! Good job!
Before I start, I just wanted to say you forgot to put "turn" between the words "don't" and "out" in the description.
But things don't out the way he plans to.
Okay onto the main event...
1.
I think you mean Canterlot library.
2.
It should be, "I bet it is..."
3.
Yours truly, ...
And chapter one is over.
Here's my thoughts and what could be improved.
Grammar, I see it needs some work. Some spelling mistakes, missing capitals, missing quotes, but nothing major.
Now in the description department, you're not a complete noob. You need to describe what Spike is feeling more, and show more here and there how he hates being in the library. Just be careful not to over do it and not to say the same thought five times in different ways. Put more than one idea.
Finally, this story (so far) is decent. I'm not going to give it a "like" yet, just because I want to see more, but don't get the idea it's bad. I've read a good amount of stories that are worse than this, and those aren't even the author's first story some of the times, so don't take this as me saying your story sucks. It just needs some improvement.
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thanks
You might want to rephrase that.
Again Grammar and Spelling need a going over.
Well, before I give my opinion, I just want you to keep in mind, that I want you to continue the story path you're going down, because it's a good path, also keep in mind, this is only an opinion, I'm not trying to bash you. Okay you have been warned.
I did not enjoy this chapter because:
- I don't like to see Spike as a baby dragon who's clumsy, can't cook, etc. Which is the reason why I HATED the episode "Spike at Your Service" (1/10) and why you'll see I never write Spike in that way in my stories
- Also Rarity is just a bitch in this, "Yes he'll have the kid's menu." Oh that pissed me off. She should know his maturity level is way higher than his age
- Again, I'm not a big fan of childish Spike.
Now don't pay attention to what I said in my opinion, I want you to continue down the path you're going. It's going in a good direction. I'll continue to read it, and see what happens, I'm interested in seeing how this is going to end. Now this is nowhere near bad enough to deserve a dislike.
oh, no. I can hear the breaking of Spike's heart right now. Sweetie Belle, you better do something real good if you are planning to get Rarity and Spike to be a couple in just a month. Oh, I love this story, but I hate this for Spike. Now he is going to have to meet Rarity's new boyfriend or coltfriend. I say this, he better not be a jerk to Spike.
If she's taken then there's the alternative.
2682345 my thoughts exactly.
Aw man, by reading this, it makes me want to write my own version of this story and make it more "16+".
But I won't say what it would be about because it would fall under these categories "Dark", "Sad", "Alternate Universe", "Romance" and "Slice of Life".
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So is this a good chapter?
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It's... pretty good.
Spike will end up with Rarity by the end of this or I will be very disappointed.
Actually, I hope Spike sees that Sweetie Belle is attracted to him like he is attracted to Rarity. However, I have a real bad feeling that if Spike tells Rarity about Randy being a jerk toward him, Rarity will think Spike is being jealous, and probably yell at Spike. I hope not, but I have that sinking feeling she might, and it will break Spike's heart.
I hope Rarity catches Randy somehow being a jerk to Spike. 
BOYFRIEND!?!??! Uhh... Hello, earth to Rarity.
*RAGE*
I sure hope Spike does something. Good chapter
What a jerk! I hate him! I hope Rarity catches him red-handed being a jerk to Spike. Spike has done nothing wrong
2690540 I'm with you on this. Never been a big fan of Sparity in all honesty.
Man I love this chapter for the wrong reasons. I love that everyone is being mean to Spike, and to be honest, I hope he ends up with Sweetie Belle and that Rarity realizes that she lost the dragon that was meant to be.
The pacing in this story still needs some work. But not bad.
Man, i lost it at most parts at this chapter
that was very funny indeed 
Um... Who is this? I seem to remember a Cadence, but not a Candace.
Hmmmm, that depends what the creator of this story has installed for us, let's cross our fingers (or hooves in this case), wait and see to find out if Spike will end up with Sweety Belle or Rarity
This is pretty good. At the moment it looks like
is currently marooned on the rocks, but 
seems to be a good alternative.
For all of those that are rooting for SpikeBelle, I just want to tell you that this story (currently) is in the Sparity group. Take it as you will...
Of course Spike gets the little kids menu. Everypony sees him as a baby despite bing about 6 years younger then Twilight because of his small body size, By the time he has a large enough body that they don't consider him a baby anymore, probably least 100-150 year will have passed.
im not a big fan of spike and rarity as a couple. but i like this story
also spike should be with sweetie it looks much cutier!
I enjoyed this chapter, but I think with the last few lines when Rarity spoke, you meant Rarity, not Randy. However, Randy just peeves me off.
How day he embarrass Spike like that!
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Oops. Yeah I'll fix that. lol
-Bed yours?
-How is Sweetie Belle hating romance movies where ironically she's a romantic?
Spike will need to call in the big guns.
Last couple of paragraphs you use the word 'though' where you may mean 'tough'.
Stiil, cute story.
How do you forwn?
I can do a frown if that's what you want.
Oh boy. Well this chapter... not going to lie, not a huge fan.
I don't think Spike is stupid enough to spit the popcorn back into the tub and do some of the other things he did. I know he's a child and all, but I never did most of those things as a child (but maybe that's just me). I know what it's like having to be near an a**hole. I've been in that environment for a little over three years now.
3150556 I'm just as outraged as much you are
and one thing, the word is 'dare'
Ok the story interests me. But the grammar is seriously annoying me. You put "though" multiple times when it's supposed to be "tough", you put "randy" instead of "rarity", and other spell mistakes like forwned and starred. Please fix the grammar. The story would be more enjoyable that way
love the srorie plz more chapters also i found en error i think.
"Don't worry Spike. Someday his punk will pay!" Sweetie Belle whispered in his ear.
but keep up the good work.
is this story dead?
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I working on a new chapter.
Well, finally. Glad that it was Randy that got all the heat for the foodfight instead of Spike, who's been treated harshly in all the previous chapters.
I think you meant "Tough"
I would like to see Randy fuck with Spike when he's an adult dragon.
I really don't like Rarity in this story, she's a bitch for intentionally leading Spike on and breaking his heart.
I see spike