All throughout her life, Derpy has been looked down upon. Nopony at her work thinks she will ever amount to anything because she can never do anything right. One night, after messing up once again at the weather factory, Derpy goes home and starts to cry. With nopony to talk to, she decides to go to her one companion who has always given her comfort: her bed. Meanwhile, unbeknownst to her, somepony is quickly approaching to aid her through this tough time. A pony with an unknown name.
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This story is inspired by a meme I saw on Facebook where the Doctor (Matt Smith) visits Tony Stark as a baby and tells him of all the wonderful things he will accomplish in his life. A shout out goes to my friend Ben Vivas for helping me with editing. You can find all of his amazing artwork here! ----> http://inuranma44.deviantart.com/
The main problems I had with this story are mostly just minor details that are pet peeves of mine, e.g. using exclamation points in the narrative, but all-in-all, I liked this story. Nicely done.
so sweet of Doctor
That was a nice story. I agree with Puppo530, exclamations should be used in narration sparingly if ever. Again, nice story though.
Thank you all very much!
Nice story ^^
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Thank you!
This was a nice story, very encouraging!
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Thank you!
this is a very well done and cutesy story. nice work. it's, to quote a person, "brilliant."
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Thank you very much! This was my first fic I ever wrote!
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and it's amazing
This is perfection! I love the way you wrote it! It's truly everything a Fan Fiction should be, you are totally amazing!!!!
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Thank you very much! And thank you for adding to to your favorites!
she quiet is the most important mare in all of mlp without her so many people wouldn't have gotten into mlp like they did funny how one little accident can change the course of history
Such a touching story, man~!
Bravo, I say! *claps*