Chapter 5
Twilight kept her eyes trained on the door, her body tense as she waited for Princess Celestia to return. She hoped it wouldn’t take too much longer, for fear she would lose her nerve. As if in answer to her thoughts, the door inched open.
Celestia trotted over to the couch Twilight was resting on and sat down beside it, looking at her with eyes full of concern. “Are you feeling better now, Twilight?”
“Oh, I feel fine!” Twilight giggled lopsidedly. “I feel great!”
“Are you sure?” The alicorn draped a foreleg around Twilight’s withers. “Hmm, I think you need to rest some more,” she continued when Twilight kept giggling.
“No, really!” Twilight tilted her head. “It’s just, my eyes hurt…”
“What’s wrong? Here, let me take a look,” Celestia said, but Twilight covered her eyes with a hoof.
“But if you fix them, the color-y vision will be gone, won’t it?”
“What exactly did you do, Luna?” the princess muttered worriedly to herself, before leaning in close, looking into Twilight’s lilac eyes.
It was a good thing that a part of the wild influence still lingered in Twilight’s system, helping her gather the courage to do what she did: she wrapped her hooves around Celestia’s neck tightly, before pressing their muzzles together –
She felt the alicorn tense, and it was as if her heart had stopped, but then Celestia’s lips were moving in synch with her own, but for so briefly she thought she must have imagined it before Celestia pulled away. “Twilight, you’re drunk...”
Twilight felt her face burning. I’m not drunk! But there was no denying that her plan had failed, and there would never be another chance. Twilight almost panicked – She doesn’t feel the same way! She needed to find a way to save this wreck of a situation, at least try to make sure the princess wouldn’t hate her.
She clutched her hooves to her stomach, eyes scrunched up in agony. The agony was real – only it came from her heart, not her stomach. Princess Celestia immediately wrapped her forelegs around her, trying to soothe her, but Twilight could tell she was keeping her face well out of range.
“Hold on, Twilight… I’ll take you to the castle to rest, all right?” Twilight could feel the anxiety in the alicorn’s voice, and hated herself for making Celestia worry so much, but it was the only way; as long as Celestia still thought she was drunk she had a chance at making it right.
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Twilight slowly regained consciousness. Her sight was blurry, and her ears didn’t seem to be working properly; ponies were talking in the background, but try as she might to make out what they were saying, everything she heard was muffled.
Memories swam in her head, barely surfacing. She only vaguely remembered falling asleep on the way to the castle, but the kiss with Celestia… Did that really happen? Or did I imagine that too?
The voices in the background gradually started to become audible, and she recognized them as belonging to the royal sisters. What are they doing – and where am I? She was surprised the question hadn’t occurred to her before, but that surprise was quickly replaced by curiosity when she heard her name being spoken by one of the princesses.
“But sister, I do not think –”
“You don’t need to use any spells or hope for the influence of alcohol to help you, Luna, just tell her how you feel.”
“It’s impossible,” Luna said miserably, and Twilight heard a faint sniffing.
“I’m sure you can do it.” There was a pause, and she continued, “Let’s get some rest, but do try tomorrow, will you? I just want you to be happy…”
The room fell silent afterwards, and Twilight tried to make sense of what they were talking about, but fatigue soon overcame her again, and she fell back into pitch black unconsciousness.
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Sunlight shone through Twilight's eyelids, warming and waking her, and this time she felt much more refreshed. She looked up – right into two pairs of eyes. The two sisters were sitting side by side next to the bed looking at her, and it seemed that they had been waiting for her to wake.
“Good morning, Twilight,” said Celestia, and Twilight noticed that she looked very tired.
“It’s good to see you awake,” Luna said quietly, averting her gaze.
“G-good morning…” Twilight replied cautiously; scenes of the previous night were replaying in her head, and it made her feel so empty, to see Princess Celestia. She still needed to pretend that she was drunk when she had kissed the princess, so that Celestia wouldn't hate her… she made up her mind to not mention her feelings again.
“Are you feeling better now?” the elder alicorn asked, with a hint of sadness that wasn't very well hidden.
Twilight hung her head in shame. She had caused a lot of trouble, and it could only be that the princess was upset with her. “I… I’m feeling much better now,” she said slowly, and was startled at how much more normal sounding her voice was than the previous day; even she could tell the difference.
Both Celestia and Luna looked relieved, but then Celestia’s expression turned to one of resignation, and she gave Luna a nudge. “Luna has something to say to you, don’t you, Luna?”
“Oh, I…” Luna gulped a few times. “Y-yes…”
Twilight looked up at them in confusion. Her only clue was that this probably had something to do with what the two sisters had been talking about during the night. She decided to remain quiet, waiting until Luna spoke again.
“I-it was I that put a spell on your drink, and I-I’m terribly sorry for the amount of discomfort it has caused.” Luna paused, and then gave a jerky nod as if wanting to go on but finally deciding against it.
“W-what, you, what?!” Twilight didn’t realize her outbreak until she heard Luna whimpering.
“I’m so sorry, Twilight, will you ever forgive me?” Luna asked miserably, ears flattened.
“I… of course I do.” Twilight quickly lowered her voice, trying to calm herself down. “But, but why?”
Luna didn’t speak, a blush visible even on her dark coat, and the silence was only broken when Celestia cleared her throat, looking pointedly at Luna.
“B-because,” Luna stammered, “because I…” She whimpered again, suddenly getting to her hooves. “I need to go –”
“Luna, please,” Celestia cut in firmly, raising a hoof to block Luna’s way.
Luna slowly turned back to Twilight, and nodded before taking a few deep breaths, pulling herself up to her full height and tilting her head regally. “I am -” she said louder, but her voice quickly faltered. “I…”
“She is in love with you Twi-” Celestia stopped and shook her head briskly. “– My faithful student,” she continued, the crack in her voice obvious.
At first Twilight just gaped, aghast; it was so unexpected. Celestia quickly got to her hooves, her movements visibly shaky, muttering something about ‘business to attend to’, and walked out the door before Twilight had really registered anything.
Twilight stared at the door after Celestia left, frozen. “L-Luna, why did Princess Celestia…?” She trailed off, her thoughts in an emotional tangle.
Luna sighed, looking off to the side. “I think… I am not the only one who loves you,” she whispered sadly.
Twilight gazed off into space, her eyes vacant, and something clicked. She slid of the bed and made her way to the door without another word, but looked back at Luna when she heard the alicorn make a choked sound. “Are you coming?” she asked lightly.
Luna only gave her a dumbstruck look before getting to her hooves, her movements sluggish. Twilight just smiled at her, trotting out and down the hallway. This is going to work, it has to! She swallowed her nerves and nodded to reassure herself. It’s the only way I can make all three of us happy…
Reaching the door of Celestia’s chambers, she pushed the doors open with her magic without knocking. The elder alicorn was on her bed, and started when Twilight and Luna entered, quickly shading her face with a wing.
“I’d really rather be alone right now.” Her voice sounded steady, but a slight tremor was all that gave her away. Twilight ignored her though, pulling herself onto the bed beside Celestia.
She brushed a hoof against the alicorn’s wing, those soft, downy feathers… “Prin – I mean, Celestia?” The princess looked at her with anguished eyes, and Twilight felt a pang in her heart upon seeing that Celestia had been crying. So it’s true, after all. Joy rose up, balancing out the pain she felt knowing Celestia was hurt.
Drawing a hoof along Celestia’s cheek, she leaned in close, mirroring the scene from last night. Celestia’s lips were just as tender, and as sweet… but also with the salty taste of her tears.
Breaking their kiss briefly, she saw Luna turn away with a sob, before fleeing towards the door. “Luna, wait!” She used her magic to lift Luna off the ground, and the lunar princess gave a startled yelp as Twilight carried her over to the bed.
Twilight smiled at Luna, before wrapping her hooves around Luna’s neck, leaning in to kiss her tenderly on the lips –
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Celestia and Luna lay on the bed, both of them snuggled against Twilight who was sandwiched snugly between them.
Twilight had never known she could experience happiness like this – a warm, fuzzy feeling turned every sensation into pure bliss. She giggled quietly, nuzzling both of the alicorns, who were smiling as well.
“I would never have thought this possible… I suppose I keep underestimating you, Twilight,” Celestia murmured, hugging Twilight even closer.
Twilight grinned, shifting a bit to the side and hugging Luna tightly. “I think we owe a lot to Luna.”
All three of them chuckled, and Twilight closed her eyes, grateful for everything that had led up to this moment. This is... the best birthday present ever.
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~The End~
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Double birthday present for Twilight. She is such a dog.
nice save, and an interesting Ending altogether, good work (i'm usually not into this, but this Story somehow got me. gj
mfg Nordic
But did Twi finally get that feather?
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She got alllll the feathers.
Pity we didn't get a reaction shot from the rest of the Mane 6 - 'twould have been hilarious.
OH YEAH!!!! TWILUNESTIA!!!! IS IT MY BIRTHDAY!?!?!?(no wait it's Twilight's)
yes now someone make a clop or sequel to this.
Now this is how 'Stuck in the middle' should have ended...
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Seriously... this conclusion sort of came out of left field. No real build-up, no emotional development. Just... suddenly-Twilunalestia! Celestia's feelings for Twilight and Twilight's feelings for Luna are more or less never hinted at anywhere in the story. They just... kind of happen because, yay, Tenchi Solution! Luna's feelings we are told about and not shown. The only real relationship that explored at all is Twilight's feelings for Celestia. The term "shipping" is an abbreviation for "relationshipping." Out of the four emotional relationships you have in this story, only 1.5 are shown, and the ending, like I said, is really abrupt and comes out of left field. I have no idea why Twilight, Luna, or Celestia really though that this was a good idea... they just kind of decide to do it. I am not actually entirely against the idea of a relationship between Twilight and both the Princessess, but that's a lot of complicated emotions you just kind of threw over your shoulder.
Also, why did Luna think that it would be easier to confess her feelings for Twilight if Twilight was stoned out of her gord? I can see the opposite logic, flawed as it may be, but Luna's actions make no sense. If Twilight reciprocated under the spell's influence it would be because of the spell. You can get a drunk person to sleep with you, because they'll have done the deed long before they sober up, but love has to last long past a single night.
This story kind of went off the rails and ended in a bit of a mess. Nothing past chapter three makes any sense. Try spending more time developing characters and seriously thinking about personalities and what these characters would want to achieve and how they would logically go about getting it. Get into their heads. That's why we read and write these stories. To understand the characters and character writing in general better. Otherwise you just kind of get this mess.
It is STILL. NOT. GOOD ENOUGH!
And I will beat you with it again, and again, and again until we get it right!
But first, bring on the sunshine (spoiler!)
1376294 I agree
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Oh you read that one too?
So much crazy stuff happened there.But Well,considering the circumstances of that story,don't think a threesome ending would have been a good idea.
1376480 Except he pretty much set one up , then wussed out at the end....
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I know,right?
I was totally sure he *Spoiler* he was going Twiluna and then the Twilight started to get randoms lapses of amnesia? And this is coming from someone who prefers Twiliestia* Spoiler*
loved it sequel eventually please
I certainly didn't see that coming, but I'm definitely not complaining.
Twilunestia is quite rare, and seeing as I support both Twiluna and Twilestia, such a conclusion brings a smile to my face. 
Nicely concluded.
P.S. Rarity's going to have a field day when she hears about this!
Eh. Just... *waggles hand* eh
All that, for a TwiLunestia ending? I'll buy that for a dollar. Felt rushed at the end, but I'm a sucker for TwiLuna and Twilestia. Bonus ponts for the triple.
Twilight slowly regained conscious. = should probably be "regained consciousness".
Twilight gets ALL the maresdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
Good story but the ending was eh
wahh...
bwhuh...
WHAT!?
Interesting....
Instead of Twilight's plan backfiring, it ends up with Twi in the middle of a princess sandwich....
Also,amusing as it is, this does seem counter to the normally, errr..... slightly neurotic personality of our dear star-flanked protagonist.
Then again, there's something to be said for this:
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Twilight in a nutshell.
I'll agree with a few of these comments in that this ending did seem a bit sudden. I would have liked more build-up in regards to both Celestia's and Luna's feeling towards Twi, but whatevs, it was still pretty gosh darn adorable
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Neat!
A but sudden but it wasn't bad.
Leaves a bit to be desired though *wink wink*
All I can do is use my 20 emoticon limit to describe this.
The story is awesome, but with a fanfic that's all about Twilight's birthday, there should always be some short explanation of why Spike wasnt there. Sweet and Elite was bad enough, but this fanfic is just making it worse. Now he's missing out on time spent with the Princesses, a super-cool nightclub, a high class penthouse, AND an awesome magic show. What's more terrible is none of his so-called friends seems to care that he isn't with them to enjoy it, and Twilight isn't even the tiniest bit guilty for having such a great time with everyone but him (Shining Armor has a good excuse, being Captain of the Royal Guard). Sorry, but f*** you Twilight. F*** you too, Princess.
And apparently you too, Rarity. You sure as hay wouldn't feel lonely if some idiot had remembered to invite her closest friend to her birthday party.
This fanfic could have been fun if it wasn't just a great big example of rubbing salt in a certain baby dragon's wounds. When they get back to Ponyville, he's gonna be more pissed off and dejected than ever. Hopefully he'll make his resignation and find a family that actually gives a crap about him. Or start his own rockin' nightclub. I guess Sweet and Elite is the perfect episode for authors who don't give a s*** about Spike and don't feel like making an excuse to exclude him from something awesome.
Their opinions on Trixie were pretty bad too though. They forget that they were the ones being jerks while Trixie was trying to put on a show. Magicians are supposed to act like that. If they didn't like her act, they could've left. This is another mistake made by too many fans. Twilight didn't even ask if she was okay when she woke up with a hangover.
But I'm still more upset with how you treated (or completely ignored the existence of) Spike. The fact that a fanfic that just emphasizes the biggest problem in Sweet and Elite gets this much praise without anyone seeing what's wrong with it really unsettles me. I guess it's because despite kicking Spike in the groin, it's very entertaining and fun to read. But fanfics like this make me wonder how many people would care if he was just written out of the show.
Anyway, I hope none of my words sounded too harsh. I'm really only upset about what wasn't in this story and have no ill feelings toward you. You're an awesome writer, and if Spike had been invited to Twilight's Birthday After Party, I would have totally loved it. It's just that one important detail that makes me hate it.
Booze, drunk ponies, and twilunestia. Just what I wanted.
1515001 You forgot to add "Spike misses out of everything" Sorry if that sounded like an attack, I'm still miffed about that.
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np, and I didnt really care that spike wasn't there, it would've been wierd with him there. Besides, I got booze and drunk pony, I'm happy.
1520271 Didn't care? I don't understand. what would be "wierd" about Twilight including him in an awesome birthday party? Because he's young? Because he's the wrong species? Because he's male? All three of those excuses sound pretty bad, this party wasn't exclusive to any age, species, or gender. This whole story was basically a big slap in the face to a friendly, helpful guy. He's an important character who deserves to have this much fun with his friends, and this fanfic just expanded on all he missed out on and rubs it in his face. I'm not trying to be a jerk, but I would appreciate having this explained to me. Why would it be weird to include your closest, oldest, most loyal friend to a kickass nightclub for your party with the rest of your friends?
I hope you don't mind the long text, it's just really bad when people think he doesn't deserve to have as much fun as ponies, like he's inferior or unlikeable in some way. Cuz this isn't like inviting your little brother, Spike is pretty much on equal footing with his friends, and having him with them would definitely have been more fun for the ponies and the reader.
Truth be told, I felt physically ill when you blatantly said you just didn't care he was left out.
He's a young dragon and this story was basically twilight and everyone else going to a club and twilight gets drunk and really wants a feather from celestia, not sure if it's a great place for spike.
Sorry if I think differently, but that's what I think.
1520597 Yeah, I would definitely say I feel differently. The ponies would probably show some leniency for the sake of fun and I doubt alcohol would do him any harm. And heck, they could've just asked him not to drink any! He probably wouldn't have touched it anyway. I'm pretty sure he's mature enough to enjoy the atmosphere of a nightclub.
And there's still the fact that he misses out on an absolutely awesome party for no reason as far as we know, and that the characters and these readers are completely f*cking comfortable with it. It's really not cool. I could have totally loved this fanfic if he'd been there, but that one minor fact, his absence, just puts me in a foul mood.
I suppose it would be okay if Twilight makes sure to give him an equally good birthday party the moment he's old enough to legally go to a nightclub. He deserves it, since he does more for her every single day than anyone else does.
If this had been twice as long and taken it's time, it would have been magnificent. Now it felt like the Twilight was at her party in the penthouse for about 15 minutes before she had to be evacuated. Also gotta love the Princesses acting like lovesick teenagers, and Twi being the mature one. That's irony I guess.
But yeah, I love reading your stories and hope you give them more time to gestate and let yourself go wilder with the text, and you'll get even better.
wonderful quill.
that was fun to read. thx.
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Twilight Sparkle: Savior of Equestria, Element of Magic, Playa
Well I guess it's true what they say. Twilight comes between dusk and dawn.
Love this story
and its sequels well written
Well done
Twilight is now dating BOTH princesses? Damn.
3110660 it's the only way to go
I'd join in for a lesbian 4some if I could
Cadence loves Twilight because she was her foalsitter, Celestia loves Twilight because she is her mentor, Luna likes Twilight because she helped her on Nightmare Night, so every princess loves Twilight!(not romantically.gah!i mean like relatively!)
I reviewed your story tonight you can find it here
I really loved reading this story it was adorable and that ending was beautiful!
Thanks for the fic!
Yay! Happy ending!