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Golden Paw


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There is a whole part of Equestrian life that almost never sees the light of day, just as there are those ponies that are asleep during Luna's night. It can be tough for friendship and love to flourish under such circumstances. When the bat pony stallion 'Shadow Guard' finds him self besotted by the honest and hard working Applejack, can he win her heart? Can a relationship of ponies of such different worlds ever work?

This story is a spin off of "The Mission of Buzzbot." So I would suggest reading it first, but it's not vital.

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 36 )

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Negasi? And it's a black pegasus? And the 'P' and 'N' keys on a keyboard are nowhere near each other?:applejackunsure:

Thank you for your comment, I did some research and found that people called Luna's bat styled guards by many names. Negasi, bat ponies, dark pegasus and so forth. Black peagsus sounds just as cool and I am glad your brought this to my attention :pinkiehappy: I will be sure to consider using it in future chapters.

Comment posted by Diamond dust deleted Jul 30th, 2013

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my reaction after reading this chapter , great chapter mister :twilightsmile:

Thank you muchness :pinkiehappy: should have the next chapter out in about a week if all goes to plan :twilightsheepish:

hmm a conspiration against Luna , they shall perish for this:twilightangry2::flutterrage:

good chapter:yay: , Applejack and Shadow guard remind me a little of Zack Fair and Aerith in Final fantasy

Glad to hear it. I haven't played much of the Final fantasy games, one of those thing I need to get around to doing.

Comment posted by Diamond dust deleted Aug 12th, 2013

3033496 Your idea of the story is really good. Just work a little bit on the errors and you will mostly like get more readers :pinkiehappy:

And as I said I liked the story and the idea.

Cheers! Yep grammar and spelling is my nemesis :pinkiegasp: Thanks for the feed back and be sure to work on it! :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Diamond dust deleted Aug 19th, 2013

this story is [img]princess_luna_approved_by_ambris-d4r3ibw[/img]:yay:

Overall, I really enjoyed this story. Lots of LOL moments! Good work.

Thanks, I tried hard on it and it's great to hear that others enjoyed it too! :pinkiehappy:

Great story. I enjoyed reading it. Unusual pairing. I love Luna's out burst, who doesn't love that part?

3743448 So glad you liked it, thanks for the feed back!

That... was... so...AWESOME!!!:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

3780366 Glad you enjoyed it!, thanks for taking the time to read my story and for the feedback :twilightsmile:

Gaahh I loved this story and adored the ending <3

4139299 Thanks so much! It's always great to hear that I have cheered others up :twilightsmile:

very good story i am glad you did this ill be on the look out for more like this from you

4749184 Thanks, we aim to please! :pinkiehappy:

Shadow Guard was wrong about negasi being created by magic.:trixieshiftright:
It would have taken their collective mommies and daddies a few goes at some 'hot & passionate' magic to create every single one of them.:moustache:

5018970 Thanks for the input :raritywink:

The italicized parts make this chapter fun to read. I like having an idea of how you portray batponies because everyone does it differently. The part about goggles for daylight is not universal for instance.

This was a very nice chapter. The conversation between Applejack and Swift was fun to read.

This is really a great story and I liked the way Luna did the wedding ceremony.

This was a very nice story and I liked the things that you used later for Spike's story.

7649184 So glad you enjoyed the story and thanks for the input :twilightsmile:

Far above, peeking down through the clouds Luna smiled happily, all in all not a bad night at all . Congratulating herself on a job well done, she spread her wings and sailed off towards Canterlot. Despite all my worries and troubles I can made sure this evening at least is one of peace and joy. She owed Applejack and the other Element Bearers that much in thanks for all they’d done for her.

"I can 'make' sure this evening..."

Really enjoying this story!

That was a marvelous wedding story! Wonderful piece of writing. I don't cry at weddings.... I don't.... awe hell.... you got the old plug to cry....... well done!

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