Scootaloo lives alone, but a meteorite crashes just outside ponyville revealing a brand new way of life for the lonely filly but what happens when that way of life comes with a cost to great for equestria handle? Can Scootaloo find a side of her self she forgot a long time ago to save the lands? can she overcome her greatest want to protect her friends?
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A few grammar and punctuation errors but other wise it's a good story. Keep it up!
You need to learn more spelling and grammar, though you are not the worst on the site.
2803632 A trust me if I really cared enough to use my english I could I just don't feel like putting that much effort into it. As long as people can understand it and read it to a degree it's fine.
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And now I have lost all respect for you. People like you are the reason many of the stories on this site are shit. Those that don't care. Fuck off and quit writing. When you finally begin to care about your readers, than return here.
2814169 Holy, apparently I hit a button here. It's not that i don't care about more stories its that I don't care too much about grammar. I try my damndest to give a good story I just don't feel like looking over for that random comma or improper use of the word "there". I write for enjoyment not for novels.
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Look. I don't think you should go Grammar Nazi on your own work. However, if you have the power to do so, which you have said that you do, then you should at least work to make the grammar better. In this story, it's not just a random comma or a misuse of 'there,' it's the glaringly obvious, not to mention numerous, mistakes throughout the whole thing. If you took even twenty minutes to read your own writing, you would see them.
THIS is what I'm talking about. It's the authors like you who want to put everything in their head on paper, and then doesn't give two shits if it's painful for the reader to read. If they think the story is great, then no one can knock them off their high-horse.
If it were true that you had a few errors sprinkled throughout, small, little things like commas, I wouldn't care. I can overlook those because everyone makes mistakes. Unfortunately, this is not the case, and as such, I cannot continue to read this story until you improve, and hopefully edit, the previous, and upcoming, chapters.
If you want an example of what I am talking about, here, have one:
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*A sentence should not begin with a conjunction. However, it is not entirely wrong, and can still be used. A better phrase would be "So what happens..." Or "However, what happens..." but again, it is not necessary.
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