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  • 78w, 2d

    I'm sure a great many of you are purveyors of the fine arts. Writing, drawing, painting, singing, making music, whatever your flavour, I want to talk to you. People are going to tell you to study things that will get you a decent job, even if those things aren't in the direction you want to go. People will tell you that having dreams is nice and all, but you need to take the path of least resistance and get a nine-to-five. People will tell you that in the real world, having passion for a craft is not enough, and that everyone needs to face reality and join the daily grind sooner or later.

    Those people are wrong.

    Notice that the most they give you to hope for is a comfortable life. The vast majority of people aren't wealthy, after all, so the best an average person can strive for is an average life. You can be one of the millions of average folk out there who work all day and watch TV in the evening before bed. Lucky you!

    But personally, I would rather take my chances. I would rather study the things that interest me so that when I'm an old man I won't think "Well my accounting degree got me an okay job..." and instead think "Oh man, my days in uni studying lit and writing and meeting other writers and forming my own style and embracing the things I love most were amazing!"

    I want to know, when I'm looking at a mirror as I lay on my deathbed, that the person looking back at me didn't waste their younger years doing things they hated and working at unsatisfying jobs. I want to see some old twat writer grinning like an idiot, ideas still churning behind crazy eyes, knowing not a single second was wasted.

    So I'd like to ask you something. What kind of person do you want to be? Do you want to be an average person who lived an average life and left an average gravestone? Or do you want to be the artist with the crazy eyes, that weird kid who strayed from the path and found something beautiful?

    It isn't about being remembered. It isn't about leaving a legacy. It's not even about the chance of becoming successful because of your art. It's about realising you only have one life and you don't have nearly enough time to waste living it 'normally'.

    89 comments · 1,799 views
  • 82w, 2d
    Good lord!

    That's a lot of followers!

    In celebration of this crazy occasion, I'd like to ask for your opinions on something. A lot of people come to me for writing advice, and while I don't claim to be the most skilful writer, I do know some useful bits of general knowledge. Would anyone be interested in occasional blog posts where I address the most common problems budding writers encounter?

    Love, Dawn

    50 comments · 757 views
  • 98w, 1d
    Where is the next chapter?

    I'm not dead, nor have I been incapacitated. Every time I set a schedule, life makes it abundantly clear that it disapproves.

    My apologies for the lack of updates. I've been so frustrated with having no time or energy to write that I cut myself off from a few things, this site being one of them.

    The chapter is coming, but I'm not going to be so foolish as to estimate when. I ask for your patience and understanding.

    On that note, I'd like to make a note here about some rather mean PMs and comments I've received. I'm happy you're enjoying the story so much that the absence of new chapters really agitates you, but come on. I write this for fun, this is not my day job, nor is it a legally binding contract. I can't put this above the rest of my life. I know most of you are very cool about it, but the mean ones really get to me.

    Anyway, love you all and hope to give you something soon <3

    59 comments · 2,007 views
  • 102w, 3d
    University Days next chapter RESULTS

    The poll results are in and out of the 2,000+ readers, almost 300 voted. It's cool, I ignore blog posts too.

    Anyway, the decision has been made and the next chapter will cover the day before Octavia's birthday (AKA awkward snowy cuteness).

    Now, I noticed something about those who voted for the other option. They seem to be under the impression that this will just be a fluffy, pointless chapter that is basically fan service. If it's my fault you think that, I apologise, for I have misled you. The chapter will develop Octavia and Vinyl's relationship in a very special way, one that I've been waiting to get to for some time. After some careful thinking, I believe the time is right. Here's hoping it gives them strength to stand against the mother, eh?

    27 comments · 1,023 views
  • 103w, 1d
    University Days next chapter - YOU decide

    So, I'm at a bit of an impasse.

    You see, I mentioned a while ago that I have an adorable Hearth's Warming Eve chapter planned. I originally intended to do Octavia's birthday (and consequently her mother's) arc before Christmas arrived in the real world. What I failed to anticipate was just how slowly the next chapters would come along. You all know the reasons, university etc. but that doesn't change the fact that I'm a little behind where I thought I would be.

    And here lies our problem.

    In the story, it is the middle of the year. Hearth's Warming, like Christmas, happens at the end of the year amongst the snow and merriment. Having a random Hearth's Warming chapter out of nowhere would be a little silly because nothing has been leading up to it.

    Thankfully, I was about to introduce snow anyway, so at least we have that part covered. I also think Octavia's mother could be en-route during the next chapter, which means I have one chapter before the birthday and her arrival.

    So my question to you is this: What would you prefer I do?

    1. Do a lovely snowy chapter about the day before Octavia's birthday (basically a holiday special without explicitly saying it's a holiday special)


    2. Skip straight to the birthday and ignore the holiday season entirely.

    I like involving you guys because you've all been so good to me, so I leave it up to you. Option 1 will give you a cute chapter at the cost of delaying the birthday for a chapter, while option 2 will make the Hearth's Warming chapter happen when it reaches that stage in-universe at the cost of being completely unrelatable.

    We've had a lot of conflict-free chapters lately, so I'll understand if you want me to get straight into the next arc.

    Vote for your choice here.

    68 comments · 684 views
  • ...

There is a dark tale behind the 'Love Poison' that very few know.

A lovely Princess and a lovestruck Prince.

How did things go so horribly wrong?



First Published
16th Feb 2012
Last Modified
22nd Apr 2012
#1 · 145w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Looking good so far.  The fourth-wall-break-ish part really got me.  Very nice.

And just because I feel like sharing, here's what I used for mood music while reading this:

#2 · 145w, 4d ago · · · The Prince ·


Thank you :D

That music fits pretty well, in my opinion.

#3 · 145w, 4d ago · · · The Prince ·

I enjoyed the journal-entry style.  Just a personal nitpick, I didn't like how Harrowed Crown's personality was depicted, but again, that's just me.  For what this is, it is very well done.  The subtlet change in his's journal entries - becoming more rushed-sounding - towards the end was a nice touch.

The way it ends rather suddenly works quite well.  It lets the reader put everything together in their head, making the impact stronger.

#4 · 145w, 1d ago · · · The Prince ·

Oh you posted it now, very nice. Glad you took my suggestions. I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story! Keep up the good work Dawn.

#5 · 145w, 1d ago · · · The Prince ·

Looks very promising! I'll definitely track this.

#6 · 144w, 5d ago · · · The Captain ·

Loving the story so far Dawn, this really should have more views since nobody else has seemed to explore this back-story yet. Sent you my edits and such via PM. Good luck with next chapter.

#7 · 144w, 4d ago · · · The Captain ·

Hey Dawn, sorry I couldn't get to read this sooner, I kinda didn't have my laptop with me and I'm still getting used to my new phone (which has internet now!), but luckily I did not spot any grammar mistakes :D

Cool chapter, and I think I'm taking a hint that Harrowed killed the guard for trying to interfere seeing as his journal stops right there.  This is becoming VERY interesting, I love this!

#8 · 144w, 2d ago · · · The Steward ·

In the fourth paragraph/ first of the actual hournal get rid of was and you're good!  Awesome chapter btwi

#9 · 144w, 2d ago · · · The Steward ·


Fixed, and thank you! :D

#10 · 143w, 5d ago · · · Prologue ·

This is going to be interesting. I'm watching this.

#11 · 142w, 6d ago · · · The Mother ·

God damn, you don't need me anymore!  This is like, 3 chapters of different stories where I haven't found any grammatical errors lol.  God, I love this chapter so much though.  This story deserves so much more recognition!

#12 · 142w, 6d ago · · · The Mother ·


Woo! Getting better at not making mistakes :D

Thanks, I do wish it had more readers but I'll get over it.

#13 · 141w, 4d ago · · · The Mother ·

what can i say about this story?

it's captivating as much as it is well written, and Chirpy Hooves' diary was really heartbreaking.

Keep writing, you're incredibly good at it, actually i dare say you're among the best writers here on fimfiction.

#14 · 141w, 4d ago · · · The Mother ·


Wow, really? That's a pretty massive compliment, thank you!

I'm glad you're enjoying my work :)

Good God, i love this story man.  Didn't spot any errors, just like usual.  Keep it up, Mr. Writer Overlord!


Thanks for checking man! The story is only as good as the people who edit it :)

Only one more chapter and the epilogue to go.

>>332474 Mixed reaction to there being a chapter and epilogue to go.

:yay: yay more


:applejackconfused: Why must your writing be so awesome?


I love knowing you're enjoying it so much! Hopefully the last parts will surpass your expectations :)

>>332862 :yay:

Stories like these drive me away from my own writing. :facehoof:

An awesome story I wish I had the talent to equal.

#22 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·

I was a little bit disappointed in the shortness, but oh well :twilightsmile:


#23 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·


Heh, sorry. This chapter was always going to be shorter than the others since it's only one entry.

Only the epilogue to go now!

#24 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·

>>381714 Oh okay.

ONLY AN EPILOGUE! :pinkiegasp:

Damn, I want more. Can't have too much more. :applecry:


#25 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·


I'm sorry! D:

Every story has to end eventually.

#26 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·

>>381822 Yeah. Write more stories! NOW. :flutterrage::twilightsmile:

#27 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·


Yes ma'am right away ma'am

#28 · 139w, 1d ago · · · The Father ·

>>381836 Why thank you kindly, good sir/madam.

Have a moustache. :moustache:

#29 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Figures he'd take the easy way out. :twilightangry2::flutterrage:

#31 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·


Thank you very much for sticking with it despite the long gaps between updates.

I'm glad you liked it :D

#32 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

:unsuresweetie: Are you serious? This is so short!

:pinkiehappy: Just kidding. It was awesome. To bad it had to end

#33 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Absolutely amazing.:rainbowkiss:

#35 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

are ther going to be any more chapters kind of ended on a cliffhanger there but good story though

#36 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

So, so very good! Having a story behind the Love Poison is amazing, and having extra cool stuff in there, like Ditzy's ancestry and other stuff, is just great.

Wait, it was about Love Poison, right?

#37 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·


Of course :)

#38 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

The first time I was presented this story, I did try to read it but then I saw the length of the chapters.

From the description, it seemed like a good story, but the chapters were simply too small for me to wait weeks just for half a k words. So I waited and, now that this is complete, I have read it in one single go. And I'm glad I did.

The story is very interesting and I like how it just transpires 'Equestrian Mythology'. I know the show itself has a lot of plotholes, but if you take this here story into consideration, then nopony in their sane mind would put the recipe for such potion on a easy-to-get book, but I digress.

One thing, though; Mystery. The story, although beautifully written and with a good plot, is not mysterious at all. You may catch yourself thinking about what would happen next, but that only lasts for a fickle second before one presses the "Next Chapter" button. For a story told by documents that belonged to several ponies, this story is awfully complete; the readers aren't left with anything to mull over after it ends. The only single piece of information that we don't have is Princess Poysun's fate. I mean- I know she is dead; but how did she die and why Harrowed Crown still lives?

Points that I very much enjoyed: Derpy's family origins (even though it was explicitly stated {to me, at least}) and the "mystery" surrounding the Princess Poysun.

Thumbs up. This is really good.

#39 · 131w, 6d ago · · · The Mother ·

SO WONDERFUL!!!!! these characters are really hitting me in the heart....:raritycry::raritycry:

#40 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

IM NOT CRYING MY ASS OFF!!!!!! :raritycry:

#41 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Fittingly, I loved this to death.


Thank you.

#42 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

This is truly a masterpiece. You took no more than a paragraph from one tiny scene in one measly episode and turned it into this epic tale. Well done, good sir. Fantastic work.

#43 · 79w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Those are remarkably short chapters you've got there.

#44 · 79w, 6d ago · · · The Prince ·

This prince seems like a nice guy. He'd be a good king, I can tell.

I wonder if we'll get some more insight into why Tia/Luna feels this is necessary?

#45 · 79w, 6d ago · · · The Captain ·

Poison? That's an ominous name to have.

I wish that Harrowed had bothered to record the coat color of the mysterious hooded pony. I'd rather like to know whether Tia is sabotaging her own offer as part of some complex scheme.

#46 · 61w, 5d ago · 1 · · Epilogue ·

I really enjoyed this story. I like how each chapter is written in another character's perspective and, though brief, the chapters fit perfectly into that fine line between telling us too little and telling us too much. The story meshes together very well: giving us hints and implications without explaining to us exactly what happens.

#47 · 61w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·


Thank you! I'm glad even my older stuff is still able to entertain.

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