Diagnosis Curve-ball

The Lunaverse202 stories ·2,571 members

Pinkamena's parents think there's something wrong with their daughter and decide to take her to see a doctor. Unfortunately, the doctor is a bit... Screwball-y.

A Lunaverse story for the May 2013 Writing Event. Non-canon.

Chapters (1)

Comments ( 11 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 11
- Newest First
- Oldest First

RainbowDoubleDash

RainbowDoubleDash #1 · May 15th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Well that was odd.

Thumbs up anyway.

Blackbelt

Blackbelt #2 · May 15th, 2013 · 2 · ·

IT MAKES PERFECT SENSE!!!!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!

Inferno demon Dash

Inferno demon Dash #3 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

I'M SO CONFUSED

Lev the Lurker

Lev the Lurker #4 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

2579185
Yeah...went through a few different ideas of someone to meet Screwball, but none of them really panned out. The one that I got the farthest on was with her and Luna playing a board game that changed everytime Luna looked away from it (started as checkers, then chess, shogi, mah jhong, dominoes, etc), but the conversation in between moves wasn't all that interesting. So yeah, decided "screw it, just going to finish the next one I think of," thought of Pinkie, and...yeah...

I do like the idea of Pinkie being part Discordian because it would explain A LOT but it would also just be weeeeeeeeeeeeeeird.

2579506
LIAR! IT DOESN'T EVEN MAKE ANY SENSE TO ME!!!!!!!!

Fizzy Orange

Fizzy Orange #5 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

I'm starting to really like this idea of the mysterious screwball showing up from time to time as a playful observer making snide comment and jokes while being seemingly entirely in somepony's head... all the while never really doing anything directly.

Heart of Blades

Heart of Blades #6 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

This was very interesting. Over all I really liked it. Seeing Pinkie as something more than pony but less than discordian makes a lot of since honestly. And this being the second time I know of of Screwball popping up makes me really long for more shorts in the same spirit as this. Screwball being a behind the scene player is just too fascinating an idea to ignore.

On the negatives, I think it could of been tweaked a tiny bit here and there to give it a more serious tone. It was almost too lighthearted and self aware, But these are just nit picks.

Over all, really dug this and so get a thumbs up

Lev the Lurker

Lev the Lurker #7 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

2580734

On the negatives, I think it could of been tweaked a tiny bit here and there to give it a more serious tone. It was almost too lighthearted and self aware, But these are just nit picks.

This was written late at night with a combination of first Mike's Hard Lemonade and then Mountain Dew Code Red to brew ideas and then keep me going, respectively. Trust me, I have more than mere nit picks about it myself

But yeah, I plan to do more of these whenever I get the chance, but coming up with a way to make her existence debatable is...tricky. That being said, I am eagerly looking forwards to doing some sort of side story for the whole Discord thing.

Mooncalf