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Oh... I see no better than the last time.

Let's try and give you a rage review... like always.

Another superb story.

You sir, are a god.

2579737
Fuck you, this story is a masterpiece.

The Gang Blows Up The Rainbow Factory.
You seem to have made a mistake in your title.
The Gang Gang Bang Kyle.

Comment posted by Private Riften Guard deleted May 15th, 2013

2579819 Sorry, master Chuck. I'm blind to see the beauty in this piece of literature. (If it is one.)

2579820 Oh, I think the error was made on purpose.

2579826
It's okay, you just aren't smart enough to see the symbolism.

2579837 Yes, I need more training. Forgive me, you amazing bastard.

2579826>>2579738
Ershwin Wholewheat is right, This guy's horrible stories are like meet ups.

Comment posted by The Guy on Your Right deleted May 15th, 2013

Adding your story to as many groups as you keep doing won't make it better, it just makes people want to downvote it for being bad AND filling their notifications with it's crappiness.

Edit: In fact just for adding it to two folders after I posted this comment you get my downvote, ya bastard.

OH FOR FUCK'S SAKE! WHY IS THIS BEING ADDED TO SO MANY GROUP FOLDERS?!

Hold it! THIS DOESN"T BELONG IN Entomophilia & Aracniphilia! There is no sex tag in sight! Or any mention of insects!!!! Hell, this story doesn't belong in most of the groups you've added it to!

Enough with the OCs'. Errybody hates a bad OC! Or is that just me... hope you get good one day and stop being a scrub like everyone I play Gears of War: Judgment OverRun or Survival with.

2579886 That's what pisses me off the most

Good grief. When you write dialogue of a different speaker, start a new paragraph.
For additional help, check the site's convenient Writing Guide under the "FAQ" tab near the top of your screen.
Have a nice day.

This must be some sort of attempt at a downvote record, judging from the flood of group notifications I got about it, and the actual quality of the fic.

This just got added to twelve groups and blew up my notifications.
:ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused:
Not gonna work, bud.

:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: SOOO MANY FOLDERS

Decent enough opening

Rainbow Dash's alarm clock began beeping at 7 'o' clock like it always did. "Goodmorning Tank." Rainbow said to her flying pet turtle as she yawned and stretched. She walked downstairs, made herself and Tank some breakfast, got in the shower, and left for town.

but after that, it's all down hill:applejackunsure:

She first walked to Sugarcube Corner and talked to Pinkie Pie before heading off to work.

what did they talk about? what was the purpose of the visit? I don't know, none of us know...but I'm sure I'm not the only one legitimately curious what the two of them talked about:rainbowderp:

Rainbow Dash was one of the nicest ponies in Ponyville. She would say hello and ask how every pony was doing when she walked by them

I didn't realise Rainbow and Pinkie shared their personalities:trixieshiftright:
also...Rainbow Dash traditionally flies everywhere she goes....she adores flying and hates walking

she was just ashamed of being a murderer and was angry at the fact that she was going to burn in hell for all eternity.

that's funny...she didn't seem all that ashamed whilst in the factory...in fact...

Who's next? Rainbow asked with an evil smirk on the face.

Rainbow Dash headed home. "Today was a good day of killing."

it would appear she rather enjoys working there...you might wanna do something about the inconsistency


2579826
there is no beauty...chuck's just easily impressed

2579892 He must be purposely trying to get burned to a crisp by people. Or he's just an assclown who thinks doing this will get his poorly written fic some attention. It worked, but it's all negative.

2579906 He's a failed troll who thinks it's funny to shit unsophisticatedly everywhere.

This should be fun to watch.

am i really the only one who's going to keep this thread alive?
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2579913
Yep, it's definitely him.

Too bad. I accidentally closed the tab that contained my honesty for this story.

Welp, I'll just rush it then.

The Gang Blows Up The Rainbow Factory

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Marcus and AMP never told their best friends Kyle and Gold that they worked at the Rainbow Factory and killed hundreds of ponies for the past 8 years.

I guess it's true, that when a stripper loses his, or her job in a strip club, they tend to get even more crazier jobs.

When Kyle discovers what they've been up to when he visits Cloudsdale, Rainbow Dash has to stop them from getting the word out about the Factory.

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Rainbow Dash's alarm clock began beeping at 7 'o' clock like it always did. "Goodmorning Tank." Rainbow said to her flying pet turtle as she yawned and stretched. She walked downstairs, made herself and Tank some breakfast, got in the shower, and left for town.

You forgot to mention that Dashie, and Tank had a quickie.

She would say hello and ask how every pony was doing when she walked by them.

And if Dashie's in the mood, she might even rape a random stallion on the sidewalk.

Public sex was always the highlight of her morning.

"Stop calling me that!" Thunder yelled as he began chasing her. Dash laughed as she ran from him.

Ugh... mares this days are such a tease.

Rainbow and Thunder both put their hooves on the scanner, it beeped and a large electronic metal door opened and Dash and Thunderlane walked in.

The beeping sound effect says it all.

The main room was entirely white with rainbow related decorations, ie; a rainbow fountain.

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IT'S A RAINBOW FOUNTAIN, BITCHES!!!

They walked near the main desk, they punched their cards in, and headed for the elevator.

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Marcus was a genius with computers and technology. They allowed him to work at the factory despite him being an earth pony since he was one of the smartest ponies in Equestria.

Well, I guess someone didn't do his research on ponies and clouds.

It's charging. It'll be ready in 10 minutes." Marcus replied happily.

Because Marcus used it earlier, so it had to be recharged.

Damn, he showed his balls no mercy.

Anyways, I'm going to copy this review again.

look at all those downvotes.. What you think lambchop?
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Me to... me to

2579927>>2579913 Just noticed that on his profile it says that he's a member of the tollfics group... adding your story to irrelevant groups doesn't make a story a trollfic... he's more of a fail than I thought.

After a hard day's work of slaughtering innocent children, Rainbow Dash headed home. "Today was a good day of killing."

Wow.
So casual.

On other notes, the story feels rushed and just sloppy.
And you might want to hit enter a little more for spacing. It's not wall of text, but it still made my eyes go :derpytongue2:

2579886 Let's see. As much as I don't want to say it, but it's not the author who's placing his story in the groups.

There might be an 'unknown bastard' who's doing it.

And if I say unknown, I meant the one person who've joined a lot of groups.

Case solve, since you can't place your story in a group you didn't join.

2580029 You can't? Huh, wasn't aware of that. Never tried to add a story myself. In that case, either someone hates this guy, wants to be an assclown and troll us readers, or this guys has an alternate account. I'm guessing that the founder of a group get's notified when a member adds a story to the group. If that's the case then this will hopefully be solved soon. Hmm... I wonder if there's a site rule against this sort of thing.

2580029
We must find and kill this bastard.

2580041 Oh Chuckward. I knew it was you. :twilightsmile:

I love you, you bastard.

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