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Rainbow's adventures in the other world have given Celestia pause. Should humans and ponies be kept separate? As she seeks an answer to this question, she'll discover exactly what humans mean when we say "Vale of Tears."
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Yes.
2523322 Maybe not. Think of the influence they might have. If we saw that stories could be real, we might, I dunno, sober up a bit, or find something locked away inside us that was called kindness. I know a few people who could use that sort of awakening, even if it might seem a bit rude to them at first. If we learned to live in harmony with ponies, it might not be so impossible to learn to live in harmony with each other.
I want another chapter!
2523558
That was a joke; the central point of the joke being that My Little Dashie spinoffs need to stop being a thing. It wasn't good to begin with.
Honestly, I liked your story but I am just sick of My Little Dashie spin offs or epilogue like stories. My Little Dashie is right now overused.
you will have to try very hard not to screw this up.....
i hope you dont fail...
2523588
Did you actually read it, or did its very appearance inspire you to comment that way?
2523993
Both.
2524001
If you knew you weren't going to like it, why did you bother?
2523558
If only everyone had the qualities f friendship in them. Maybe the world would be a better place...
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Because I like to see if someone will ever pull it off right. Which, despite your good writing abilities, did not happen here. It's just an oversaturated market, like gaming and FPSes.
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Wow, you just said something nice. It's buried in cynicism, but it's there, and it only took you four comments to do it.
Bear in mind: this isn't even close to finished, and the original story is only the foundation of mine, which is going to go much deeper than the relationship between a man and his pony-daughter. If that's one of the problems you have with other sequels, you might like where this goes.
And may I just politely suggest that you be a bit more positive in your critique next time, instead of acting like I pissed in your Cheerios by daring to write a My Little Dashie sequel of my own?
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I'll try, next time. :3
Dear Aksel
I gave this story al like, even though I have no intention of reading it. everyone deserves a fair chance for their stories, even if the Idea of the story is somewhat over played. Don't let dislike's or negative reviews discourage you. Just because your story uses a Cliché plot, that doesn't mean it cant still be good. You would not believe how many good stories I have seen discontinued because the Author could not put up with negative reviews.
Your Friendly Bookworm
~Bookmark.
2525774
Much appreciated.
2525805Your welcome.
2525774 So wait... you're saying you gave it a thumbs up, even though you didn't read it? How does that help the author of the story? Giving someone a thumbs out of sympathy isn't helping him. Someone could rather use a negative review with constructive critism than a random thumbs up to keep his spirits up.
2525828How many people gave it a Thumbs down with out reading it, just because it has a Cliché Plot?
2525877 Ask the people, not someone who hasn't given the story a thumbs up or down yet.
2525917Let me rephrase, how many people do you think will dislike this story without reading it?
Like I have said, I've plenty of stories go dead from the Author becoming discouraged by negative reviews from people that won't give the story a chance. I liked the story in order to counter act people like that.
2525966 Aha, well in that case, I think a lot of people give it thumbs down because it looks cliché. And while I can agree with giving something a thumbs down before you gave it a chance isn't exactly right, I can see where those people are coming from. Some people find the original fine as it is, they don't need a sequel. While others don't want a sequel, because they don't want the original continued, because in their eyes, it wasn't... good.
And I propably stepped on my own foot, saying that I can see where people are coming from when they thumb down a story because it looks bad, but don't agree with you giving it a thumbs up without reading it yourself. But the problem with that is that you could have just said:
without giving his story a thumbs up. You don't need to give him a heads up to show it, just tell him that writing your first story is always gonna be bringing heat down on him, especially if it's not written well. I'm not saying the story is bad, seeing as I didn't read it, but it happens to a lot of beginner writers.
I understand what you mean by counter acting towards the haters who dislike without reading, but giving a thumbs up to fight back, isn't the best way to do it. Atleast, in the way I view it.
2526064Differant opinions for separate people than.
2526071 I guess so. All those comments was a lot of fun to write, thanks for that.
your welcome
It took me a little while to figure out why I was already following you, but I figured it out when I realized that this story seemed strangely familiar.
I think My Little Dashie is overrated, and none of the other sequels are very good - the focus is on getting them back together again, which avoids any emotional complexity. So far this one doesn't seem to suffer from that - there's plenty of interesting things to explore, like how Dashie reacts to Dad having a family of his own and how his wife and daughter react to Dashie, especially since his daughter is a MLP fan. While I'm sure that's been done before in other stories, having the character be the daughter of the Dad from My Little Dashie makes it much more interesting.
I hope you decide to focus on the personal and emotional issues more than how humans react to ponies in the real world. While that could be interesting, that's not really what My Little Dashie was about, nor is how the setup so far appears to be heading.
2525774
While I won't be a narcissist and say that it was great, I've gone through something similar. We say "Don't Judge a book by its cover" but then they say "THIS ISN'T A BOOK, IT'S THE INTERNET!"
Haters gonna hate and all that. Don't let it get you down, just keep moving forward. Here, have a Dashie
EDIT: Just finished reading the first chapter, here's my reaction
. Keep it up, only stop if you need to stop.
When I first saw this I thought this might be crap but I gave it a try 8/10 I didn't really like dashie to come to early in the story but whatever. I hope you make more also gave you a like keep up the good work
Let me tell you. Good
fuckingluck. I wrote a MLD sequel myself, and I got so much flak from it in the beginning that I was almost scared to keep writing it. But I did. And let me tell you, it paid off. A lot of people liked it, more than those who didn't. And I even made most of them cry from my ending. The fact that I could do that was so amazing that I'm proud I stuck it out to the very end. So I say, good luck because you are going to get a lot of down voters who don't even read the story. They'll do it because it has My Little Dashie in the name.Keep writing man. I'll leave with a thumbs up, and a wish for the best.
Yes.Yes Just fucking Yes. This NEEDS TO BE COONTINUE. OR I WILL CONTINUE ITFOR YOU.
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I've got very specific ideas for where I'm going to take this. I just need to actually...do it.
Continue please!
*smoke bomb* I have not read anyothers spinoffs but I can't wait for your next chapter *smoke bomb and jumps out window*
This story has been reviewed by: The Equestrian Critics Society
Story Title: My Little Dashie: Coalescence
Author: Aksel
Reviewed by: Shahrazad
This is a direct sequel to My Little Dashie, so reading that story first is a must in order to enjoy or understand this one. The story picks up twelve days after Dash has returned home. Of course, Dash’s adoptive father has twelve years of additional events, experiences, family and, in short: life. Dash herself misses him greatly and, true to form, she can’t resist trying to reconnect with him.
The quality of the writing is well above average, with its balance of description and characterization. The beginning sets a sturdy foundation for the rest of the story but, at this time (10/14/13), that’s all there is: a foundation. The story stops before it really gets going, which is a shame, because what little there is looks polished. It’s painful to stop abruptly; if readers want to read more about My Little Dashie, then this is a good start, but be prepared to be left unfulfilled.
Full Review (spoilers)
Score: 7.0/10
3173686 when are you continuing?
Continue?
I love it so far
2523993 pls continue. If you don't...
Is this canceled?