His name is Free, and he was a slave. But when he found his opening and escaped his owners, he finds that the wasteland holds its own horrors. Will he remain uncorrupted? Or will the wasteland wittle away all that he holds dear until he breaks?
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Very nice chapter WeaponPrime!
I can already detect a lot of trouble for Free and Jerry with the slavers and the new mysterious force in the dig site.
Can't wait to see where this goes!
FP
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Thank you very much! I'm glad you're enjoying it!
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I'm glad you like it!
Great chapter I like the way the story is coming out, the characters are interesting and the pace of narration is perfect.
The feels!
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I was really trying to put the feels out there. I'm glad someone felt them.
Hey! Nice chapter, it started our fairly normal, exploring abandoned ruins, and fighting ghouls. Well, until Free got deeper into the museum. That craziness in the dig site just reminded me of Dunwitch Borers from Fallout 4. Jeez that place was scary... Anyway, nice chapter, looking forward to see what happens next.
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Glad you like it Chary.
Chapter 3 is at about the half-way mark towards completion but will be a bit shorter than the others.
Stay tuned!
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Funny thing is that in The Pitt were the slavers meant to be the good guys, but the second in command got greedy and screwed things up, leader guy is actually good guy that press them all a bit hard and is simply blind and mislead by his second in command. Gotta get that sweet sweet auto axe!
... Welp upwards and onwards to the chapter at hand!
Tsk tsk, a robot that dosen't know the time! For shame Robronco
Its not often that I catch myself laughing when I read FoE, so my hat off to you for that one!
Welp, this whole things smells far away of Dunwich and star spirits. Run Free run, no elder god, no matter how warm and friendly their words are, want you any good!
Nitpicks:
"Fricassee nodded and waved everyone forward and into the building." need a line before this
"“With a pip-buck on his leg?”" Capital letters
"Bruiser peered down the hallway and then looked back towards the robot.
“What sort of problem?” he asked." Could be made into one line, and its pretty redundant to say that he ask it as he have a question mark... ohh and need an extra line before this
"“Yes, my good sir! Do you have a question?”" While it is a polite bot do I not think that it would call a special needs pony for sir... maybe "little friend" or "history explores". Something lovely demeaning and silly as only confused bots would do.
"She let out a shriek of terror as one snapped its jaws closed just shy of her rear and put on a burst of speed..." Close
"I quickly recounted the events of the last few minutes to her" Need a line before this,
"“Better now?” Fricassee asked. Stitch blinked a few times and nodded." And this.
"“But now we need get out of here" to
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Glad I could make you laugh. :)