Am back, may continue writing.
Seven.
That is his call sign, and he is of the oldest of the Changelings under Chrysalis' rule, and he is dying.
An assassination plot foiled, he thinks of what his actions will mean for him in the end.
A.N.~Just a little one shot I thought up on a whim. Enjoy.
Or you know, a two or three shot.
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Wow thats a good short piece of little feels strike ;p
Argh my feels ;_; ~ Despite being a tragi-phobe, that was a very enjoyable and well-crafted piece.
Now to go see if you have more things to read :O
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I'm glad that, despite the circumstances of the story, you two enjoyed it so much. I'm not usually a fan of tragedy's myself, but this one was more bittersweet because I add a sort of promise in their that Seven would see Twilight again.
Made me feel better that way.
Very well done. I liked it.
2466743>>2471161>>2475573 Even though it says complete, I added a somewhat happier 'epilogue' in that will be published upon my awakening from sleep tomorrow.
It makes it all just a little bit less tragic in my opinion, but just as feelsy.
Also a rough chance of a third and final 'epilogue' after this one too, but no promises.
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Even though I find this a strange, if not downright hypocritical thing to say, I don't think it needs one. The story has a great premise, and while it IS a tragedy (and thus a bit sad :v), it's very well executed and wraps itself up nicely ~ plus, you just went at the thing the right way (tragedy doesn't need to beunbelievably depressing, as gore doesn't need to be excessive in all regards).
... Of course, I'll still be reading it the minute it gets updated, because I really think anything you add could only make it more enjoyable
2490387 Essentially, I read and reread this multiple times, and while I thoroughly enjoy it too, I find myself hating how I just left Twilight hanging there.
Here's this mare, who never experienced on bit of romantic interest in her entire life, and then some random Changeling come along.
Don't get me wrong, the new chapter is not too terribly long at all(just over 500 words) but I can't help but feel that I want to wrap this up and give it a happier ending.
Besides, there are enough tragedies in the real world, why should Twilight and Seven have to suffer in theirs?
Very nicely done
I dearly hope you meant "come."
2492089 Nope, welcome to proper English at its truest form, before the 21st century came by and fucked it up.
'-cum-'anything used to be a way of stating that something was known as one thing popularly, but another to a smaller grouping.
Such as a soldier-cum-bard. That would be a soldier, but if needed to his friends/family, a tale weaver or song spinner.
Sadly I had forgotten the...less than desirable new meaning to that word.
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That meaning still wouldn't really make much sense, however, in that context. Besides, it's always best to write as if your readers are eleven year olds who think "potty words" are funny and avoid anything that can be misinterpreted.
2509339 In the context of the story, a pupil-cum-adopted daughter would imply that to Equestria's main understanding, Heartsworn is Twilight's pupil, but is also more quietly known as her adopted daughter to the more 'in' on the royal dealings.
And damnit, learn proper English!
Please 
So... maybe it's just me, but I'm incredibly confused right now. I know that Chryssy and 6 others tried to kill Twilight, and Seven apparently saved them, but I still don't get how or why
Maybe it's the fact that it's 0130 and I'm not all here right now. I'll reread this tomorrow and try to make sense of it.
On a technical note, I spotted numerous grammatical mistakes throughout the story, and the formatting issues with the paragraphs drove me insane. I know that seems trivial to gripe about, but it still diminished the final presentation of the story and deserves rectification.
Overall, I really don't have anything to say, positive or negative. Again, I'll give it another read and see if my thoughts change.
2603051 I'm sure there are plenty of grammar mistakes, as most of my writing takes place in betwixt 12 am and 6 am and my mind is generally tired. If you could give me a holler after your reread of the story about the formatting that would be great too.
As for why Seven saved Twilight, well, he fell in love with her from a distance after seeing her at the wedding. When the queen ordered her death out of simple anger and as a wish for petty revenge Seven decided he'd had enough. Chryssy had led the Changelings to the brink of extinction, with only seven left, and her only goal left was not to save the race, but to kill one pony(that Seven had come to love from a distance) out of petty anger.
Fed up with her stupidity, and refusing to stand for the attack, Seven decided he would fight back.
By the gods... that song at the end.. coupled with imagining the scene in the story, It almost brought a tear to my eye.
Eeyup.
Favoriting this. This was amazing.
When it said that Seven was on a hill it reminded me of the place Blu was waiting for King in the story "The Great Slave King", except there wasn't a tree that Seven was sitting under.
I feel like critiquing this in 2019 would be pointless, but... I'll give my thoughts. There is no build-up, nothing to make the audience invested. This feels like if the final chapters and epilogue of a much longer story was published on its own and cross-bred with its own cliffnotes to produce... well, whatever this was. I don't know if you're still writing, but I hope you've gotten far better in the past 6 years.
This is a nice little story. Great job at this.