this story is really good. although some of the things seems a bit wrong.
I really like the atmosphere and the speed story develops.

the lax handling of sex and addiction , is a nice bonus.

like, fav and waiting for more

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send me what you think is wrong and i'll try to fix it, I have no editors so any fixes would be greatly welcomed

2520824 sorry I cant my english is to bad and most of det things is characters that do not behave as I think they should and plot holes.

but dont let it stop you. I love the filings I get from the story having a godlike evil Sprik .
everything seems to go bad in a good way. I hoper still for a happy ending ...
plz let them keep their innocence no.

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I see

Those seals on Pinkie, Dash, and Twilight worry me somewhat.