Hey, I'm Pup. I want to tell you about my story, my life.
My pack hated me for having a birth defect, this very strange defect rendered me a vegetarian.
My mother said she always hated me and the I was the biggest disappointment in the world. And I always believed her.
I was cast out of my pack because I was "a freak" as they usually put it.
My sister had been run off or killed because she was nice to me, and got caught reading.
I came to ponyville because, she said to, she told me to "do what Vinyl told me to do, and to get an education for myself."
I settled in very quickly when I was found unconscious by Vinyl and Octavia. WAY TO QUICKLY IF YOU ASK ME. I mean I barely even know them and they say...
Oops sorry guys I'm rambling well anyway enjoy the story.
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anyone who can draw a fanart photo that fits the description of pup, and is willing to. Please send me a PM on this site saying you would do so.
Thank you,
Love Brony laughsatme
P.S. Bananas for anyone who cares.
Wow this going to be a great story in the future.
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Well thank you! That means alot! ;-/)
Do a bit of Grammar checking and you should be all set. I'm not sure what it is...but something seems.....off...
Then again, it's me. Which means it could be anything, or nothing. But since I can't point it out, that means you did well enough to convince My OCD that it was fine as is.
This chapter, If you're Familiar with mission Rankings in Shadow The Hedgehog, is about....C Rank.
*From highest rank to lowest, it goes-
A(MAZING!)
B(damn...youre shredding through these levels!)
C(ongratulations, you're Halfway there)
D(Enough to show you know what you are doing, but still have room for improvement)
E(Default ranking/no points)
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It's not you I speed through it and I shouldn't have Pup is really tramatized. And I introduce his cat and vinyl and octavia way to early.
And I am not a bit sorry;-/)
Ain't I the worst... Oh crap don't answer that forget I said it.
Shit oh shit where is the damn banana when you need him
Your grammar, to put it bluntly, sucks. Your first chapter doesn't even have sentences! It's just a few long strings of words. The first chapter is what determines whether people stay or not. First impressions are the most important, and you messed that up big time.
I noticed your latest chapter has better grammar, but it still has a lot of room for improvement. It's also rather bland. The sentences are incredibly simple.
Read this. It'll help.
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Thankyou for that really I've never been good at grammar. I appreciate your constructed criticism and will read the link and then edit the chapters.
Thank you!
Good story,
Some grammatical errors but I don't really pay attention to those ;)
(Seem familiar brony laughsatme) lol
Pup for the save.
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Fuck... Yes.
Permission granted to come aboard the S.S Banana.
(Sorry I just had to)
Great story...I liked it a lot...
~Ego sum salutary
(I think you know what that means
)
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Tale non est ut S.S. musa sapientum fixa, et si id quod in ea esset
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Ha latin rocks
(And I know exactly what it means)
MORE F*CKING MORE!!
Please more.. This is so fucking great..
Sorry Octey
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Hmm well I am trying but Syphony Waves is a hard character to make a POV chapter for.
....seems familiar.
Anyway, so far so great.
Godamnnit mate worst place to stop EVER.
Continue this amazing story and I'll start pushing myself harder to write more I guarantee you
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Hey thanks!! That means a lot coming from my favorite author.
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Well not what I usually find in the comment section... But it works.
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Actually Im working on the ninth chapter. So don't worry just be happy.
;-/)
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Lmao SHE KILLED THE F*CKING PEBBLE
WHAT THE F*CK
Thanks for that that was the funniest thing I've read for a while
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Actually I'm not familiar with a game made for shadow the hedgehog but I have seen him on the shows.
That's a pretty little killing machine.
Sad chapter has sad
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I know, I was trying to get people to open up and learn how hard this is on Octavia.
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There is a game made for him. Its called "Shadow The Hedgehog"
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Well my dear sir I do believe I will find and play the fuck out of that shit.
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Is for PS2
2696374fuck
Hey crystal I got two really good questions for you...
A) Would you rather like in the tardis by yourself, or RD's cloud house with RD herself?
B) who is your favorite doctor?
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RD. No question.
David is best regeneration.
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Thank you... Was that first question hard?
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Not at all, I'd hate to have a TARDIS. I'd either fuck up all of reality or be forever alone
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But what it you could have the tardis and RD knew how to work it and you guys lived in it...
Would you do it then...
And I must agree with you on David he is just beast.
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I would love all of that.
And yes, David is the best, but Matt is still epic
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Yeah, knowing me I'd spill juice on something important though.
The reason I even brought this up is because I just got done whatching your epic Fangasm one a certain minecraft survivor mod. I swear it took me an hour to stop laughing.
Now I like doctor who as much as the next brony, but that was crazy. I think we've found the number one doctor who fan.
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hahaha
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XD
Sorry everypony I'm affriad chapter 9 won't be out as soon as the others... That being because I have alot of distractions involving a kid I attacked and the good old piece of shit court dates ant I may get sent to JDC for about three months.
Sorry.
But if I do write the chapter before the court date, then I will post it ASAP
Amazing!
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Thanks Tia,
Listen if ya ever need help with editing just tell me.
I hope ya get time to use some of your brilliance in words.
Your friend,
Max Schultz
Niceness is nice
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;-) yup
So how's that story with Rainbow Coming?
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Poorly =(
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Sad... Well I don't know what to tell you.
I just read the starting over series for like the sixth time... And I'm still not bored with it XD I'm weird like that.
Epic story
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Thank you.
Good job, keep writing please :)
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Ok
I'm having trouble imagining what Pup looks like.
I imagine him to look like a pony x wolf thing