Moving to a new town has its benefits. New friends, new school and new opportunities. But it also comes with its drawbacks as high school student Peter Parker is about to learn. After leaving his hometown of Manehattan Peter is enrolled at Celestia's School for Gifted Minds in the capital city of Canterlot. Peter quickly finds that he fits in more than ever before in this school and things go well. But no city is without its dangers as Peter must quickly don the mask of Spider-Man once more in order to save Canterlot from a threat most ancient. The night is cold, and just as eager to squash this meddling spider at the first chance
Chapters (13)
It's not a particularly bad story, but it did nothing to really grab my attention.
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Give it some time and maybe I'll be able to pull something off when he gets into costume
Eh, why not... I will give this story a shot. I am on my mobile at this time, so I will edit in any grammar mistakes I saw later. Till then? Not a bad start.
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Thanks, I hope you check back and enjoy it when the ball starts rolling
Not bad for a first chapter.
You use the word "before" a little too much in the beginning, but other than that...
You have my interest.
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I think I should take up the magical act of reading these things through before I post them shouldn't I? And thanks, I hope to keep that interest for the next chapter.
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Wow, thumbs up for quick replies.
I just hope that you enjoy quips, sarcasm and witty banter. Because a Spiderman story without those is like a party without Pinkie Pie: Feasible, but unlikely.
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And that's why this might be difficult: living up to the legendary loose tongue of the webslinger. I'll try
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If you need an assistant quiper...
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Indeed.
Easy there tiger. Take your time I mean Rome wasn't built in a day.
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Understood. I tried to avoid and insta ship but I guess the two of them just hit it off on a good note
3036781 Is that so. I went throw the same, but I got better.
Also love this story so much fighting and meantions of the movie senses
. A new girl for parker. Very INteresting
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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoy it.
3036802 I enjoyed every moment of the story.
I am still enjoying this story. Though you have grammatical mistakes in a lot of places (found a boatload of them in this chapter and chapter two, majority of them in regards to punctuation at the end of sentences in quotations). Do you have this story on G-Docs... I wouldn't mind proof reading this story for you.
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Thanks but I've just had one of my proof readers have a basic go over of the story and I know that once I go through the story myself I should be able to fix any mistakes I made. I'm just impatient is all
Maybe Peter should get himself a second, less suspicious bag.
Regarding the quips, we're definitely off to a good start. But what really made this chapter for me...
Dang... His excuse to Twilight was ridiculously believable, too. Spidey knows how to avoid tropes.
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Or instead of a bag, like my friend pointed out to me, JUST WEAR THE COSTUME UNDERNEATH ALL HIS CLOTHES.
And thanks, the Swedish thing just sort of came to me. I'm glad you liked it
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Underneath his clothes? But that's what Superman does, and no selfrespecting hero wants to be compared to Superman.
Besides, that would be such a hassle everytime he has to visit the bathroom.
(Interesting question: Whenever Peter Parker leaves the house - considering his luck - does he have to turn into Spiderman more often than he has to do... that.)
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If so... I can certainly make it happen
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What have I DONE?
You jinxed the one Marvel comic hero that you actually enjoy reading.
Why thank you, brain, for your insightful insight on the matter.
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Or not, I don't want to upset anybody here
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Please, dear, I'm just making a drama.
Besides, it would have happened either way... Spidey doesn't need my careless choice of words to have bad luck.
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I guess you're right.
And thanks for the watch, means a lot to me
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You're very welcome.
P.S.: If you're interested in Crossovers, I'm doing a One Piece crossover. Don't know if you read any mangas, of course.
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I'll check it out... if... my ADHD allows me to sit and read through a story like I used to be able to
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Oh. And yet you've dished out those chapters at an impressive speed.
I am impressed.
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Why thank you...
OH LOOK! A SHINY!
whoa, whoa. i'm confused here. Peter is a pony, right? if so what does he look like?
or is he human?
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Well try to imagine the Andrew Garfield Peter mixed in with a normal earth pony with a light brown body and dark brown hair. He's anthropomorphic so he's a pony with a humanoid body. Hope this clears it up for you
Wow, I really timed my first read through of this story well! Excellent story, I look forward to seeing where you take this, and I love how you kept everything from the new SM movie. Keep up the good work!
Wow this is a good story love it keep it up !!!!!
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You know something, I'm quite ashamed to admit it took me a good minute to register what you meant when you said SM movie
But other than that I'm glad you're enjoying the story and I hope you'll stick around for when it really kicks off
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Thank you!
I actually think this is the most fun I've had writing a fanfic because of all the positive comments I keep getting. It strokes my ego like a fine Persian Pussy Cat
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Well, in my book, you've got me to stay, this story is just to epic to pass up
Just keep the quality up, and you'll have a committed fan!
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Two new chapters already?! What the hay?
Are you somehow being distracted from possible distractions, or how does that work.
I- I- bluh- ...the French Toast.
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The word ADHD is attention deficit hyperactivity disorder. The attention thing is a lesser degree with me but it completely shuts me out of anything I have to FORCE myself to do like when I lose interest in them (fanfics for example)
But the thing that's pushing me to write is the creative aspect to my case of Aspergers I have (high functioning for clarification) which is where I will set myself to something and go for it until I either achieve it or die trying... or until the whole ADHD thing comes in and forces me to give up.
In summation you should see the SIZE of my medication drawer!
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Sounds like something I would do...
Haven't had a doctor call it anything, though. Maybe I'm really just lazy.
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Mehbeh.
3037117 Ah okie dokie. Well if you ever need my services, just let me know.
Ohhhhhhh shiiiiit cadence what have you done?
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She needs to keep as a Princess like this:
And less like this:
Spidey wakes up to a blinding pain in his back, but after getting some magical painkillers he immediately jumps out the window to make his usual rounds?
He also seems to have surprisingly little respect for the bats that were tearing his costume apart a few moments earlier.
The chapter is good, as always. I just like nitpi- I mean, giving constructive critic.
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The whole 'who uses bats' thing was a discrete joke that poked fun at Batman Begins, the scene where he escapes Arkham Asylum by summoning bats to fight off and scare the SWAT officers away.
I love that movie but I just thought it was funny
And as for the magical painkillers schtick Celestia had spent the past three days healing all of his injuries from the fight with the Nightspawn and the back seizure was a large tear in his muscle that was being made worse but his conscious movement. Celestia's hand on his chest allowed the muscle on his chest that links to the bag to grow and knit back together. Basically she healed him, she didn't numb his pain
RANT OVER.
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I figured that it was some kind of jab at Batman.
I wasn't too sure on the muscle, though. I just knew that he was in a lot of pain, even after three days of continued magic healing. But it's magic, so what the hay.
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Well it took Celestia three days to put almost every vital organ back together as well as completely rewire his nervous system as well as gather the dust that was left of most of his legs and build his bones back up. So yeah, it wasn't a very fast process.
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...
ouch...
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And he had to webswing about six miles to get back to Celestia remember?
Mega ouch